Comment from winnona

Excellent

A well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well. Your well-chosen words describe this constellation well. The photo completed the piece well.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017

Thanks for the review, cheers, j

Comment from RobertaLee

Excellent

Very will done, and great presentation. One little glitch, the alliteration in the last line, because it rhymes with the last word got lost in reading. I read it several times before I caught it. Now, rereading it again I am impressed a bit more with the change, moving your pattern to the 2nd and 3rd words.
Best wishes in the contest. Thanks for sharing.
Smiles

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017

Thanks for the encouraging review. Cheers, j

Comment from angel123

Excellent

I like your poem and I'm going to search for the story of the seven sisters. Thank you for providing your author notes. Your poem flows and rhymes well and it tells an interesting story about the seven sisters, which I believe is stars. Good alliteration of words throughout your poem.

angel123

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017

Thanks for the review angel. Ys the seven sisters are a group of stars that can be seen everywhere in the world. Stars like the southern cross cannot be seen in North America and I was thrilled to see it when I came to Africa. All the countries have different stories as to how the stars came to be. I like the North American Indian one best. Cheers, j

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

You chose a wonderful subject for this prompt, IMO - the Seven Sisters are legendary, and a beautiful grouping of stars. Your poem reflects that too, and the alliteration doesn't seem forced at all (which, in my opinion, ruins it when it does).

Best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017

Thanks for the review. When I was sailing I would often use the stars to steer by and I just loved the idea of seven sisters shining down on me. Cheers, j

reply by Dawn Munro on 20-Feb-2017

You're welcome.

Comment from Lu Saluna

Excellent

a lovely poem of the stars (seven sisters). I have probably gazed at these often and not known the name. Good alliteration and rhyme. You have successfully met the challenge, not an easy one at that.
Good luck to you in the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017

Thanks for the review. I love the ideas of seven sisters shining down on me. The stories from all over the world as to how they got up there is very interesting and varied. Cheers, j

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written rhyming alliteration poem. The seven sisters are quite famous and are widely visible from our planet earth.

 Comment Written 18-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017

Thanks for the review. I love all the different stories from Japan to the North American Indians of how those sisters came to be. Cheers, j

Comment from Hayley Solomon

Exceptional

Outstanding allitersen, well done!

I really enjoyed it, it is meaningful, beautiful, alliterative and metrically sound.
Good luck for the competition. I love Pleiades. Many myths around these stars in New Zealand, too

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017

Thanks for the encouraging review and sparkly stars. The seven sisters can be seen everywhere on earth. I love the different stories of how they came to be from Japan and the North American Indians, I am sure New Zealand has their own lore as well. I cherish the idea of seven sisters shining down on me, Have a great week end, cheers, j

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

This poem was a delight to read. Very informative and the use of imagery and metaphors is excellent. You chose the perfect matching artwork, too. Great job!

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017

Thanks for the encouraging review. I always appreciate hearing from you. It was a fun write. These stars can be seen from everywhere on earth, so there are many different cultural stories about how those sisters came to be. I especially like the Native American Indian version. Cheers, j

Comment from marybell1

Excellent

I really enjoyed your poem. Keeping to all the rules is not easy and you did it perfectly. e.g. the alliteration and the rhyming.
Congratulations.
Marybell1.

 Comment Written 17-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017

Welcome to fanstory and I look forward to sharing our stories. Thanks for the encouraging review, it was a fun write, cheers, j

reply by marybell1 on 17-Feb-2017

You are most welcome.
Marybell1.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This Rhyming Alliterisen is original in approach and orderly structured in rhymes as the poet has maintained a free flow of thoughts coupled with synchronized word visual imagery thru ups and downs in expressiveness, I liked and enjoyed the read.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017

Thanks for the insightful review.It was a fun write. I like the fact that the sisters can be seen everywhere in the world and the different stories from different cultures on how the sisters came to be. I especially love the American Native Indian lore. Cheers, j