Comment from Zinnia48

Exceptional

Splendidly written, splendid insight, splendid picture! I was caught by how melodious this is, each line melting into the next. It's both dynamic and gentle. thanks! Caroline

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017

I'm really glad you enjoyed this, Caroline, because the tanka is a completely new form for me.I'm doing my best to learn the ins and outs of how tanka works, and I hope to get much better at writing them in the future.
Thanks for the kind comments and the generous rating as well.
Have a wonderful evening,.

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

A lovely tanka Dean. I've been away for a few days so I'm behind in my reviewing but I hate to miss out on any of your well crafted pieces. You may be new at this, but it is a beautiful one.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017

Thanks again, Janet.
The tanka form is quite new to me, so I will keep practicing at them to try to improve.
Much obliged for your comments.
~Dean

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

I do like what you have done with this Tanka poem Dean, no sitting on the fence with this one.
He's near in nights' darkest hour - your closing line makes one feel safe.
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017

Nope, no straddling the fence either, Dorothy.
Thanks so much for your kind comments.
Cheers,
~Dean

Comment from Realist101

Excellent

I listen to videos of nature sounds sometimes....LOVE this one. I wish it would play for about eight hours! :D And your poem reads right to me Dean, but I'm no poet that's for sure. Especially when it comes to rules of the different forms. All I can say is it is a beautiful post...lovely work. :)

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017

Thanks for your comments assessment of my meager tanka offering, Susan.
I appreciate the review.
Have a wonderful week...

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Dean, This is a very beautiful Tanka poem you have penned! You used great descriptive wording and I love the art work you chose. God is truly near us at every given moment in our life. I enjoyed this very much! Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017

Thanks, Teri.
Warmest wishes,
~Dean

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Howdy, Dean;
-I've always pondered the thought of using the words of either to or with when it comes to expressing a relationship with something as in your pivot line whether to use the word true or with. But I probably prefer the word with in this circumstance.
-All in all it's an excellent pivot line.
-I can see that the first two lines in the third line run all into one line which always confuses me and whether in the in the third line of pivot line should act as part of the first two lines of beyond itself separate but congruent and relevant to the conceptual theme. That's an argument that goes on throughout time.
-The last two lines you would think they would run on together as one sentence but I see where you have a break in the enjambment or a systematic break in the grammar. "An epiphany hits hard/stop/He's here in night's darkest hour". Here's another question a comes to mind is the apostrophe before it have to be asked in the word nights. I would agree that it is before then it would be after speaking of just one night for you are attempting to make relevant that it is many nights.
-The pictures absolutely stunning and magnanimously appropriate And definitely sets the mood to the conceptual theme a with the conceptual theme.
-Thank you for sharing, Dean, and take care and have a good one and when you do share it with the one you love.

Alex

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017

Thanks for reading my tanka, Alex.
It is a new form for me and I'll keep trying and practicing writing them until I get it right.
Have a great week, my friend.
~Dean

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A warm hearted write with faithful sentiments as we turn to the lord in our hour of need, great worded tanka Dean, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017

Thanks for reading my tanka, Dolly.
It is a new form for me and I'll keep trying and practicing writing them until I get it right.
Have a great week, my friend.
~Dean

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This tanka, Heavenly Hopes, has the right set up and reminds us that the still, small voice of God can be heard best when distractions and appointments are done. The idea of the 'darkest hour' I'm sure has a double meaning. Nice poem, Dean.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017

Thanks for reading my tanka, Bill.
It is a new form for me and I'll keep trying and practicing writing them until I get it right.
Have a great week, my friend.
~Dean

Comment from Mark Schardine

Excellent

We seek God, but usually do not understand that His desire to change us for the better will cause us more than a little trouble. You are right, the epiphany will hit hard.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017

Thanks for reading my tanka, Mark.
It is a new form for me and I'll keep trying and practicing writing them until I get it right.
Have a great week, my friend.
~Dean

Comment from Chrissy710

Excellent

Hi Dean, I can see the close connection you have with the stars and serenity and this Tanka was nicely written and Your realization of the fact that your God is always there and shining down on you through the stars to bring you light ( epiphany) must have been be a good feeling. As always a top read Cheers Christine ( I will get on team speak a bit earlier tomorrow to catch up )

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017

Thanks so much, Christine. I appreciate you giving this a go.
I'll look forward to speaking with you tomorrow then.
Ciao for now...


~Dean :)