Vanity
Senryu 2-7-418 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This senryu, Vanity, grows on me as I realize you are being straight forward with this take on Narcissus. Where one might go for self-affirmation.
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This senryu, Vanity, grows on me as I realize you are being straight forward with this take on Narcissus. Where one might go for self-affirmation.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2017
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
Wow, Mikey, really pushing the boundaries lately aren't you? Well I hope there's no puddled piss on the table she's wiping down, and yes I agree she is possibly looking at her reflection, (probably not though.) Good luck with this one, it should appeal to a wider audience, Giddy :))
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Wow, Mikey, really pushing the boundaries lately aren't you? Well I hope there's no puddled piss on the table she's wiping down, and yes I agree she is possibly looking at her reflection, (probably not though.) Good luck with this one, it should appeal to a wider audience, Giddy :))
Comment Written 24-Feb-2017
Comment from kathleenspalding
Haha and eww! Funny poem certainly nailed it. Rather unforgettable. Don't know if I wish it was (forgettable) or not, LOL. I don't see anything that needs to be changed. Good job!
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Haha and eww! Funny poem certainly nailed it. Rather unforgettable. Don't know if I wish it was (forgettable) or not, LOL. I don't see anything that needs to be changed. Good job!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Wow you'd have to be very vain to do that, and very gross. The artwork really matches with your words now mikey, would never be able to see it any other way. Good luck in the contest,
cheers,
valda
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Wow you'd have to be very vain to do that, and very gross. The artwork really matches with your words now mikey, would never be able to see it any other way. Good luck in the contest,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
Comment from Just2Write
Yep, now THAT'S self-fascination, Mikey.
Narcissus just used a pond - He didn't think to provide his own water... LOL.
Great mind stimulating poem.
Rose.
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Yep, now THAT'S self-fascination, Mikey.
Narcissus just used a pond - He didn't think to provide his own water... LOL.
Great mind stimulating poem.
Rose.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
Comment from barbara.wilkey
OH MY!!! Vanity isn't a good thing. I would say you cleared it up very nicely in one short sweet little poem. Great job.
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OH MY!!! Vanity isn't a good thing. I would say you cleared it up very nicely in one short sweet little poem. Great job.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
Comment from Linda Engel
Well, this is one to ponder upon. Well done. You've chosen an appropriate picture to express your senryu. Vanity...vanity...and there are plenty of pissed off (and on) women who think way too much of themselves. She may look nice in the glistening water but it still smells. Good luck in the contest, my friend.
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Well, this is one to ponder upon. Well done. You've chosen an appropriate picture to express your senryu. Vanity...vanity...and there are plenty of pissed off (and on) women who think way too much of themselves. She may look nice in the glistening water but it still smells. Good luck in the contest, my friend.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
Comment from Pantygynt
Ah now, this is more like it. The shortcoming can of course only be seen for what it really is in a suitable mirror, otherwise we would see it as deceptively as we always see it. The reflective surface is an integral part of the perception. A clever senryu with a mildly shocking satori line that necessarilly draws attention to itself.
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Ah now, this is more like it. The shortcoming can of course only be seen for what it really is in a suitable mirror, otherwise we would see it as deceptively as we always see it. The reflective surface is an integral part of the perception. A clever senryu with a mildly shocking satori line that necessarilly draws attention to itself.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2017
Comment from nordicgirl
Wow. This is one scathing poem here Mr. Cahill. It really shocks and depicts vanity like nothing I haver ever read. Total fixation on self. This has to win, but, it is here, hehehe. NG
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Wow. This is one scathing poem here Mr. Cahill. It really shocks and depicts vanity like nothing I haver ever read. Total fixation on self. This has to win, but, it is here, hehehe. NG
Comment Written 22-Feb-2017
Comment from doggymad
Many thanks for sharing this rather entertaining post. You have told a huge story in very few words.
You have certainly put your own twist on this one. It sure gave me a giggle
hugs
Freda
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Many thanks for sharing this rather entertaining post. You have told a huge story in very few words.
You have certainly put your own twist on this one. It sure gave me a giggle
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 22-Feb-2017
