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Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "haiku (cry of whales)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
20 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Love the clever pun on wails and whales. Lovely presentation too. Fine three liner. Nice voicing adn flow. Fine alliteration of both W and , ad cosnoancne fo T and L and S.
Warmly, r d
PS--Optional idea:
cry of whales
heard for miles 'neath ocean waters(--)
mating wails
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Love the clever pun on wails and whales. Lovely presentation too. Fine three liner. Nice voicing adn flow. Fine alliteration of both W and , ad cosnoancne fo T and L and S.
Warmly, r d
PS--Optional idea:
cry of whales
heard for miles 'neath ocean waters(--)
mating wails
Comment Written 28-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 28-Feb-2017
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Thank you RD:)
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:-))
Comment from LoannaLois
There is no writing you cannot weave into something wonderful. What a lovely Haiku. I enjoyed the two "whales" spelled differently. The illustration was perfect.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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There is no writing you cannot weave into something wonderful. What a lovely Haiku. I enjoyed the two "whales" spelled differently. The illustration was perfect.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the kind review:)
Comment from IndianaIrish
Great play on words in your satori, Teresa. Whales are so amazing, and I enjoyed your wonderful haiku. Their songs are incredibly soothing and love relaxation tapes with their sounds. Excellent haiku.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Great play on words in your satori, Teresa. Whales are so amazing, and I enjoyed your wonderful haiku. Their songs are incredibly soothing and love relaxation tapes with their sounds. Excellent haiku.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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I love their sounds too. I captured their sound on my underwater video camera. I was really surprised my camera could pick it up. Thanks so much.
Comment from Lu Saluna
I like your haiku. The first two lines connect very well and form a concrete image in my mind and the sound of their voices is very beautiful
Your satori is lovely
Very well done.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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I like your haiku. The first two lines connect very well and form a concrete image in my mind and the sound of their voices is very beautiful
Your satori is lovely
Very well done.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you Lu:) Have a great week.
Comment from ronnie k
You gave the accompanying picture a voice that gave me another chance to let you know that your poetry is special to me, thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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You gave the accompanying picture a voice that gave me another chance to let you know that your poetry is special to me, thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you ronnie:) Have a great week.
Comment from Leineco
Love the "observation" lines
cry of whales
heard for miles 'neath ocean waters
they are such powerful imagery and so iconic!
The satori is deceptively clever - at first blush it is pure sound
imagery. . .as whale song does have that "wail" intonation. . .
but the longer I let it drift through my mind, the more I fell in
love with "wail" as "cry out for, beseech"
Nicely done :-)
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Love the "observation" lines
cry of whales
heard for miles 'neath ocean waters
they are such powerful imagery and so iconic!
The satori is deceptively clever - at first blush it is pure sound
imagery. . .as whale song does have that "wail" intonation. . .
but the longer I let it drift through my mind, the more I fell in
love with "wail" as "cry out for, beseech"
Nicely done :-)
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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I'm glad you picked up on the wail being crying out for:) You are very perceptive when you read my poetry. Thanks so much:)
Comment from Joan E.
Oooh, I really like seeing and hearing whales. I enjoyed your 3-8-3 form for this haiku and your "whales/wails" wordplay, plus the neat picture. Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Oooh, I really like seeing and hearing whales. I enjoyed your 3-8-3 form for this haiku and your "whales/wails" wordplay, plus the neat picture. Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you Joan:)
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is well written my friend I like the way you closed the poem with the same sounding words as the first line well-done regards Jill
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Yes this is well written my friend I like the way you closed the poem with the same sounding words as the first line well-done regards Jill
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you Jill:) Have a great week.
Comment from Lulube
cleverly penned. Good choice of word to use for different meanings but same sound, and I can't remember what it's called. Great photo that you've chosen as well.
good luck in the contest
lulube
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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cleverly penned. Good choice of word to use for different meanings but same sound, and I can't remember what it's called. Great photo that you've chosen as well.
good luck in the contest
lulube
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much:)
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welcome
lulube
Comment from honeytree
Excellent art work
yes they must have
friends in the water
these whales life is life.
Yes whales love other whales
like us loving another human being.
Honeytree
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Excellent art work
yes they must have
friends in the water
these whales life is life.
Yes whales love other whales
like us loving another human being.
Honeytree
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you Annie:)
