Ana
Gwen's Replacement6 total reviews
Comment from Ronni
This is a quintessential erotic story, fiction in this presentation. but no
less true to erotic ones in current vogue and seduction. And one that
no doubt will titillate and fascinate many male readers; quite expectedly
and fascinatingly. That quest and goal has been met with flying fantasies
and all exciting igniting of senses set afire. I commend and compliment
you for it. Well done...perfect intrigue and mystery tapped instantly.
The erotic descriptions and projections here, as a male author, are
quite atypical as seen and read most often. Sometime, somewhere,
some male author may yet find and master a bit more creative and
innovative cues, clues, and more innovative images and kinds of
arousal scenes and effects that will truly be a new and perhaps long
overdue treat and trill to male readers, and especially female readers.
I think you have the potential to be such an erotic change and
kind of erotic write to set that new trend and kind of erotic tremors.
I hope you fulfill it. Thanks for sharing...
Best always,
Ronni
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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This is a quintessential erotic story, fiction in this presentation. but no
less true to erotic ones in current vogue and seduction. And one that
no doubt will titillate and fascinate many male readers; quite expectedly
and fascinatingly. That quest and goal has been met with flying fantasies
and all exciting igniting of senses set afire. I commend and compliment
you for it. Well done...perfect intrigue and mystery tapped instantly.
The erotic descriptions and projections here, as a male author, are
quite atypical as seen and read most often. Sometime, somewhere,
some male author may yet find and master a bit more creative and
innovative cues, clues, and more innovative images and kinds of
arousal scenes and effects that will truly be a new and perhaps long
overdue treat and trill to male readers, and especially female readers.
I think you have the potential to be such an erotic change and
kind of erotic write to set that new trend and kind of erotic tremors.
I hope you fulfill it. Thanks for sharing...
Best always,
Ronni
Comment Written 14-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much for your insightful review. I hope to be able to live up to the task of providing the type of eroticism that you suggest.
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I think you can. Your best cues can be
from women's romance/erotic novels
and stories. They have a lot more
sophistication and intrigue in the pursuit and the seduction dynamics.
There are different parameters and
approaches to erotica writing, all
depends on the writer and his attitude
and exploration of vocabulary and
human biology and psychology, to
best advantage and unique creation.
I know you can fulfill that quest and
inquiry, and wish you the best always.
Ronni
Comment from Cass Carlton
This depicts Erotica in its true form. Without cruelty , depravity or violence. The story move along at a steady rate , to its conclusion. The characters are pleasing to look upon, pleasant to meet and deserving of the rapture of their union. Well done cheers Cass
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This depicts Erotica in its true form. Without cruelty , depravity or violence. The story move along at a steady rate , to its conclusion. The characters are pleasing to look upon, pleasant to meet and deserving of the rapture of their union. Well done cheers Cass
Comment Written 10-Mar-2017
Comment from fimarie78
I particularly enjoyed your first description of Ana. Also the way you tastefully dealt with the erotic scenes, although I felt the 'yesss' when she came was a bit cliché. This was an engaging write and you painted the characters well. best of luck on the contest. I liked your comment about beauty being skin deep.
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I particularly enjoyed your first description of Ana. Also the way you tastefully dealt with the erotic scenes, although I felt the 'yesss' when she came was a bit cliché. This was an engaging write and you painted the characters well. best of luck on the contest. I liked your comment about beauty being skin deep.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
Comment from Mustang Patty
Your beautiful character reads well. You've done a good job with descriptive language so the reader can see her. The story flows well and leaves the reader with a sense of reading something worthwhile.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
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Your beautiful character reads well. You've done a good job with descriptive language so the reader can see her. The story flows well and leaves the reader with a sense of reading something worthwhile.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
Comment from Ri-Ri Loves
Wow very erotic indeed. I see the reasons behind the warnings now having read your story. It's been awhile since I have read something enticing and this was very enticing...well done.
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Wow very erotic indeed. I see the reasons behind the warnings now having read your story. It's been awhile since I have read something enticing and this was very enticing...well done.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
Comment from nnelson
A steamy scene. It was hot, and cool- I liked their dialogue. I don't often read Erotic Fiction, but did Ana and Sinclair meet prior? Something that would have familiarized themselves to each other? Because they seem to jump into the 'Scene' and fall in love pretty quickly. I'm not sure if I believe it personally. She mentions that them 'being together,' was a 'passionate and beautiful' experience. Maybe you could 'show' those same types of emotions a little more so in the beginning of the story. Just so the 'Scene' isn't too sudden- I need flowers first:) A fun read. Thanks
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A steamy scene. It was hot, and cool- I liked their dialogue. I don't often read Erotic Fiction, but did Ana and Sinclair meet prior? Something that would have familiarized themselves to each other? Because they seem to jump into the 'Scene' and fall in love pretty quickly. I'm not sure if I believe it personally. She mentions that them 'being together,' was a 'passionate and beautiful' experience. Maybe you could 'show' those same types of emotions a little more so in the beginning of the story. Just so the 'Scene' isn't too sudden- I need flowers first:) A fun read. Thanks
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
