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Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "haiku (cry of whales)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
20 total reviews
Comment from c_lucas
As long as they are not bragging on my being there dinner. I won't protest. This is very well written with a smooth flow of word, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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As long as they are not bragging on my being there dinner. I won't protest. This is very well written with a smooth flow of word, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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lol. Thanks charlie. Have a great week:)
Comment from BOO ghost
Awe, very nice looking presentation with the whale and sea imagery. The azure array of colors is like tranquility. BOO has heard whales while monitoring hydrophones dropped into the ocean. Sonobuoys for tracking submarines but hydrophones pick up ambient sea noises like snapping shrimp and whales! is creepy when all the crew sleeps... you got your headsets on reclined in the seat of an Orion patrol aircraft ,and hear these whales sing... sends an eerie chill up your spine while tracking subs in the dark. And sound travels faster in water than air because of the density of sea salt called salinity and the sounds bend depending on the temperature of the ocean. warm water sound travels faster in the ocean. Sound bends so if you got a (CZ) zone contact means that sound bends for perhaps 25 miles before returning to the surface. I probably heard mating whales, just did not realize that. Not sure what this week's haiku club challenge is. mammals perhaps? Excellent choice. BOO!
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Awe, very nice looking presentation with the whale and sea imagery. The azure array of colors is like tranquility. BOO has heard whales while monitoring hydrophones dropped into the ocean. Sonobuoys for tracking submarines but hydrophones pick up ambient sea noises like snapping shrimp and whales! is creepy when all the crew sleeps... you got your headsets on reclined in the seat of an Orion patrol aircraft ,and hear these whales sing... sends an eerie chill up your spine while tracking subs in the dark. And sound travels faster in water than air because of the density of sea salt called salinity and the sounds bend depending on the temperature of the ocean. warm water sound travels faster in the ocean. Sound bends so if you got a (CZ) zone contact means that sound bends for perhaps 25 miles before returning to the surface. I probably heard mating whales, just did not realize that. Not sure what this week's haiku club challenge is. mammals perhaps? Excellent choice. BOO!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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I captured the whale sound while snorkeling in Maui a few years ago just with my little underwater video camera. I didn't even realize it until we got home and watched the videos. It is cool. Yes, it was about mammals. Thanks BOO!!
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Snorkling is fun. Did some snorkeling in Diego Garcia, remote island in middle of Indian ocean. Mainly military stayed on this very small tropical island. We had plenty hammerheads and whales, porpoises, stingrays. remember to spit on your facemask.
Comment from Donya Quijote
I like whale song too. Never saw a whale while I was in the Navy, but we were require to reduce the use of our sonar while in the a certain protected area in the Atlantic between Florida and the Bahamas. I may have heard them while listening to the pings though. Not sure, but that's what the sonar tech told me. Someday maybe I will catch a whale in the lense of my camera. Good effort on this haiku...
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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I like whale song too. Never saw a whale while I was in the Navy, but we were require to reduce the use of our sonar while in the a certain protected area in the Atlantic between Florida and the Bahamas. I may have heard them while listening to the pings though. Not sure, but that's what the sonar tech told me. Someday maybe I will catch a whale in the lense of my camera. Good effort on this haiku...
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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I've captured their picture on camera and also their sound on my underwater video camera while snorkeling in Maui. It was cool. Thanks for the review.
Comment from Dean Kuch
A-h-h-h-hhhh...a little double entendre, some fun plays on words here in your phrase as well as the satori, 'ey, Teresa?
I happen to enjoy a good play on words myself from time to time.
Nicely done...
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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A-h-h-h-hhhh...a little double entendre, some fun plays on words here in your phrase as well as the satori, 'ey, Teresa?
I happen to enjoy a good play on words myself from time to time.
Nicely done...
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you Dean:)
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You're welcome,
~Dean :)
Comment from Douglas Paul
I really like the basic concept of this one, my friend, You first two lines paint a clear and vivid picture and I like your satori. My only concern is the rhyme of whales and wails - I would try to change wails to some other word, I think
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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I really like the basic concept of this one, my friend, You first two lines paint a clear and vivid picture and I like your satori. My only concern is the rhyme of whales and wails - I would try to change wails to some other word, I think
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you Doug for the review and suggestion. Always appreciated.
Comment from country ranch writer
The sound is a sad sound they say I never been close to a whale to hear them. Many people go to lengths to travel to see them up close and personal.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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The sound is a sad sound they say I never been close to a whale to hear them. Many people go to lengths to travel to see them up close and personal.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Thank you:) Blessings
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Smiles
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Teresa, love the play on words in this one. Nice strong haiku, my friend. I love whale song so this one made me sigh a bit.
Thanks for sharing.
m
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Dear Teresa, love the play on words in this one. Nice strong haiku, my friend. I love whale song so this one made me sigh a bit.
Thanks for sharing.
m
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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I love the whale song too. Thank you :)
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Teresa - this is a very good haiku with lines one and two interconnecting well. Your satori is very good with a clever play on words. Good use of homophone with the word 'wails'. Good addition for the book. Warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Hi Teresa - this is a very good haiku with lines one and two interconnecting well. Your satori is very good with a clever play on words. Good use of homophone with the word 'wails'. Good addition for the book. Warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Thank you Dorothy:)
Comment from Sasha
Excellent work with this haiku. The first two lines connect perfectly and your satori with the play on the word 'wails' is perfect. Very nice job with this one.
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Excellent work with this haiku. The first two lines connect perfectly and your satori with the play on the word 'wails' is perfect. Very nice job with this one.
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Thank you Sasha dear:)
Comment from MizKat
Hi Tab,
You have written a nice poem that was interesting.
I always look forward to reading what you write.
You are always very great at writing poems.
Kat
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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Hi Tab,
You have written a nice poem that was interesting.
I always look forward to reading what you write.
You are always very great at writing poems.
Kat
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Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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thanks:)
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Welcome.
