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Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "haiku (gentle spring breezes)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
54 total reviews
Comment from rtobaygo
Good morning, Dean
The poem creates a blissful, innocent scene not unlike I've experienced when my flower garden comes into its own. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Good morning, Dean
The poem creates a blissful, innocent scene not unlike I've experienced when my flower garden comes into its own. Enjoyed.
Take care and stay safe,
Ray
Comment Written 05-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2017
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Thanks for checking out my haiku, Ray.
I sincerely appreciate the comments.
Comment from Ella25
It is a breathtaking haiku, so peaceful and calm. It brings the warm feeling of incoming Spring. Still, the branches are bare of the cherry blossoms trees. Beautifully chosen words and the image so vivid. Wants you to sit there, feel the breeze touching gently, and smell the flowers. I love cherry blossoms. I wrote one about cherry blossoms a while ago. I shall share it sometimes. I wish I had six stars to give you. All the best. Ella
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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It is a breathtaking haiku, so peaceful and calm. It brings the warm feeling of incoming Spring. Still, the branches are bare of the cherry blossoms trees. Beautifully chosen words and the image so vivid. Wants you to sit there, feel the breeze touching gently, and smell the flowers. I love cherry blossoms. I wrote one about cherry blossoms a while ago. I shall share it sometimes. I wish I had six stars to give you. All the best. Ella
Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2017
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Ah, I'm not worried about sixes, Ella. I just appreciate you taking the time to read my haiku and share your thoughts with me about it.
More than anything else, I am really glad that you enjoyed it.
Heavenly hugs...
~Dean :)
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You are very welcome. The haiku is outstanding. You created an excellent piece. Ella
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You are welcome, Dean. Have a great weekend. Ella
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You do the same, Ella.
~Dean :-)))
Comment from pharp
Dean,
This is a really breathtaking haiku. Spring is in the air especially down here in the South. We really haven't had much of a winter. Zenful pleasures indeed and a mighty fine penned haiku. Thanks for sharing your amazing talent. Blessings...Portia
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Dean,
This is a really breathtaking haiku. Spring is in the air especially down here in the South. We really haven't had much of a winter. Zenful pleasures indeed and a mighty fine penned haiku. Thanks for sharing your amazing talent. Blessings...Portia
Comment Written 02-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading my haiku for the Haiku Club's week 12 challenge, Portia.
I'm really glad you enjoyed this.
Blessings...
Comment from LoannaLois
This one takes me there. I feel the breeze,
I wish I was sitting there. Your choice of words so right for choice of subject. Love this.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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This one takes me there. I feel the breeze,
I wish I was sitting there. Your choice of words so right for choice of subject. Love this.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Thanks so much for reading my spring haiku for our Haiku Club week 12 challenge, Lois.
I really appreciate your positive feedback.
As insightful as your work always is, it sure would be great to have in in the club with me.
We have a chatroom set up on a server outside of FanStory (TeamSpeak3), where we all meet an can actually hear each other talk. it's a blast, and it costs absolutely nothing.
As I said, it's completely free, and you have an opportunity to have your haiku published in our book to be sold on Amazon.com by year's end.
If you're interested, contact Douglas Paul or Gypsy Blue Rose and they'll give you all you need to get started.
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Gentle Spring Breeze, sounds quite pleasant and almost 'sinful'. I got that one. The background is a bit off-putting though, as it is loud, rainy, and not that peaceful sounding.
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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This haiku, Gentle Spring Breeze, sounds quite pleasant and almost 'sinful'. I got that one. The background is a bit off-putting though, as it is loud, rainy, and not that peaceful sounding.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2017
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Thank you for reading my haiku for the Haiku Club's weekily challenge, Bill.
I removed the offensive music and sound effects.
If it bothers just one person, then I don't need i, nor do I want to include it.
Take care...
~Dean
Comment from royowen
Well done Dean, you have really given yourself to these haiku most ardently, and of course your ability to be creative in their presentation enhances them somewhat! Well done, a great creation, yet again, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Well done Dean, you have really given yourself to these haiku most ardently, and of course your ability to be creative in their presentation enhances them somewhat! Well done, a great creation, yet again, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Blessings, Roy, and thanks as always for reading.
~Dean
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Most welcome
Comment from TAB_that's me
Ah, I can handle reading this so much better than the horror poems:)
Your words create a beautiful and zenful picture.
Teresa
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Ah, I can handle reading this so much better than the horror poems:)
Your words create a beautiful and zenful picture.
Teresa
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Thanks for reading, Teresa.
Much obliged.
~Dean
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Lovely blossom photo as spring begins and a lovely, descriptive Haiku Dean about the 'zenful pleasures' of this time of the year for the Northern Hemisphere. You really are an expert at this style.
Lovely,
cheers,
valda
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Lovely blossom photo as spring begins and a lovely, descriptive Haiku Dean about the 'zenful pleasures' of this time of the year for the Northern Hemisphere. You really are an expert at this style.
Lovely,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
Comment from Hitcher
i read your little offering to my wife, background music and all, she loves doing yoga and being at peace within herself, shed love it and was at peace for awhile:) No! I'm not what you would call a yoga convert, I like the world in a constant state of flux.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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i read your little offering to my wife, background music and all, she loves doing yoga and being at peace within herself, shed love it and was at peace for awhile:) No! I'm not what you would call a yoga convert, I like the world in a constant state of flux.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2017
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Nor would I be considered a yoga convert, Hitch.
Not by a loooooooooooooooong shot, heh-heh...
Thanks for reading.
~Dean
Comment from Poetic Friend
Dean, how can I not award this incredible piece a six-star rating? Actually, the poem deserves a 100 stars.
In its brevity, this haiku offers much -- alliteration, rhymes, imagery (both sensory and auditory), gentleness/peace/zen, and stunning presentation (the artwork complements your message well). By the way, I wrote a poem, which I will post one day, about the gentleness of a breeze.
It seems as if the best poets on this site are members of the Haiku Club. Thank you for forming the club, for awesome haikus are being produced by its members.
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Dean, how can I not award this incredible piece a six-star rating? Actually, the poem deserves a 100 stars.
In its brevity, this haiku offers much -- alliteration, rhymes, imagery (both sensory and auditory), gentleness/peace/zen, and stunning presentation (the artwork complements your message well). By the way, I wrote a poem, which I will post one day, about the gentleness of a breeze.
It seems as if the best poets on this site are members of the Haiku Club. Thank you for forming the club, for awesome haikus are being produced by its members.
Comment Written 01-Mar-2017
