Fairies Winter
Ode to Winter 5-7-5 contest17 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written 5-7-5 ode to winter. Fairydust falling from the sky to mesmerize young and old with the wonder of winter snow.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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A very well-written 5-7-5 ode to winter. Fairydust falling from the sky to mesmerize young and old with the wonder of winter snow.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Well that was a beautiful saying. Thank you so much for such a splendid review. It is how I describe the winters were I live. Fairy dust falling from the sky
Comment from Dean Kuch
Ah-ha! So THAT's where snow really comes from. Tiny, frail, fine fluttering faeries sprinkling their dust all around.
And here I always thought it was nothing more than frozen water molecules.
Boy, was I off or what?
Oh well, it wouldn't be the first time and I'm sure it won't be the last.
Your syllable count was fine. A five-seven-five ode to winter poem just as required.
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Ah-ha! So THAT's where snow really comes from. Tiny, frail, fine fluttering faeries sprinkling their dust all around.
And here I always thought it was nothing more than frozen water molecules.
Boy, was I off or what?
Oh well, it wouldn't be the first time and I'm sure it won't be the last.
Your syllable count was fine. A five-seven-five ode to winter poem just as required.
Good luck to you in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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You sure were off. I can't believe you didn't know it came from fairies Mr. Dean Kuch. LOL
Thank you kindly for your wonderful review~~~~~~:))
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, my friend,
You followed the rule and came up with a nice 5/7/5 ode to winter. The syllable count is right and the poem in good form. I really like the presentation.
Good job.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Hello, my friend,
You followed the rule and came up with a nice 5/7/5 ode to winter. The syllable count is right and the poem in good form. I really like the presentation.
Good job.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thank you for the wonderful review Ms. Gypsy Blue Rose. I am honored you like it.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
I really like the direction of your poem but I think the execution is still lacking, somewhat. (You may disagree, of course!).
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Glittered Fairydust
Falls from the sky like Magic
Blankets of Winter
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I would suggest the following, or similar, revisions:
glitt'ry fairydust
falls from the sky like magic --
wintertime blanket
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Good luck!
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reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Dear Mystery Writer,
I really like the direction of your poem but I think the execution is still lacking, somewhat. (You may disagree, of course!).
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Glittered Fairydust
Falls from the sky like Magic
Blankets of Winter
***
I would suggest the following, or similar, revisions:
glitt'ry fairydust
falls from the sky like magic --
wintertime blanket
***
Good luck!
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review this. I do appreciate your suggestions, although I shall keep it as is, pardon my individuality----your version is nice too. I am seeing the visions through my eyes (with no disrespect to you at all). I always love to hear opinions of other great authors.
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. In a few words, you have captured the essence of winter.Your well-chosen artwork and background color completed the entry well.Good luck.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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A well-written contest entry. In a few words, you have captured the essence of winter.Your well-chosen artwork and background color completed the entry well.Good luck.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Thank you, I appreciate your kind words and wonderful review
Comment from moonsunrise
I like the pure lighthearted imagery you selected. It reminds me of the sparkling light snowfalls I've experienced and loved over the years especially as a child. Winter seemed so magical and clean.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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I like the pure lighthearted imagery you selected. It reminds me of the sparkling light snowfalls I've experienced and loved over the years especially as a child. Winter seemed so magical and clean.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Thank you, I appreciate you taking the time to read and review this. Your review is so kind, thanks again.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written and a beautiful ode to winter I liked the presentation picture to you have done well using 17 syllables good luck regards Jill
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reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Yes this is well written and a beautiful ode to winter I liked the presentation picture to you have done well using 17 syllables good luck regards Jill
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Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Thank you so much Jill for such a wonderful review.
