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Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "haiku (winter blizzard)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
43 total reviews
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Indy. I think your bucket list is a wonderful idea, my friend. Your haiku tells it very well. Makes me want to vacation as soon as I can. LOL. Your picture with the roaring fireplace etc is a very good idea indeed. Good job of expressing this, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Hi, Indy. I think your bucket list is a wonderful idea, my friend. Your haiku tells it very well. Makes me want to vacation as soon as I can. LOL. Your picture with the roaring fireplace etc is a very good idea indeed. Good job of expressing this, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Bob, for your kind review and comments for my winter haiku. I appreciate your time to read and share your thoughts. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Indy :-)
Comment from mountainwriter49
Hi, PW,
I enjoyed your haiku. You know your references to snow and isolated mountain cabin had to appeal to me! I was immediately transported to the image you created. Your first two lines are minimalist so that the read can fill in the blanks with his/her own images, thoughts, remembrances, etc. For me, this is what haiku is all about--appealing to the reader's imagination. With that said, the satori did leave me a bit wanting. There's a lot of alliteration there. Four of the nine words begin with 'w.' Just throwing out a thought: our respite within, or just: respite within, or as it is. Just thinking out loud.
Again, you won me over with the wonderful image which allowed me to transport myself to another place and time.
A great addition to the book.
Ray
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Hi, PW,
I enjoyed your haiku. You know your references to snow and isolated mountain cabin had to appeal to me! I was immediately transported to the image you created. Your first two lines are minimalist so that the read can fill in the blanks with his/her own images, thoughts, remembrances, etc. For me, this is what haiku is all about--appealing to the reader's imagination. With that said, the satori did leave me a bit wanting. There's a lot of alliteration there. Four of the nine words begin with 'w.' Just throwing out a thought: our respite within, or just: respite within, or as it is. Just thinking out loud.
Again, you won me over with the wonderful image which allowed me to transport myself to another place and time.
A great addition to the book.
Ray
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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I'm so pleased you liked the imagery in my winter haiku, PM. I'm so grateful for your kind words and generous sixth star. Thank you for your comments, and I'm sorry the satori left you wanting. I appreciate your encouraging response.
Smiles,
Kar :-)
Comment from dragonpoet
Usually people don't want to be caught in a snowstorm. Maybe the speaker sees in as an forced escape. Some chance a peace and quiet. A times we all need it.
Keep writing
Joan
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Usually people don't want to be caught in a snowstorm. Maybe the speaker sees in as an forced escape. Some chance a peace and quiet. A times we all need it.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your kind review and comments for my winter haiku, Joan. I appreciate your response.
Smiles,
Indy ;-)
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You're welcome, Indy.
Joan
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
A wonderful haiku,
Winter blizzard
Isolates mountain cabin
But it was the last line....wish we were there...that completes this 5-7-5 so well.
Have a lovely evening
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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A wonderful haiku,
Winter blizzard
Isolates mountain cabin
But it was the last line....wish we were there...that completes this 5-7-5 so well.
Have a lovely evening
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you, YNWA, for your very kind review for my winter haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and thank you for mentioning you liked the satori. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from TAB_that's me
I like it without a picture and I am going back to writing (at least haiku) without pictures.
Very clear and vivid imagery. What a peaceful place it would be:)
teresa
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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I like it without a picture and I am going back to writing (at least haiku) without pictures.
Very clear and vivid imagery. What a peaceful place it would be:)
teresa
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Teresa, for your very kind review for my winter haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and thank you for mentioning you liked it without a photo. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
winter blizzard
isolates mountain cabin
wish we were there
Really? Brrrr --- the words to your haiku paint a vivid picture of a cosy cabin in a lovely winter scene.
Well penned, Karyn.
Margaret
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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winter blizzard
isolates mountain cabin
wish we were there
Really? Brrrr --- the words to your haiku paint a vivid picture of a cosy cabin in a lovely winter scene.
Well penned, Karyn.
Margaret
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Margaret, for your very kind review for my winter haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and thank you for mentioning you liked the picture the words painted. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Pantygynt
There are those who say that pictures are out of order with these, although the club does not adopt this rule. Here the imagery is so suggestive no picture is needed. Your words and the reader's mind create the picture and that is surely how it should be.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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There are those who say that pictures are out of order with these, although the club does not adopt this rule. Here the imagery is so suggestive no picture is needed. Your words and the reader's mind create the picture and that is surely how it should be.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Pantygynt, for your very kind review for my winter haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and thank you for mentioning a photo wasn't needed. I'd much prefer to post haiku without photos, but so many FS members expect artwork and comment negatively when there isn't one. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from misscookie
I love the words to your poem
You had my imagination going wild
To be stuck in a cabin with the one you love. Feeling the warmth of a nice fireplace ... Now that something to think about.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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I love the words to your poem
You had my imagination going wild
To be stuck in a cabin with the one you love. Feeling the warmth of a nice fireplace ... Now that something to think about.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Cookie, for your very kind review for my winter haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and thank you for mentioning the words had your imagination going wild.. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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You're very welcome.
Have a nice day.
Cookie
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh, this really IS easy to picture, and so is the mood easy to imagine. A crackling fire, a cozy cuddle with wine glass waiting...yum. Haiku doesn't get much better, though I have to say, I could do without the blizzard (from my experiences - lol).
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Oh, this really IS easy to picture, and so is the mood easy to imagine. A crackling fire, a cozy cuddle with wine glass waiting...yum. Haiku doesn't get much better, though I have to say, I could do without the blizzard (from my experiences - lol).
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Dawn, for your very kind review for my winter haiku. I appreciate your kind response, and thank you for mentioning it was easy to imagine. Have to have the blizzard to keep us in the cabin for a while! LOL I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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No, no blizzards! (LOL) The cold and snow is enough to keep me in these days. *grin* You're very welcome. It was my pleasure.
Comment from Dean Kuch
It's nice every now and again to go off the grid, take those roads less traveled, and just get away from everyone and everything for awhile. We can't do it often (well, most of us can't, anyway), but when we can, the silence and serenity is bliss.
Good haiku...
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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It's nice every now and again to go off the grid, take those roads less traveled, and just get away from everyone and everything for awhile. We can't do it often (well, most of us can't, anyway), but when we can, the silence and serenity is bliss.
Good haiku...
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your very kind review for my winter haiku, Dean. I appreciate your kind response, and thank you for sharing your thoughts about getting away from the world. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
