Comment from Liberty Justice

Excellent

Great job player. Good luck contest I just viewed and voted. Congrats! Love way you use words like smacking that sound like it's meaning. Photo of boiling maple syrup represents topic so well.

 Comment Written 27-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 27-Feb-2017

Thanks for your read and review. Much appreciated.

reply by Liberty Justice on 02-Mar-2017

What place did you win? When i looked at the voting booth a certain person's vote put you in 2nd or 3rd place. lol liberty justice

reply by Liberty Justice on 02-Mar-2017

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Comment from IndianaIrish

Good

I like your topic of tapping syrup for your Tyburn poem, but you have a mistake in lines 5 and 6.

tapping, sapping needs to be the 5-8 syllables in line 5 with an ending word that rhymes with the last word from line 6.
boiling, smelling needs to be the 5-8 syllables in line 6 with an ending word that rhymes with the last word from line 5.

Hope that helps so you can fix it before the contest. If you do fix it, let me know and I'd be happy to raise the rating.
Smiles,
Indy :-)

 Comment Written 26-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017

Thanks for the advise. Tried to fix:.
Tapping
Sapping
Boiling
Vaping
Liquid flowing tapping, then sapping
Wafting sweetly boiling and vaping

reply by IndianaIrish on 26-Feb-2017

No, it's still not right. tapping, sapping and boiling, vaping has to be next to each other (no word between them) and another word at the end as the ninth syllable.

reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017

I hope I got it right.
Tapping
Dripping
Boiling
Smacking
Buckets catch the tapping, dripping drips
Smells so sweetly boiling, smacking lips

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

This is an interesting subject for a Tyburn poem
with excellent choices for the descriptive words
You have one possible problem:
the repeated words must be in the fifth through eighth position
as you can see in the examples
I think you'll be disqualified if you don't change it
Excellent picture to match
Assuming it is changed, this will be an excellent entry
Good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017

Thanks for the head's up.

Comment from Sixty70

Excellent

This seems like a difficult poetry form. Your imaginative subject fits well with the Tyburn. I can see the tree being tapped and the sap dripping. I can almost smell the sweetness of the syrup.

Thanks for writing!

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017

Thanks for the read and the review.

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend I am not sure but I think the 2 lines have too rhyme you may need to look at this again and adjust it an original idea for this form though regards Jill

 Comment Written 25-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017

Thanks for the head's up.