Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "haiku (far from floral fields)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
Gross! I'm not a bee person. We actually sell bees where I work. They are available from like January to the end of February and they come in in like May or April or something. You get 10,000 bees and one queen for like $150. It's a thing. Not a thing for me but I'm sure for someone. (Yes, we sell a lot of them)
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Gross! I'm not a bee person. We actually sell bees where I work. They are available from like January to the end of February and they come in in like May or April or something. You get 10,000 bees and one queen for like $150. It's a thing. Not a thing for me but I'm sure for someone. (Yes, we sell a lot of them)
Comment Written 08-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Well, thank you, thank, you, thank you, for selling a lot of bees and a queen for $150. Farmers are in desperate need for them. Thank you for your review, too.
Comment from alvina224224
Isn't it amazing where we draw inspiration from, Sis? This is a lovely haiku and thank you for your interesting notes, too. I am reminded of a small mouse that ran into my porch as I sat reading, laid on its side, and the light of life gradually faded from its bright eye. Thank you for writing this.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Isn't it amazing where we draw inspiration from, Sis? This is a lovely haiku and thank you for your interesting notes, too. I am reminded of a small mouse that ran into my porch as I sat reading, laid on its side, and the light of life gradually faded from its bright eye. Thank you for writing this.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Yes, Alvina, it is amazing where we draw inspiration from. Ideas are literally at our feet. Inspiration drawn from the world around us is a far cry from the stereotype of the writer's blocked poet waiting for inspiration. Thank you for your generous, six star review.
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, Andre, you are so incredibly good at haiku! What marvelous alliteration in this one too - oftentimes poets tend to overuse alliteration, in my opinion, thereby ruining the beauty of it because it begins to sound forced, phony - not so in this case at all. It's masterful! I wish I had a six for this one - not something I will often award to a tiny poem, since I read a lot of prose. But this is exceptionally good!
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Wow, Andre, you are so incredibly good at haiku! What marvelous alliteration in this one too - oftentimes poets tend to overuse alliteration, in my opinion, thereby ruining the beauty of it because it begins to sound forced, phony - not so in this case at all. It's masterful! I wish I had a six for this one - not something I will often award to a tiny poem, since I read a lot of prose. But this is exceptionally good!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Dawn, for your enthusiastic review and your virtual six! Yes, I am astounded at how goo I am getting writing these.
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:)) Isn't it wonderful? !!! You are so welcome!
Comment from Janet Foor
Amazing what we see if we just slow down and look. Being with a pet also gives us a different perspective and point of view.
I enjoyed reading about the bee that you and Mina observed. Excellent topic for your haiku.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Amazing what we see if we just slow down and look. Being with a pet also gives us a different perspective and point of view.
I enjoyed reading about the bee that you and Mina observed. Excellent topic for your haiku.
Well done.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 08-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Yes, Janet, you would be amazed at the ideas that come to you if you just slow down. Walking a dog is a great tool for slowing down and noticing things from a different perspective. Thank you for your review.
Comment from SueZen
Ah, poor little bee, no longer granted to be and buzz, so sad it dying on a porch, far away from its natural environment where it would have blossomed among the flowers and procreated. So important as bees are very important "beings", but threatened by pesticides and more.
Farewell sweet summer and little bee, but hope many of your family will survive and thrive !
Thanks for sharing this delightful haiku !
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Ah, poor little bee, no longer granted to be and buzz, so sad it dying on a porch, far away from its natural environment where it would have blossomed among the flowers and procreated. So important as bees are very important "beings", but threatened by pesticides and more.
Farewell sweet summer and little bee, but hope many of your family will survive and thrive !
Thanks for sharing this delightful haiku !
Comment Written 08-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Thank you, SueZen, for your enthusiastic, six star review. Farewell sweet summer and little bee, but thank you all!
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Thank you for reply and try to look on the bright side. There are "bee-farmers" (cultivators) to replenish the bee-family and set free into the environment for obvious, very good reasons. Happy day, spring on its way, Susan
Comment from Bill O'Bier
Although bees collect honey from flowers when I was about 2 years old, I found a bee that had been stepped on a footpath, and I picked it up to rescue it, and it stung me on the hand. From that day forward, I've been terrified of bees. Give me a 15-ft. crocodile any day over a bee. Your poem was I think was fitting for the bee.
All the best...
Bill~
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Although bees collect honey from flowers when I was about 2 years old, I found a bee that had been stepped on a footpath, and I picked it up to rescue it, and it stung me on the hand. From that day forward, I've been terrified of bees. Give me a 15-ft. crocodile any day over a bee. Your poem was I think was fitting for the bee.
All the best...
Bill~
Comment Written 08-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Bill, for your review and your stinging story. I wish you all the best, too.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Our pets are often inspiration for us, aren't they?
I love the way this poem heralds in the chilly days of winter.
And to use your experience with the bee was a great touch.
Take care,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Our pets are often inspiration for us, aren't they?
I love the way this poem heralds in the chilly days of winter.
And to use your experience with the bee was a great touch.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment Written 08-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Yes, Rhonda, our pets are often inspiration for us. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Annie_ Stone
That was sad for the bee, But like everything in life we live and then die. Seeing something can always gives ideas for something else, it's what we do. It was nice that you wrote a poem for a dying bee.
Annie
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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That was sad for the bee, But like everything in life we live and then die. Seeing something can always gives ideas for something else, it's what we do. It was nice that you wrote a poem for a dying bee.
Annie
Comment Written 08-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Yes, Annie, I am thrilled and humbled that I wrote my poem for a dying bee. When my dog stopped to sniff it, I began to compose this haiku. Thank you for your review.
Comment from dmt1967
I don't like bees lol. I know they are protected but they scare me lol. I like your poem although, Summer is not here yet lol, don't wish it away before it's even begun lol. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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I don't like bees lol. I know they are protected but they scare me lol. I like your poem although, Summer is not here yet lol, don't wish it away before it's even begun lol. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Oh, thank you for your review, even though you don't like bees! I look forward to summer, too!
Comment from melyuki
Hi Sis Cat thanks for sharing this well thought out haiku. To bee or not to Bee. Sadly for the bee his days were numbered, but your choice of words have given him a fond farewell from his floral fields.. Nicely scribed and a perfect image to compliment your thoughts. cheers mel xx
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Hi Sis Cat thanks for sharing this well thought out haiku. To bee or not to Bee. Sadly for the bee his days were numbered, but your choice of words have given him a fond farewell from his floral fields.. Nicely scribed and a perfect image to compliment your thoughts. cheers mel xx
Comment Written 08-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Mel, for your review. I am glad I gave this bee "a fond farewell from his floral fields."
