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Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "haiku (praying mantis)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
40 total reviews
Comment from William Ross
yeah sex and dinner, one part i'd enjoy not the other so much lol Nicely done, not the creature that eats it's mate after sex. good thing women don't do that / have a great day
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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yeah sex and dinner, one part i'd enjoy not the other so much lol Nicely done, not the creature that eats it's mate after sex. good thing women don't do that / have a great day
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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I'm pleased you enjoyed my mantis haiku, William. Thank you for your kind encouragement and response. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku. An economical romance, after dinner and sex, ends the relationship by biting off his head. Waiting for the next invitation to dinner.
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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A very well-written haiku. An economical romance, after dinner and sex, ends the relationship by biting off his head. Waiting for the next invitation to dinner.
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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LOL I enjoyed your comments, Sandra.I'm pleased you liked my mantis haiku. Thank you for your kind encouragement and response. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Donya Quijote
I like this haiku. The mantis is one of my favorite bugs. They are fascinating to watch. I swear they watch me and think too. Creepy at times. Did you know that sometimes she lets her mate go. Can you imagine how satisfied she must be that to happen.
Anyway, your haiku is in good form. The only problem I have is the use of the two verbs side by side (mates then devours). It seems a bit awkward but that me just the way I hear things. Your final line is rather humorous.
Nice paring of poem and picture. Fine overall presentation...
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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I like this haiku. The mantis is one of my favorite bugs. They are fascinating to watch. I swear they watch me and think too. Creepy at times. Did you know that sometimes she lets her mate go. Can you imagine how satisfied she must be that to happen.
Anyway, your haiku is in good form. The only problem I have is the use of the two verbs side by side (mates then devours). It seems a bit awkward but that me just the way I hear things. Your final line is rather humorous.
Nice paring of poem and picture. Fine overall presentation...
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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I'm pleased you enjoyed my mantis haiku, Donya. Thank you for your kind encouragement and response. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts, and thanks for mentioning you liked the satori.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Ella25
A green bug is preying on her partner..yummy dinner after mating. Beautiful, short words in haiku poem but so well describing the mantis. Beautifully put together. Excellent work. With love, Ella
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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A green bug is preying on her partner..yummy dinner after mating. Beautiful, short words in haiku poem but so well describing the mantis. Beautifully put together. Excellent work. With love, Ella
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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I'm so pleased you enjoyed my mantis haiku, Ella. Thank you for your kind encouragement and response. I appreciate your taking the time to read and share your thoughts. I always love reading your comments for my writing.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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You are welcome, Karyn. It is always a pleasure to read and review your outstanding work. With love, Ella
Comment from PoemsOfDD
IndianaIrish, I really like your haiku. The picture made
me smile. It made me wonder if the male knows it's
going to get its head chomped off, so better make his performance count - or - does the female even know she is going to turn 'cannibal' at the end - or - is it a case of "well that was a bad lay, best chomp his head off!"
So many questions - nature is amazing! Thanks for
sharing. ~DD
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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IndianaIrish, I really like your haiku. The picture made
me smile. It made me wonder if the male knows it's
going to get its head chomped off, so better make his performance count - or - does the female even know she is going to turn 'cannibal' at the end - or - is it a case of "well that was a bad lay, best chomp his head off!"
So many questions - nature is amazing! Thanks for
sharing. ~DD
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 22-Feb-2017
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LOL I love your humorous comments for my mantis haiku, ~DD! I'm so pleased you enjoyed the poem, and thank you for your kind encouragement and response. I appreciate your reviews. Thanks!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Indy. Good one. LOL. sort of funny, you know. Good thing humans don't behave like that. I would be celibate, you can bet on that. This is a great response to the challenge. Blessings, Bob
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Hi, Indy. Good one. LOL. sort of funny, you know. Good thing humans don't behave like that. I would be celibate, you can bet on that. This is a great response to the challenge. Blessings, Bob
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Thanks for your review and comments for my praying mantis haiku, Bob. I hoped when writing this readers would get a grin or smile from reading this one.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from damommy
You'd think after the first mantis mating, the other guys would get the idea and become celibate.
I knew the female bit off his head. A new take on dinner and sex, or in this case, sex and dinner.
She looks triumphant in the photo. LOL.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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You'd think after the first mantis mating, the other guys would get the idea and become celibate.
I knew the female bit off his head. A new take on dinner and sex, or in this case, sex and dinner.
She looks triumphant in the photo. LOL.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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LOL thanks for your funny response to my haiku, damommy. Yeah, I love that victory photo, and glad I found it for the poem. Thank you for your kind review and comments. So glad you enjoyed.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment from MizKat
Hi IndianaIrish,
I really liked your poem and the picture of the mantis with it's arms held high.
You always write the nicest poetry and show really great pictures of them.
I look forward to reading your work because they are always wonderful.
Kat
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Hi IndianaIrish,
I really liked your poem and the picture of the mantis with it's arms held high.
You always write the nicest poetry and show really great pictures of them.
I look forward to reading your work because they are always wonderful.
Kat
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Thank you, sweet Kat, for your wonderful review and encouraging comments for my poem. I'm always happy to have you read my work, and your responses are appreciated.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Hi Karyn. You're very welcome. I love reading what you write. Kat
Comment from l.raven
HI Karyn, sounds like a great evening...yes I did know she does that...if I were the male...she would have to be a really sexy gal...worth dying for...or I would become what is equivalent the a nun...LOL...very well written sweet girl...and a great picture...love Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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HI Karyn, sounds like a great evening...yes I did know she does that...if I were the male...she would have to be a really sexy gal...worth dying for...or I would become what is equivalent the a nun...LOL...very well written sweet girl...and a great picture...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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LOL thanks for your funny response to my praying mantis haiku, Linda. I'm so pleased you enjoyed it and hoped readers would get a grin from the poem. Yeah, I love this photo, and I'm glad I found it to use with the poem. Thanks so much!
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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your so welcome Karyn...hope you are doing well...smiling back at ya...Linda xxoo
Comment from zanya
Yes an interesting observation here on little praying mantis and its 'partying' lifestyle !- no time to lose and a great pic
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Yes an interesting observation here on little praying mantis and its 'partying' lifestyle !- no time to lose and a great pic
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Thamk you, zanya, for taking the time to read and share your thoughts for my haiku. I appreciate your kind comments, and I'm delighted you enjoyed the poem. Thanks so much.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
