Have Peace
we shall live on in memory19 total reviews
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
I think we all want to leave a legacy when we die. I just hope people don't think back on me and say, "She was such a bitch"...or maybe I do want them to say that. lol. Death will come one day, for each and everyone of us. Hopefully, we can make our life count.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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I think we all want to leave a legacy when we die. I just hope people don't think back on me and say, "She was such a bitch"...or maybe I do want them to say that. lol. Death will come one day, for each and everyone of us. Hopefully, we can make our life count.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Thank you and yes making our life count would be ideal****kahpot
Comment from Dawn Munro
This is sage advice given in your lovely poem. I did notice two things you might want to change - first, although many publishers don't do it, here, on FanStory, separating into stanzas encourages more reviews, and secondly, a little grammar correction is needed:
"...don't grieve for those (who) stay behind..." - 'that' is used for inanimate objects or animals
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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This is sage advice given in your lovely poem. I did notice two things you might want to change - first, although many publishers don't do it, here, on FanStory, separating into stanzas encourages more reviews, and secondly, a little grammar correction is needed:
"...don't grieve for those (who) stay behind..." - 'that' is used for inanimate objects or animals
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Thank you very much, your ideas are great value to me and I will do this
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Thank you for your wonderfully gracious response - you are very welcome.
Comment from Vijay Kumar V
A beautiful poems with such good flowmand fineness. Thes are my favourite 'think of life and what it's been
remember now the things we've seen
and take those thoughts along with you
and death won't differ from what we knew ,
as this life has come to pass
life in death shall always last'
Have a nice day
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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A beautiful poems with such good flowmand fineness. Thes are my favourite 'think of life and what it's been
remember now the things we've seen
and take those thoughts along with you
and death won't differ from what we knew ,
as this life has come to pass
life in death shall always last'
Have a nice day
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2017
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Unfortunately, my day will not be as good as your wonderful comment, (cyclone nearly here) thank you
Comment from lyenochka
This is a gentle way to comfort those who fear death. I like the strong start of the poem which presents death as simply part of life and urges the reader to "own" it. But I believe in an immortal soul that continues life beyond physical death and beyond human memory. But I do appreciate the consoling encouragement in this poem.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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This is a gentle way to comfort those who fear death. I like the strong start of the poem which presents death as simply part of life and urges the reader to "own" it. But I believe in an immortal soul that continues life beyond physical death and beyond human memory. But I do appreciate the consoling encouragement in this poem.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your review and time although our thoughts may differ you made time to understand someone else****kahpot
Comment from Irish Rain
Amen. I like the line, 'life in death', as I don't believe in death, but in a journey, from this life to the next. Let us leave good memories, blessings...
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Amen. I like the line, 'life in death', as I don't believe in death, but in a journey, from this life to the next. Let us leave good memories, blessings...
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you for an excellent review
Comment from Janet Foor
A thought provoking piece. We shall live on in someone's memory is a sobering message. One I hope is a kind and benevolent one.
Very well done. I appreciate the sentiment.
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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A thought provoking piece. We shall live on in someone's memory is a sobering message. One I hope is a kind and benevolent one.
Very well done. I appreciate the sentiment.
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you for an excellent review****kahpot
Comment from estory
This has a great, skipping, tripping rhythm to it, in the meter and rhyme scheme. it really hops and skips along. Maybe it could use some images to brighten it up, a metaphore we can relate to or internalize in our own experience estory
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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This has a great, skipping, tripping rhythm to it, in the meter and rhyme scheme. it really hops and skips along. Maybe it could use some images to brighten it up, a metaphore we can relate to or internalize in our own experience estory
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you, estory I am relatively new here so all the help is valuable I will look for images****kahpot
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
' so think of this and where we are
and if we need they won't be far
as in their memory death won't come
so journey now and fear for none
as this life has come to pass
life in death shall always last .'
What a wonderful, absorbing and illuminating poem, this is utterly fabulous, kindest regards Meia x
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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' so think of this and where we are
and if we need they won't be far
as in their memory death won't come
so journey now and fear for none
as this life has come to pass
life in death shall always last .'
What a wonderful, absorbing and illuminating poem, this is utterly fabulous, kindest regards Meia x
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you, Meia for such a positive reaction to my words seeing them written down by someone else is inspirational, to say the least many thanks****kahpot
Comment from Benny Beeharry
Hi friend, first thank you for the great rating of six stars. I do appreciate it very much.
I like the strong stance you took about death. Yes you are right, it will come whether we want it or not. The fear is not in dying itself but in what one has done of oneself before dying.
The more unruly we are to others and the world, the greater the burden we need to take with us. The good has nothing to fear.death is as real as life, except the fact that we do not know where we are going and what is to happen to us there, makes it a terrifying reality. Just live and die quietly. Who cares who remembers me after I am gone?
Danny Jock
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Hi friend, first thank you for the great rating of six stars. I do appreciate it very much.
I like the strong stance you took about death. Yes you are right, it will come whether we want it or not. The fear is not in dying itself but in what one has done of oneself before dying.
The more unruly we are to others and the world, the greater the burden we need to take with us. The good has nothing to fear.death is as real as life, except the fact that we do not know where we are going and what is to happen to us there, makes it a terrifying reality. Just live and die quietly. Who cares who remembers me after I am gone?
Danny Jock
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your excellent review, if (death is as real as life, your words) do you care if people remember you or your efforts now?****kahpot
Comment from Susan Chetcuti
I really enjoyed this piece. Its flow and rhyme were flawless. Even though it is about death, it had a great sing along to it which was enjoyable. It sure made me think about death in a different way. Thanks so much for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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I really enjoyed this piece. Its flow and rhyme were flawless. Even though it is about death, it had a great sing along to it which was enjoyable. It sure made me think about death in a different way. Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 25-Mar-2017
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Thank you for such and my best review ever you just gave a relative newcomer a whole lotta inspiration****kahpot
