Comment from MelB

Excellent

Hi, this is a fun Haiku you have penned. Nothing more fun for a kid than doing a cannonball into a pool or lake in the summertime.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2017

Thank you, MelB, for your great review and comments for my summer haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

I think every kid does at least one cannon ball into the water and if they haven't done one they need to one. It's a mandatory thing I think for a child. I'm sure many can relate to this

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017

Thank you for your kind review and comment for my summer haiku, EL. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your haughty. I agree with you...it's a mandatory thing for all kids.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Ha, this brings back memories.....a swing out over water then the drop....happy days.
You have penned this memory beautifully.
Schools out.......excellent execution to finish a lovely haiku
Have a great evening

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 14-Mar-2017

So glad this brought you some happy memories, YNWA! Thank you for your kind review and comment for my summer haiku. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your haughty. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

Hi, Indy. Well of course I remember swinging from a rope over the swimming hole. We liked that better than going to the many beaches that were nearby on Long Island. Great memory here and well done, my friend. Bob

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017

Hi Bob. Thank you for your great review and sharing your memories of your summer swimming hole. I appreciate your kind response.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

Comment from mvbrooks

Excellent

We just started a much deserved "spring break" in the midst of significant state-mandated testing. The image of this poem--seeing the child swing out over the lake and just let go of the rope, is very timely and promises an upcoming summer of laughter and fun.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017

Thanks so much for your kind review and comments for my summer haiku, mvbrooks. I'm delighted the imagery worked, and hope you have a great, relaxing spring break.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from irishauthorme

Exceptional

Remarkable memory arouser(sp?)! I remember watching the older guys swing out and let go a long time before I was able to muster up the courage to hold tight and take that jump off the bank. But Oh Boy, after that first shot into that coll, refreshing water I could never get enough.
Sad how we lose the simple joys of childhood.
Thank you for this look back!
irish

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017

Memory arouser...I like that, Irish! I like arousing your...thoughts about a time in your kidhood that was happy and fun. We don't have to lose all those childhood joys. Wanna meet me at the swimming hole? You bring the rope. LOL

Thank you, Irish, for your awesome review and that purdy extra star. Your kind response made me smile and made my day better.
Smiles,
Sassy :-)

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Oh yes my friend you know when schools out I do staying at my sisters at the moment and the children have been constantly bouncing a ball against my sisters side wall so all I could hear was banging in her hallway , your poem expresses memories of days gone by when you used to get the hot summer days I enjoyed regards Jill

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017

Thank you for your wonderful review and comments for my summer haiku, Jill. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thanks for your kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi IndianaIrish - a good haiku written in memory of your days doing just what you mention in the poem. Yes, I remember also and now watch my grandchildren doing the same. Your lines one and tewo interconnect perfectly and line three is a good and appropriate satori. Good entry to the book. Warm regards Dorothy x

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017

Thank you for your wonderful review and comments for my summer haiku, Dorothy. I truly appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. Thanks for your kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Father Flaps

Excellent

Hi Karyn
The unsung hero in your poem is... the Tree. Without it, there would be no giant splash. Nothing to tie the rope to!
Your poem creates a great image of summer, and warm days. In mid-March, it's just what the doctor ordered. It's freezing up here in Saint John, New Brunswick. The thermometer isn't cooperating at all this year, although we didn't have a bad winter. It's time for winter to walk away, and spring to wake up!
Lots of "K" and "L" sounds in your poem, and the third line reflects the first two. When I was a kid, it was the best day of the year when the bell rang for the last time in late June... it peeled FREEDOM!
Nice haiku in 4-5-2 syllables. Good haiku poems don't need artwork. The picture is there in your head.
Hugs
Kimbob

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017

Thank you for another amazing review, Kimbob. I truly enjoy reading your comments. Thank you for your encouraging response to my summer haiku, and I'm pleased you enjoyed the imagery. Yeah, have to have that tree in just the right spot so the rope will swing you out to the water. We've had a spring-like February here in Indiana, but last week the temperatures zoomed down, and now they are predicting 3-4 inches of snow this coming week. Good thing about snow in March is it usually doesn't stay around very long. Thanks again, Kimbob.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

Comment from Antoine Charlemaine

Excellent

Yes, many fond memories roused by this one! Especially when we became teenagers and the girls joined us... :)
I'm not sure about the cannonballing bit, though, all the same. With me it was more of a bomb and, worst case scenario, a belly flop. Not such a good memory! Thwack! Ouch... (Not impressive if the girls were watching...)
I was tempted to make a comment about you writing hair-dos rather than reading my next instalment...but that would be churlish and immature of me. Wouldn't want you thinking me churlish or immature, so I won't make such a comment.
Question: what is meant by 'summer kigo'?

Tarzan Ant xx

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017

LMAO! TarzanAnt! I'm almost afraid to start reading revision #4 in fear #5 will soon appear with a huge warning to ignore all previous editions under penalty of cyber destruction.

In haiku, nature is usually (there are some non-nature haiku forms) the primary object of the observable moment shared in the poem. Kigo is the required word used in the poem that signifies what season of the year the poem's moment is portrayed. It can be obvious like summer, or August, or sun's warmth...or subtle like shade, sunglasses, beer, or playing in water. There are several "lists" of kigo sites that name the hundreds of kigo for each season. That help?

Thanks for sharing your memories of summer, swimming, girls, and bellyflops. You didn't do a flop just to get the attention of those girls fawning and oohing and ahhing at your red six-pack belly, did you?

Thanks for your awesome review, Tarzan.
Smiles,
JaneKazza :-)

reply by Antoine Charlemaine on 12-Mar-2017

Bahahahahahaha! Hello Jane. Fancy a little swing through the jungle? I know a nice spot, down by the river... No, I promise, no more revisions! No. 5 will be yours... I do note, however, that the weekend is rapidly disappearing for you (Mime's already over; it's 7;25 am on Monday), so I guess I'll be waiting until next weekend. Maybe I WILL get another revision or two in by then... AH! (light bulb moment) I understand your tactics, now! The longer you take to read, the less work you have to do! Clever lady!
Thanks for explaining kigo...( I DID ask)... I thought it might have been a new word to scream out as one plummets from a rope into the lake or river..you know...a bit like 'kowabunga' in the TMNT movies, or 'geronimo'...something like that. Anyway, next time I'm plunging to my death to impress some girls I'll yell 'KIGO-O-O-O'. That should get some attention.

Impressive AntMan xx

reply by the author on 12-Mar-2017

Yes, Impressive AntMan, a loud shout of
KIGO-O-O-O should impress any lady within shouting distance. Perhaps even a KOWAKIGO!!
Or even better...KAZZAKIGOOOO!

I'll be doing your chapter tonight after I get my tax crap together for the taxman. Can ya wait?

reply by Antoine Charlemaine on 12-Mar-2017

Hey! We're on line together - a rare moment. So, you'll be burning the midnight oil tonight (or is it last night???). All the best with the tax dude. I bet he's NOT impressive...
"Kazzakigo" works nicely. It could be a little long, though. I might still be getting the 'O' out when I hit the water... "Kazzakig-OH" (glup, glup, glup, cough, splutter). So much for making an impression...
Don't worry about my stuff tonight (or last night). You'll be frazzled after an evening with the tax dude...I know what HE can do to a girl! Get your sleep and don't worry about me. I'm just being silly...