Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

I felt this was rather melancholy at first, Patty -
to have loved and lost perhaps - but then the
last stanza plus the note that the poem was for
your hubby, made me think otherwise -

Well penned, my friend.

Margaret

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017

Thank you for reading and reviewing. I'm glad that the poem evoked thought and contemplation. That means I did my job.
~patty~

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

A lovely free verse love poem for your hubby. Very nice artwork and presentation to compliment the loving message.

Well done.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017

Thank you, Janet. I'm glad you stopped by to read and review. I usually write prose, but this poem just flowed from my pen. Thank you for your kind words,
~patty~

Comment from Dorothy Farrell

Excellent

Hi - this is a lovely poem for your husband. Good monorhyme followed by abab rhyme. Both forms flow well, both in rhyme and rhythm. The content is romantic and loving. Tiny typo in your penultimate line. 'til' - add an L, otherwise all well written and a very nice read. Warm regards Dorothy

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 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I will go in and make that edit - thank you for pointing it out. I appreciate your kind words and remarks about the form,
~patty~

Comment from Bucketlist

Excellent

A lucky hubby ! I found this to be a charming, passionate poem. If I interpret the poem correctly, then lots of girls have gone through this, without the happy ending,
. Thank you

I especially liked the words

"But you and your cunning
Brought the bees and the birds"




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 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. It was a fun write!
~patty~

reply by Bucketlist on 01-Mar-2017

Hi patty, you are welcome !,

Comment from Abby Wilson-hand

Exceptional

it takes a great write to get a six from me
well done my friend I totally enjoyed this read
you will do well on this I'm pretty sure I loved it

 Comment Written 01-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017

Thank you so much for the starry review! I'm glad you enjoyed the read - thanks for stopping by,
~patty~