It's you
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Comment from l.raven
Hi Waves, it's you that makes me smile with your so touching words...your lady is a lucky woman...oh to be so in love...truly...love your poem you...smiling...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Hi Waves, it's you that makes me smile with your so touching words...your lady is a lucky woman...oh to be so in love...truly...love your poem you...smiling...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 04-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thanks so much as always Linda much appreciated She's A LUCKY WOMAN !! LOL
YOU KNOW WHAT'S FUNNY? SHE DOESN'T LIKE MY POETRY AT ALL SO ITS ALL GOING TO WASTE SHE NEVER READS IT! LOL
xxdip
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some people like poetry...most don't...they think it is boring...sigh...some in my family are the same way...LOL...ahe loves ya...that's what counts...xxoo soooooooooo welcome you
Comment from Susanjohn
:-) beautiful words written... better spoken. So very sweet dear Dipster...as always enjoyed reading your poetry!! :-)))
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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:-) beautiful words written... better spoken. So very sweet dear Dipster...as always enjoyed reading your poetry!! :-)))
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Thankyou so much dear susan you continually make my day with your supportive reviews
dip
Comment from Thal1959
Very nice, D. Though the last tercets stumbles just a little. But there is nothing wrong with the repetition of "It's you" so don't let anyone grieve you if they complain it is redundant. (Just remind them of Poe's repetition of the phrase, "Quothe the Raven, nevermore.")
By the way... I watched a movie today called the Sundowners. The host who introduced the movie said that "sundowners" was an Australian term for an itinerate sheepherder. In my first 4 years in the Navy, I was assigned to Miramar Naval Air Station in San Diego, CA, (now a marine corps base) to an F-14 squadron called "The Sundowners." (VF-111) Of course, that term referred to a WW II airwing that accumulated a number of kills against the Jap Zero fighters, which of course all bore the red sun icon of Japan.
But wouldn't you know it that I will probably have a FanStory friend in Australia telling everybody that his FanStory mentor was an itinerate sheepherder for the U.S. Navy!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Very nice, D. Though the last tercets stumbles just a little. But there is nothing wrong with the repetition of "It's you" so don't let anyone grieve you if they complain it is redundant. (Just remind them of Poe's repetition of the phrase, "Quothe the Raven, nevermore.")
By the way... I watched a movie today called the Sundowners. The host who introduced the movie said that "sundowners" was an Australian term for an itinerate sheepherder. In my first 4 years in the Navy, I was assigned to Miramar Naval Air Station in San Diego, CA, (now a marine corps base) to an F-14 squadron called "The Sundowners." (VF-111) Of course, that term referred to a WW II airwing that accumulated a number of kills against the Jap Zero fighters, which of course all bore the red sun icon of Japan.
But wouldn't you know it that I will probably have a FanStory friend in Australia telling everybody that his FanStory mentor was an itinerate sheepherder for the U.S. Navy!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Hehe Thats a great story Thal. Downing the rising sun! Who would have thought that japan would become one of america's strongest allies.
I have since removed the last two lines. I never liked them
dipster
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You could have just revised them a bit, but if you are OK with their removal, it's your choice.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I liked this, Dipster.
It's sweet, it's rather playful, and the rhyming works really well.
I'm not sure for the reason for the dual repetitive refrains at the bottom, however.
Other than that (which kinda threw the whole rhythm off for me a tad), this was g-r-r-r-r-r-rrrrrrreat, mate!
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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I liked this, Dipster.
It's sweet, it's rather playful, and the rhyming works really well.
I'm not sure for the reason for the dual repetitive refrains at the bottom, however.
Other than that (which kinda threw the whole rhythm off for me a tad), this was g-r-r-r-r-r-rrrrrrreat, mate!
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Yeah I wasn't sure either so I removed them thanks as always Dean so glad you liked this one.
dip
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You bet! :-)))
Comment from Sis Cat
Dip, I love the giddy excitement of your poem. It is affirmative of a bond between a loving couple who each play a vital role in sustaining the other. Your refrain "IT'S YOU" adds rhythm and emphasis. You also make an effective and creative use of the light metaphor:
"don't think I could ever turn you off
because you always turn me on"
Oh, what fun language!
Your poem is quick and creative in its turn of phrases.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Dip, I love the giddy excitement of your poem. It is affirmative of a bond between a loving couple who each play a vital role in sustaining the other. Your refrain "IT'S YOU" adds rhythm and emphasis. You also make an effective and creative use of the light metaphor:
"don't think I could ever turn you off
because you always turn me on"
Oh, what fun language!
Your poem is quick and creative in its turn of phrases.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Thanks sis so glad you liked it and the quirky rhyme scheme
dip
