Comment from sandy montgomery

Excellent

I loved the satori! "Zenful pleasures" creative word play. A lovely picture of springs nectar scented breezes. This was lovely. Thank you for sharing your work.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017

Thanks for reading my haiku, Sandy, and for sharing your insights into this write as well.
I sincerely appreciate your time as well as your comments.
Vaya con Dios,

Comment from Macsween

Excellent

Excellent Dean.

I've been off the site for a couple of years. It's good to read your work again.

I liked this, nice tranquil words especially because the wind feels like it's going to tear my roof off right now.

I'll check out some of your other work.

Macsween

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017

Thanks for reading my haiku, MacSween, and for sharing your insights into this write as well.
I sincerely appreciate your time as well as your comments.
Vaya con Dios,

Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson

Excellent

Dean that was beautifully written. I saw your notes about the haiku club, I would love to join if I can. Are you allowed to put previously posted haiku's or, one's never posted? Either way I'd love to join the club, it sounds like a lot of fun to do.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017

Thanks for reading my haiku, Kerry, and for sharing your insights into this write as well.
I sincerely appreciate your time as well as your comments.
We would sure love to have you in the club.
If you would like to jion, please contact Gypsy Blue Rose or Douglas Paul here for further information. Just tell them that "Dean sent Me," and they'll get you all signed up.
Vaya con Dios,

reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 28-Feb-2017

Your welcome and thank you much. Here, where?
What does Vaya con dios mean? :)))))ha ha

reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017

They are both members here at FanStory, Kerry. Just click one of the links provided below and contact them by PM (Private message).
Gypsy Blue Roses' profile page

Douglas Paul's profile page
They'll provide you with all you'll need to get started.
~Dean

reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017

Vaya con Dios is Spanish for "Go with God."

reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 28-Feb-2017

Thank you much, I will do that tomorrow morning.

reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 28-Feb-2017

Ah...nice, I don't know much spanish

reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017

You're very welcome. :)

reply by Kerry Foley Robinson on 28-Feb-2017

I like that, pleasant screams..

Comment from Arkine

Excellent

I wish we were having gentle spring breezes, right now it's like hurricane winds out there when it starts gusting.

That aside, I really like this, paints a nice picture--wish I was there right now. ;) Great job!

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

I wish I were there right now myself, Arkine.
Thanks very much for your time and review.
They are appreciated.
~Dean

Comment from Just2Write

Excellent

Very nice, Dean. The flute and the zenful pleasures of spring put me in the mood for readying the garden. I hate a winter garden and love to see the plant shoots coming up through the ground.
Your Haiku is true to traditional form and reads well. I found myself looking for another kigo word for spring, though.
Something like: brush budding branches -
'budding branches' would tell us that it's spring, and leaves room for another word to describe the breeze.
I'm not sure about the alliteration in my line though.
Rose

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

Thanks so much for your kind comments as well as your time, Rose.
I'd toyed with the idea of using blossoms as my kigo. However, I already had a plethora of |"b" words so I scrapped that idea.
I'll take your great suggestions under advisement.

Comment from Franklin Price

Excellent

What a great use of zenful. I know you didn't purpoesefully mean that to be a play on words. You would never do such a thing. The pictures and background music also make me a zenful person. Maybe I should relent.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

Perhaps you should relent, Franklin.
And you're right, I would never intentionally use a play on words like sinful pleasures" in haiku poetry.
I guess you could say that it just sort of happened that way.
Thanks so much for your kind comments as well as your time.

Comment from doggymad

Excellent

Great Haiku Dean. It conveys so much of what is in nature. Your image of a zenful pleasure is very appropriate in the same way as Feug Shui is a cleansing ritual

hugs

Freda

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

~Dean

Comment from Sixty70

Excellent

Zenful. I suppose the antonym might be sinful. I like the words of this poem, especially today because our spring 'breeze' is a steady 30 MPH wind. Spring in February. Go figure. I'm waiting for blossoms on my redbud trees. One more 70 degree day and they will pop.

I like to read haiku but figuring out how to review it is another matter. Thanks, Dean, for writing!!

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

The best way I can tell you to review it is to read up on what constitutes good haiku.
Does it include a "kigo", or seasonal reference?
Is it written in present tense--a moment in nature, captured in time?
Is it written in seventeen syllables, or less?
Did it resonate within you? Did the words give you any sort of sensory experience whatsoever?
You know, stuff like that...
Thanks for reading.
~Dean

reply by Sixty70 on 27-Feb-2017

Thanks, Dean. Helpful information to have.

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

Thank you, Dean, for sharing this relaxing, Zen-ful haiku about the arrival of spring. Your poem makes effective use of the letter B alliteration, creating a smooth flow. The effect is gentle and pleasurable.

Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

Thanks very much for reading my haiku, Andre.
I do appreciate your review as always.
Happy haikuing...

~Dean

Comment from Jacob Collins

Excellent

I always enjoy your haikus, Dean. I loved the imagery here and it made me wish that spring would hurry up, I'm fed up of the cold winds and rain. An excellent piece.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

Thanks very much for reading my haiku, Jacob.
I do appreciate your comments, and I couldn't agree more.
~Dean