Comment from Douglas Paul

Excellent

I think tis one is really good, my friend. Looks like a winner to me. Good connecting first two lines with clear imagery and a great aha moment in your satori

 Comment Written 28-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017

Hi Douglas, Thanks for your review of my grapevine moth a play on the wine LOL. much appreciated your lovely words. I raise my glass to you Cheers Christine😃🍷

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I love the artwork you choose for your poem
It is a perfect match
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
I final catching up on my messages... I could use a nice cold glass of wine.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 26-Feb-2017

Hi Cookie, My apology for being so late in this reply family emergency and unable to get on line for a while all good now. Thanks for reading my haiku and yes I will share that wine with you LOL Cheers Christine

reply by misscookie on 26-Feb-2017

You're very welcome.
Have a blessed day.
cookie

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This haiku, Grapevine Moth, uses its twelve syllables to lighten the day of this busy moth by giving him a bar-hopping gig that makes his job seem enjoyable.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017

Hi Bill, Yes I think in my next life this would beca good choice however only 2 week life span not a good option LOL Thanks for reading and reviewing this one Cheers Christine😃🍷

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

LOL - this is so cute! free wine tasting

I like the way you used the moth's name as a catalyst for your
humorous "aha"

Very fun write :-)

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017

Hi Leineco .Well What else does one write about a Grapevine moth LOL. There was an artiicle about these moths in my local paper and that prompted me to research them hence the Haiku followed. Thanks for reading it Cheers Christine😃🍷

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017

Hi Leineco .Well What else does one write about a Grapevine moth LOL. There was an artiicle about these moths in my local paper and that prompted me to research them hence the Haiku followed. Thanks for reading it Cheers Christine😃🍷

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

grapevine moth
partakes in daily tours
free wine taste

a clever use of words in this haiku, Chrissy -
I've read so many now I've run out of words to say (that's a surprise)

great presentation.

Margaret

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017

Hi Margaret, Thanks for your time to read and review my Grapevine Haiku. Yes therecarecmany Haiku's on site but they are fun to write and I think has encouraged People to have a go. I did the class with Gypsy and learn't a lot about writing them ( I hope) Cheers Christine😃🍷

reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017

Hi Margaret, Thanks for your time to read and review my Grapevine Haiku. Yes therecarecmany Haiku's on site but they are fun to write and I think has encouraged People to have a go. I did the class with Gypsy and learn't a lot about writing them ( I hope) Cheers Christine😃🍷

Comment from Jackarrie

Excellent

Hi Chrissy, I love your haiku, and the image you have included is just fantastic
grapevine moth
partakes in daily tours
free wine taste

I love the satori line. Well done, Mary

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017

Hi Mary, Thanks for reading my Haiku for the insects and perhaps that wpuld be a good next life LOL Cheers my friend and have a good day Cheers Christine🍷🍷🍷😃

Comment from pharp

Excellent

Christine,

This is another fine Haiku you have penned my dear. A most enjoyable read. Thanks so much for the author's notes as I have learned something new today. The artwork is simply beautiful, thanks for sharing. Blessings.....Portia

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017

Hi Portia, You are so noce to me and I am glad you enjoyed this little offering. Have a f
great day hugs ++ Cheers Christine😃🍷🍷

Comment from Lu Saluna

Excellent

this is a cute haiku. the first two lines create a concrete image and the satori is interesting. I like the image you selected to go along with your haiku.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017

Hi Lu Thanks for your feedback perhaps that could be my next life a grapevine moth LOL Would be very interesting Glad you liked it Cheers Christine PS I have cecided to do Australian flavoured Haiku 's from now on Cheers Christine 😃🍷

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

LOL a haiku about a moth with a drinking problem. LMAO

This haiku is hilarious. I like it a lot. The composition is good but I would not repeat the word 'wine'.

Here is my suggestion. It's a tiny change and it doesn't change the meaning. Of course, you are the poet and this is your baby so it's up to you.

daily tour
for grapevine moth partakes
free wine taste

I took the word 'wine' for the sake of avoiding repetition, which is not supposed to be used in haiku. The word 'for' connects line one and two wich improves flow.

The satori is awesome. I love it!

Gypsy

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017

Hi Gypsy, Ha Ha I am glad you had a good laugh. Well what else could I do with a Grapevine moth LOL I have taken you advice and Robyn's also so between us all I hope my latest version read better. grapevine moth / partakes in daily tours/ free wine taste. Thanks heaps for your help and I had fun writing my latest Haiku ( I do do a lot of them while I walk my dogs, then have to get home to write them down before I forget them Ha Ha . Help is always appreciated. Cheers until Sunday Christine

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written haiku and another interesting insect native to Australia. A moth feeding from the grapevines, a wine drinking moth. Very interesting author notes as well.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017

Thanks Sandra. Your reviews are always encouraging and I am pleased you liked this one also Cheers Christine😃