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Comment from Mitchell Brontė
They say Bumble bees are becoming less and less with each passing year, we need these beautiful creatures so badly, we must learn to protect habitat so our wildlife can flourish.
A wonderful Haiku which tells the story of a bees final moment...
Have a great evening
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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They say Bumble bees are becoming less and less with each passing year, we need these beautiful creatures so badly, we must learn to protect habitat so our wildlife can flourish.
A wonderful Haiku which tells the story of a bees final moment...
Have a great evening
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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Thank you, YNWA. for your review of my "wonderful Haiku" about our need for these beautiful creatures.
Comment from Pantygynt
There is somehow an infinite sadness lurking in this haiku that is really quite touching. Mina was lucky not to get stung on the nose in a last act of vengeance against a cruel world.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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There is somehow an infinite sadness lurking in this haiku that is really quite touching. Mina was lucky not to get stung on the nose in a last act of vengeance against a cruel world.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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Yes, Pantygynt, Mina was lucky not to get stung. I sometimes use a bittersweet quality in my poems and stories--an infinite lurking sadness. Thank you for your review.
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The tristesse certainly lurked in this one for both bee and summer.
Comment from rjuselius
this is an interesting piece of poetry dear andre! i like the alliteration. i love the bee as a metaphor for the death of summer.
thank you for sharing this clever and insightful poem!
blessings!
rebekka x
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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this is an interesting piece of poetry dear andre! i like the alliteration. i love the bee as a metaphor for the death of summer.
thank you for sharing this clever and insightful poem!
blessings!
rebekka x
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Rebekka, for your generous, six star review of my "insightful poem!"
Comment from Autumn Splendour
"far from floral fields" not madding crowd? LOL. Your opening line makes me think of my favourite author Thomas Hardy.
A beautiful poem about the bumble bee whose presence augurs another season. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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"far from floral fields" not madding crowd? LOL. Your opening line makes me think of my favourite author Thomas Hardy.
A beautiful poem about the bumble bee whose presence augurs another season. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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Yes, Autumn Splendour, I saw the opportunity to use the dying bee as an auger for another season. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Mark Schardine
The bee can also serve as symbol of the ephemeral nature of life. For a moment a bee enjoys pleasure, but only enough for the species to reproduce and survive
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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The bee can also serve as symbol of the ephemeral nature of life. For a moment a bee enjoys pleasure, but only enough for the species to reproduce and survive
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2017
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Yes, Mark, the bee is a symbol of the ephemeral nature of life. Thank you for your review.
Comment from Vijay Kumar V
How nice. I love this last line's farewell sweet summer.
It's really touching. It conveys volumes in such few words.
A unique work
Have a nice day
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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How nice. I love this last line's farewell sweet summer.
It's really touching. It conveys volumes in such few words.
A unique work
Have a nice day
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Lova Vijay Kumar , for your review. I am glad my haiku "conveys volumes in such few words."
Comment from Bucketlist
It's too bad that the bee population has vastly diminished anyway. Finding dead/ dying creatures reminds us of our own mortality. Mina brought your attention to that cycle. Thanks for sharing.
I liked the brevity of a haiku, and images of changing seasons. It's hard to find anything needing improvement ............Trisha
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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It's too bad that the bee population has vastly diminished anyway. Finding dead/ dying creatures reminds us of our own mortality. Mina brought your attention to that cycle. Thanks for sharing.
I liked the brevity of a haiku, and images of changing seasons. It's hard to find anything needing improvement ............Trisha
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Trisha, for your review. Yes, dead and dying creatures remind us of our own mortality. Mina will never let me forget it. Thank you for your review of my brief haiku.
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You are welcome
Comment from Lu Saluna
your haiku speaks of a bee who has lost his way and finds his final resting place on your porch. Your satori "farewell sweet summer" tells us we are nearing the end of summer and the bee dying signals the late summer as well.
your form is good with the first two lines connecting well and your satori is wonderful
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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your haiku speaks of a bee who has lost his way and finds his final resting place on your porch. Your satori "farewell sweet summer" tells us we are nearing the end of summer and the bee dying signals the late summer as well.
your form is good with the first two lines connecting well and your satori is wonderful
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Lu, for your review and your fantastic poetry. It keeps me inspired.
Comment from pome lover
awwww, and good for Mina. Hope she didn't try to eat it.
Maybe she used to be a writer?? prior life? kidding.
This is a good haiku, though sad story. What fun to be inspired by Mina's interests. Mina the Muse!
good job.
pome love
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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awwww, and good for Mina. Hope she didn't try to eat it.
Maybe she used to be a writer?? prior life? kidding.
This is a good haiku, though sad story. What fun to be inspired by Mina's interests. Mina the Muse!
good job.
pome love
Comment Written 09-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Yes, pome lover, Mina was probably a writer in a former life. Given that I named her after a character in Dracula, she love sad stories. Thank you for your review.
Comment from BeasPeas
Oh, this is so nicely composed. So sad, too. Bees do great work and a delight (as long as we don't get too close). Fabulous alliteration in the first line. Marilyn
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Oh, this is so nicely composed. So sad, too. Bees do great work and a delight (as long as we don't get too close). Fabulous alliteration in the first line. Marilyn
Comment Written 08-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Marilyn, for your review of my "so nicely composed" haiku. I am glad you found my alliteration fabulous.
