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Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
There are less and less bees for some reason and that is so sad. Your two lines of imagery are complete and sets the scene for the last days of summer. It is true, according to the farmer's almanac, it is a predictor of things to come
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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There are less and less bees for some reason and that is so sad. Your two lines of imagery are complete and sets the scene for the last days of summer. It is true, according to the farmer's almanac, it is a predictor of things to come
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Yes, Barb, dying bees is a predictor of things to come. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Poetically sad for the bee, I am a big fan of them. When the bees die out, so goes our ability to grow so many things. I love how in your notes, you credit Mina the dog in pointing out your idea for this inspiration.
This is a wonderful visual expression that could honestly be read with any of the three lines leading, if not for the Haiku requirement.
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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Poetically sad for the bee, I am a big fan of them. When the bees die out, so goes our ability to grow so many things. I love how in your notes, you credit Mina the dog in pointing out your idea for this inspiration.
This is a wonderful visual expression that could honestly be read with any of the three lines leading, if not for the Haiku requirement.
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Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Yes, Mary, if Mina had not have sniffed that dying bee every time we passed it on the porch, I might not have written this haiku. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This is an excellent, fantastic Haiku; I enjoyed the solid, colourful and meaningful word visual imagery as the poet has rightly stated the fate of the bee in the season.
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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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This is an excellent, fantastic Haiku; I enjoyed the solid, colourful and meaningful word visual imagery as the poet has rightly stated the fate of the bee in the season.
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Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Alcreator Litt Dear, for giving my haiku its first review. I am glad you found this "fantastic."
