Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "haiku (far from floral fields)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Ah! The tragedy and the sweetness combined here make this poem bittersweet! Amazing, moving and interesting in so few words, sometimes less is more in this case definitely so. Very well done kind regards Meia x
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Ah! The tragedy and the sweetness combined here make this poem bittersweet! Amazing, moving and interesting in so few words, sometimes less is more in this case definitely so. Very well done kind regards Meia x
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Yes, Meia, I tried to find the right balance of bittersweet. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Ella25
It is a beautiful haiku, Andre. As the cold weather continues, bees tend to fly further to find the nectar and have no strength to come back. I love these hard-working little creatures. Very creative words and the image speaks on its own. Thank you for the author's notes. Excellent, my friend. Blessings, Ella
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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It is a beautiful haiku, Andre. As the cold weather continues, bees tend to fly further to find the nectar and have no strength to come back. I love these hard-working little creatures. Very creative words and the image speaks on its own. Thank you for the author's notes. Excellent, my friend. Blessings, Ella
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Yes, Ella, I am amazed at these hard-working little creatures. Thank you for your review of my "beautiful haiku."
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You are welcome. A surprise is coming tonight. Hope you like it and if you have a lady in your life, even better. Blessings, Ella
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Farewell sweet summer says it all! I was once stung by a bee in Italy on the back of my neck and I didn't feel quite so fond of them then! But your poem made me think of all things floral, warm and sweet, Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Farewell sweet summer says it all! I was once stung by a bee in Italy on the back of my neck and I didn't feel quite so fond of them then! But your poem made me think of all things floral, warm and sweet, Love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Dolly, for your review. I am glad my haiku brought back sweet and stinging memories.
Comment from Nan Beeson
The poor bee that is able to sting one and referred to the queen of Bees and still dies ....makes one wonder, "Is it better to bee or not to bee...."
I am new at trying to understand "Haiku," so please be patient with me.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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The poor bee that is able to sting one and referred to the queen of Bees and still dies ....makes one wonder, "Is it better to bee or not to bee...."
I am new at trying to understand "Haiku," so please be patient with me.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Nan, for your review. I will be patient with you. Thanks again.
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Thank you, and you are welcome.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a great haiku. Good job with all of the rules of its style. Your lines flow as they should with a true, but sad, message.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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This is a great haiku. Good job with all of the rules of its style. Your lines flow as they should with a true, but sad, message.
Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Yes, Jan, my haiku's message is sad, but true. There was nothing I could do for that bee except appreciate its hard labor to make the honey I eat. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
That was clever. To bee or not to bee.:)
poor little bee. well done my friend.---
Seems like your dog is your muse.
~Kerry~
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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That was clever. To bee or not to bee.:)
poor little bee. well done my friend.---
Seems like your dog is your muse.
~Kerry~
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Yes, Kerry, my dog is my Muse. She could sniff out a haiku subject a mile away. Thank you for your review.
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Your most welcome
Comment from mvbrooks
I enjoy poems with levels of meaning an appreciated how the "goodbye sweet summer" could refer to the bee not living to enjoy the summer -- or, more hauntingly, of the "sweet summer" not occurring because the bee died and didn't get to pollinate the fruitful treats of summer.
My students are reading a book titled "Eyes Wide Open" that is meant to get them to think about our carbon footprint and how humans are impacting the earth. The book begins with a man finding a bee in his driveway and then later exploring the colony collapse phenomenon.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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I enjoy poems with levels of meaning an appreciated how the "goodbye sweet summer" could refer to the bee not living to enjoy the summer -- or, more hauntingly, of the "sweet summer" not occurring because the bee died and didn't get to pollinate the fruitful treats of summer.
My students are reading a book titled "Eyes Wide Open" that is meant to get them to think about our carbon footprint and how humans are impacting the earth. The book begins with a man finding a bee in his driveway and then later exploring the colony collapse phenomenon.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Wow, what a book "Eyes Wide Open" must be. I am grateful I took a moment to contemplate and memorialize the dying bee on my porch. Thank you for your review of my haiku with multiple layers of meaning.
Comment from winnona
A well-written Haiku Spring challenge. The death of the bee is significant and I am glad you have immortalized it. They represent so much to us in nature. They work so hard to pollinate the trees and flowers.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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A well-written Haiku Spring challenge. The death of the bee is significant and I am glad you have immortalized it. They represent so much to us in nature. They work so hard to pollinate the trees and flowers.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017
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Yes, Winnona, I am glad I immortalized that bee, too. it's the least I could do. Thank you for your review
Comment from rama devi
So sad and intensely relevant, as when the bees die, we all die. Thanks for voicing this so poignantly and dramatically. Excellent word economy. Excellent phonetics too, especially the alliteration of F and S. Superb presentation. Bravo.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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So sad and intensely relevant, as when the bees die, we all die. Thanks for voicing this so poignantly and dramatically. Excellent word economy. Excellent phonetics too, especially the alliteration of F and S. Superb presentation. Bravo.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you, Rama, for your generous, six star review of my haiku which is "So sad and intensely relevant."
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Comment from TAB_that's me
Very vivid imagery in this Andre even without a picture. I look forward to summer when we will see some bees. Many don't like them, but I welcome them.
You are a wonderful haiku writer:)
teresa
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Very vivid imagery in this Andre even without a picture. I look forward to summer when we will see some bees. Many don't like them, but I welcome them.
You are a wonderful haiku writer:)
teresa
Comment Written 07-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Yes, Teresa, I impressed myself becoming a wonderful haiku writer. My mother wrote haiku before me. Thank you for your review.
