Haiku/Haiga
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Comment from dragonpoet
You could see such a wonderful panoramic view from up there. Could you really smell the flowers way down in the valley or just maybe remember their scent and match the scent with the picture just as the words match with the artwork.
Keep writing
Joan
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You could see such a wonderful panoramic view from up there. Could you really smell the flowers way down in the valley or just maybe remember their scent and match the scent with the picture just as the words match with the artwork.
Keep writing
Joan
Comment Written 27-Feb-2017
Comment from Sixty70
The scents of snow and lilacs together. Strange, maybe, but I can imagine standing on the mountaintop and smelling the fragrance of the valley below.
The scent draws the eye instead of the nose. Why is that? I think you're right. We smell (and hear) all too often through sight.
Thanks for writing.
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The scents of snow and lilacs together. Strange, maybe, but I can imagine standing on the mountaintop and smelling the fragrance of the valley below.
The scent draws the eye instead of the nose. Why is that? I think you're right. We smell (and hear) all too often through sight.
Thanks for writing.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
Comment from Thal1959
Nicely done, Mike. Though it s hard to believe one could smell Lilac from a mountain top covered with snow! But the "budding valley" is a good Satori.
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Nicely done, Mike. Though it s hard to believe one could smell Lilac from a mountain top covered with snow! But the "budding valley" is a good Satori.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
For someone so verbouse, you truly come up with some concise little reflective pieces, Michael. I love how this takes a while to sink in. Th mountain top is so winter until the scent of lilac drifts by, then the eye is drawn to Spring erupting below. Tes, I like this a lot. NG
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For someone so verbouse, you truly come up with some concise little reflective pieces, Michael. I love how this takes a while to sink in. Th mountain top is so winter until the scent of lilac drifts by, then the eye is drawn to Spring erupting below. Tes, I like this a lot. NG
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Michael,
Thank you for participating in the Haiku Club Challenge #12, Spring topic.
Your haiku gives me a refreshing feeling. You touched the sense of smell and visual. My favorite senses. Doing so is a sign of a good haiku.
I like your haiga but I would bring your satori up one line because it's dragging at the bottom of the picture. It would give you a better look, at least in my opinion.
Nice job, sweetie pie,
luv ya,
Gypsy Sensei
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Hello, Michael,
Thank you for participating in the Haiku Club Challenge #12, Spring topic.
Your haiku gives me a refreshing feeling. You touched the sense of smell and visual. My favorite senses. Doing so is a sign of a good haiku.
I like your haiga but I would bring your satori up one line because it's dragging at the bottom of the picture. It would give you a better look, at least in my opinion.
Nice job, sweetie pie,
luv ya,
Gypsy Sensei
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
Comment from Cindy Warren
That's pretty. I don't know if you can smell lilacs from a mountain peak. I've never had any desire to climb a mountain to find out, but I like the idea.
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That's pretty. I don't know if you can smell lilacs from a mountain peak. I've never had any desire to climb a mountain to find out, but I like the idea.
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
Comment from Vijay Kumar V
Simple and interesting. I loved the second line ' frosty little scent draws eye'
Very well written
Thanks for sharing
Have a nice day
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Simple and interesting. I loved the second line ' frosty little scent draws eye'
Very well written
Thanks for sharing
Have a nice day
Comment Written 26-Feb-2017
