Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "haiku (colt prances)*"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
48 total reviews
Comment from Tessa Kay
Isn't it amazing how quickly they get on their feet after birth? And us humans take forever. You picked a cute picture as well. It demonstrates your last line perfectly. :)
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Isn't it amazing how quickly they get on their feet after birth? And us humans take forever. You picked a cute picture as well. It demonstrates your last line perfectly. :)
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Tessa, thank you for your great review and comments for my colt haiku. . I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response. It's amazing to watch their wobbly legs turn into prancing ones in such a short time.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A lovely well structured haiku. It looks like the horse is having so much fun. Do horses smile? I could swear he is. Nice addition to the book, my friend~Debbie
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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A lovely well structured haiku. It looks like the horse is having so much fun. Do horses smile? I could swear he is. Nice addition to the book, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Debbie, for your great review and comments for my colt haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response. LOL I went back to look at the photo, and I think you're right that the colt does has a smile!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
I've run the gamut with those little shorties from not liking them at all--to seeking them out. This is a "feel good" piece, and that's the kind of writing I look for these days. All the many babies born in spring are full of themselves, and (I'm convinced) well aware of their Creator. So fun to watch!
GoodHearted Woman
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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I've run the gamut with those little shorties from not liking them at all--to seeking them out. This is a "feel good" piece, and that's the kind of writing I look for these days. All the many babies born in spring are full of themselves, and (I'm convinced) well aware of their Creator. So fun to watch!
GoodHearted Woman
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my colt haiku, GoodHearted Woman. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response. It's nice to know you enjoy reading haiku, now.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Douglas Paul
I think this is a good response to this weeks challenge. You picked a great subject. You have clear imagery in your first two lines and good aha moment of insight in your satori. Well done, my friend
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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I think this is a good response to this weeks challenge. You picked a great subject. You have clear imagery in your first two lines and good aha moment of insight in your satori. Well done, my friend
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my colt haiku, Douglas. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response. I don't see too many haiku about horses, so thought I'd do one.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Beautiful and imaginative Haiku, much enjoyed and very well written and presented, such joy in this to read, well done kindest regards Meia x
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Beautiful and imaginative Haiku, much enjoyed and very well written and presented, such joy in this to read, well done kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Meia, for your great review and comments for my colt haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written using this form you paint the scene of a colt just prancing and playing I enjoyed well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Yes this is well written using this form you paint the scene of a colt just prancing and playing I enjoyed well done regards Jill
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my colt haiku, Jill. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from William Ross
Yes, very good on a new born colt on its legs for the first romp. good thought and job on this. Thanks for the share and have a great day
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Yes, very good on a new born colt on its legs for the first romp. good thought and job on this. Thanks for the share and have a great day
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you, William, for your great review and comments for my colt haiku, William. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response. Have a great weekend!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Sis Cat
This is a fun, vivid haiku I can see and imagine even without the picture. You use strong, vivid verbs allowing me to see the action of a colt running and playing for the first time_ prances, wobbly, and romp. You also used a tight 3-5-3 economy of words. Thank you for sharing your contributions to this book.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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This is a fun, vivid haiku I can see and imagine even without the picture. You use strong, vivid verbs allowing me to see the action of a colt running and playing for the first time_ prances, wobbly, and romp. You also used a tight 3-5-3 economy of words. Thank you for sharing your contributions to this book.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Sis Cat, for your great review and comments for my colt haiku. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response. It's nice to know you enjoy reading haiku, now.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello,
Beautiful in its simplicity and elegant composition. Your phrase is well connected and your satori is an observation.
Well done sweetie pie.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Hello,
Beautiful in its simplicity and elegant composition. Your phrase is well connected and your satori is an observation.
Well done sweetie pie.
Gypsy
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my colt haiku, Gypsy. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I truly appreciate your kind response. Thanks for taking the time from your busy day to read and share your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi IndianaIrish, this is a lovely haiku with a delightful accompanying picture that suits perfectly. Your lines ond and two interconnect well and line three is a very good satori. A perfect haiku. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Hi IndianaIrish, this is a lovely haiku with a delightful accompanying picture that suits perfectly. Your lines ond and two interconnect well and line three is a very good satori. A perfect haiku. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 25-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your great review and comments for my colt haiku, Dorothy. I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem, and I appreciate your kind response. It's always great to read your feedback.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
