Perennials of War
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Comment from judiverse
This is one I can't wait to read. I think I like the idea of an attractive man living in a penthouse apartment! Shana may turn out to be a lucky girl. Despite the fact that Anderson is interested in her, he's not going to neglect trying to solve the problem of the Russians and what there is about the painting they're so anxious to get. It will be interesting to see what comes of trying to place a mole in the Russian organization. The dogs are fabulous. Romeo is doing a great job of staying with Shana. judi
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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This is one I can't wait to read. I think I like the idea of an attractive man living in a penthouse apartment! Shana may turn out to be a lucky girl. Despite the fact that Anderson is interested in her, he's not going to neglect trying to solve the problem of the Russians and what there is about the painting they're so anxious to get. It will be interesting to see what comes of trying to place a mole in the Russian organization. The dogs are fabulous. Romeo is doing a great job of staying with Shana. judi
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the generous review.
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You're very welcome. I'm always eager to read another of your chapters. judi
Comment from Sankey
Good chapter again. Good to let new readers know about your "Romances" Cos you always hold out until almost the last couple of chapters for the 'romance' bit, hehe. One spag in the intro from the previous chapter. Ask Jane and Helen (to)come in.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Good chapter again. Good to let new readers know about your "Romances" Cos you always hold out until almost the last couple of chapters for the 'romance' bit, hehe. One spag in the intro from the previous chapter. Ask Jane and Helen (to)come in.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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I thought I had fixed that, Okay, I will get right on it. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Uh, oh, Shana must have something on her mind, or butterflies in her tummy that are stirring some thoughts. LOL! And of course, maybe not. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Uh, oh, Shana must have something on her mind, or butterflies in her tummy that are stirring some thoughts. LOL! And of course, maybe not. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from MelB
The pool game is a nice addition to the chapter. I wonder why they are reluctant to speak to the twice removed second cousin?
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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The pool game is a nice addition to the chapter. I wonder why they are reluctant to speak to the twice removed second cousin?
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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I think they feel he's tooooo far removed. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Barbara. Another interesting chapter to your book. The pool game was a good side attraction for the important on-going dialogue.
Suggestions: (From previous post notes) I don't understand this part: "Ask Jane and Helen come in."
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I will still never understand why you don't just call them chapters. I think the other language is just a confusion setter before the reader even begins. (Just an opinion of course)
TODAY'S POST:
Chapter 6 part 2 Perfect!
Aand: Switch these two things around. Put the action first and the dialogue following it: ""I don't need you to do anything." Anderson shook his head.
Good job, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
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Hi, Barbara. Another interesting chapter to your book. The pool game was a good side attraction for the important on-going dialogue.
Suggestions: (From previous post notes) I don't understand this part: "Ask Jane and Helen come in."
And:
I will still never understand why you don't just call them chapters. I think the other language is just a confusion setter before the reader even begins. (Just an opinion of course)
TODAY'S POST:
Chapter 6 part 2 Perfect!
Aand: Switch these two things around. Put the action first and the dialogue following it: ""I don't need you to do anything." Anderson shook his head.
Good job, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the kind review. Corrections made.
Comment from Sixty70
Still on pace and moving forward. I wonder why the guys are reluctant to use Jane's cousin (twice removed).
The interesting thing about this novel is that after I read a section, I end up asking more questions than I had when I started reading. Which keeps me reading. Getting this wrapped up into an inevitable and satisfying conclusion will be a Master's work.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Still on pace and moving forward. I wonder why the guys are reluctant to use Jane's cousin (twice removed).
The interesting thing about this novel is that after I read a section, I end up asking more questions than I had when I started reading. Which keeps me reading. Getting this wrapped up into an inevitable and satisfying conclusion will be a Master's work.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from bmethner
I can sense the suspense of this writing. It does create intrigue for the reader. I thought Anderson coming out and directly asking if the girls had an association with the Russian mafia was a little unbelievable but over all the characters appear very interesting. Good luck.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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I can sense the suspense of this writing. It does create intrigue for the reader. I thought Anderson coming out and directly asking if the girls had an association with the Russian mafia was a little unbelievable but over all the characters appear very interesting. Good luck.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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If you had read the entire novel, from the beginning it is believable. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Heidi M
I really like the pool-playing scene between Anderson and Philip. That was the perfect backdrop for their conversation.
I know they need to proceed with caution because of the danger the Russian mafia presents, but it also seems as if time is of the essence. One small mistake could have drastic consequences.
And why is Shana fully dressed and not in bed? Good place to end this section, leaving us wanting more.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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I really like the pool-playing scene between Anderson and Philip. That was the perfect backdrop for their conversation.
I know they need to proceed with caution because of the danger the Russian mafia presents, but it also seems as if time is of the essence. One small mistake could have drastic consequences.
And why is Shana fully dressed and not in bed? Good place to end this section, leaving us wanting more.
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the generous review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, a great chapter, which moved forward at a good pace. Only thing I can say is to rewrite : 'Helen put her forearms on the arms of the chair and adjusted herself in the chair.' You have arms and chair twice in the same sentence.
Looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Hi Barbara, a great chapter, which moved forward at a good pace. Only thing I can say is to rewrite : 'Helen put her forearms on the arms of the chair and adjusted herself in the chair.' You have arms and chair twice in the same sentence.
Looking forward to reading on. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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I changed that and it must have been saved while you were reading. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from royowen
An excellent episode Barbara. With Anderson and Philip playing pool, they tried to decide if Jane's second cousin can help them with the investigation, concerning Shana, but decide to shelve it for the moment. They want to find anybody who know the workings of the Russian mafia and Morzov, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : My second cousin(,) twice removed on my my mother's side(,)
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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An excellent episode Barbara. With Anderson and Philip playing pool, they tried to decide if Jane's second cousin can help them with the investigation, concerning Shana, but decide to shelve it for the moment. They want to find anybody who know the workings of the Russian mafia and Morzov, well done, blessings, Roy
Typo : My second cousin(,) twice removed on my my mother's side(,)
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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I will add those commas. Thank you for the kind review.
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Most welcome
