In the Mist
poem23 total reviews
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
INterresting piece of work. Very poetic and a little romantic. Can be taken two different ways as reality or a stand-in for romance blooming. Nicely done
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INterresting piece of work. Very poetic and a little romantic. Can be taken two different ways as reality or a stand-in for romance blooming. Nicely done
Comment Written 21-Feb-2017
Comment from l.raven
HI Michael, I'm so glad you accidently released it...it's beautiful...describes a awakening of a whole new day...from the nightly dew...to a warm sun shinning day...so beautifully written you...and a stunning picture....love Linda xxoo so good to see you my friend...
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HI Michael, I'm so glad you accidently released it...it's beautiful...describes a awakening of a whole new day...from the nightly dew...to a warm sun shinning day...so beautifully written you...and a stunning picture....love Linda xxoo so good to see you my friend...
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
Comment from robyn corum
Michael,
This was so cool! The water process system romanticized! *smile* This was a bit of a departure from your usual fare and something you should consider doing more often! Thanks for sharing!
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Michael,
This was so cool! The water process system romanticized! *smile* This was a bit of a departure from your usual fare and something you should consider doing more often! Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
Comment from Pantygynt
The thing that hit me first off with this was the cross rhyme warming/morning and I so wanted the fourth line to continue in the same way and read:
"The moon to sunshining gives way with sigh."
Possibly a change to the sixth line as well to get a rhyme with yearning, discerning perhaps. Sorry to muck about but I love set patterns.
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The thing that hit me first off with this was the cross rhyme warming/morning and I so wanted the fourth line to continue in the same way and read:
"The moon to sunshining gives way with sigh."
Possibly a change to the sixth line as well to get a rhyme with yearning, discerning perhaps. Sorry to muck about but I love set patterns.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
Comment from dragonpoet
This shows the hope of spring in a warm day in winter. It alludes to the water cycle and the way it brings things to life.
Keep writing
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This shows the hope of spring in a warm day in winter. It alludes to the water cycle and the way it brings things to life.
Keep writing
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Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Don't know why you weren't going to release this one mikey it's a beautiful read, with wonderful descriptions -
A journey to a cloud commences -
love it.
cheers,
valda
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Don't know why you weren't going to release this one mikey it's a beautiful read, with wonderful descriptions -
A journey to a cloud commences -
love it.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
Comment from Mary Wakeford
Good one, Michael. Nice presentation as well as the words chosen to conjure up an image for the reader, one of the universe working in tandem with nature and the planets aligning for two people to come together in love.
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Good one, Michael. Nice presentation as well as the words chosen to conjure up an image for the reader, one of the universe working in tandem with nature and the planets aligning for two people to come together in love.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. An accidental release can sometimes be very embarrassing. I think though that you write ab excellent poem about an early sunrise through the mist and soon the rose will blossom with dew drops on it.
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A very well-written poem. An accidental release can sometimes be very embarrassing. I think though that you write ab excellent poem about an early sunrise through the mist and soon the rose will blossom with dew drops on it.
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
Comment from boxergirl
Nice one Miley...beautiful metaphorical imagery in your words and presentation. A very sensuous love poem! Glad you had an"oops" moment.:-)
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Nice one Miley...beautiful metaphorical imagery in your words and presentation. A very sensuous love poem! Glad you had an"oops" moment.:-)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
Comment from Gloria ....
Wow, Mav, this is truly a gorgeous love poem. You remain unrivaled on the site for the writing the most sensuous, sweet love poems of all.
The metaphor choice is stunning and of course taken literally it is even more stunning.
You should compile a hard copy book of love poems one day. I bet you'd make a mint.
The flow of meter and word choices are elegant and powerful.
Love this.
Ange
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Wow, Mav, this is truly a gorgeous love poem. You remain unrivaled on the site for the writing the most sensuous, sweet love poems of all.
The metaphor choice is stunning and of course taken literally it is even more stunning.
You should compile a hard copy book of love poems one day. I bet you'd make a mint.
The flow of meter and word choices are elegant and powerful.
Love this.
Ange
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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If you are trying to make my month or YEAR, than you have done so. Gee, I'm so humbled and pleased by your words and rather speechless. I will read this over and over and convince myself that every word of it is true. :))
Your own use of language is a great inspiration and I TRY to weigh each word as I've come to understand their importance. Love is a great thing. Thanks so much. Love,
Mav
