Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was very well done, it provided an amazing amount of information in just a few short words. It showed the results of a creative mind. It was a beautiful picture although I will admit to not knowing the difference between a moth and a butterfly. It is surprising that something so beautiful can cause so much havoc. Just the circle of life, I guess. Again well done, thanks.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017

Hi Ary Thank you so much you are so kind to me for my work and it is these comments that make me keep writing xx Yes therecarecsomecdifficulties distinguishing a moth and a butterfly as there arecsome many varieties bit this one is known to the grape vine growers and is a nuicance to their crops. Many Thanks for your continued support Cheers Christine😃

reply by aryr on 17-Feb-2017

You are so welcome Christine.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Christine,

I like where you're going with this poem, but I'm afraid repeating the word 'wine' makes me sad. --frowny face-- Secondly, of course, I'm going to want to lose that gerund, if possible. *smile* And, finally, the committee will want to make sure it doesn't read as one sentence. Here's what I would recommend:

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daily wine tour --
grapevine moth partakes
in free taste

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You are welcome to use some, all or NONE of my thoughts. HAHAHAHA!

Thank you!

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017

Hi Robyn, Yes I had thought someone would pick up on the gerunds and yes it is you LOL and also my double use of wine so I do take your comments on board and along with Gypsy's comments have revised and hopefully my latest one is better so thanks for your help it did make me see more clearly without changing too much I hope you like my revised one. Many Cheers Christine😃👍

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Oh, well... this must be one very happy moth then, Christine, LOL.
What with all of that wine he's been tasting/drinking, how could he be anything but?
Nice...
~Dean :)

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017

Hi Dean, Ha Ha, perhaps I really am a grapevine Moth LOL sound good. I am so far behnid with all FS back at work leaves me little time so trying to catch up with reviews and messages. Thanks for a look in 'CHEERS'🍇🍷😃👍Christine

reply by Dean Kuch on 17-Feb-2017

Cheers, Christine.
You're more than welcome.
~Dean

Comment from marybell1

Excellent

I loved your haiku. It was written with the correct number of syllables for each of the three lines. I also liked the idea of a moth going on a wine tour. I had only considered it for us humans.
Best of luck.
Marybell1.

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 Comment Written 17-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017

Hi Marybell1 Thanks for having a read of my haiku Yes this came to me when I was reading about this moth in my local paper so hence the connection hope it worked Cheers Christne🍇🍷😃

Comment from prophetess

Excellent

Very nice and the imagery is beautiful.
I live in wine country in northern Calif, I wonder if it's a problem pest here, hmmm
Something to research and food for thought.
Thank you for this lovely piece.
Prophetess

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 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017

Hi prophetess, Thanks for your lovely review and rating . Yes I wonder if they are a pest elsewhere. I am pleased you like this and appreciate your time Cheers Christine