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Comment from c_lucas
The Jaguar is one of the fastest in the animal kingdom. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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The Jaguar is one of the fastest in the animal kingdom. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Charlie!
Comment from Joy Graham
Oh yes indeedy :) Great description here and the comparison to a cat burglar. That is one frightening picture. I wouldn't want to run into him. Interesting that your aha line starts this haiku. I'm used to the aha line as the last one. However, I like your twist on tradition.
We got to hold a baby jaguar when we went to Mexico a few years ago. I love that picture. It's a great vacation memory.
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Oh yes indeedy :) Great description here and the comparison to a cat burglar. That is one frightening picture. I wouldn't want to run into him. Interesting that your aha line starts this haiku. I'm used to the aha line as the last one. However, I like your twist on tradition.
We got to hold a baby jaguar when we went to Mexico a few years ago. I love that picture. It's a great vacation memory.
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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WOW! I can't imagine holding a real jaguar. That would be amazing! Lucky girl! Thanks for reading!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
You used the aaaahhhh for the first line, sometimes hard to do but this is a true haiku and loved the punch line as I call it. Very well done
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You used the aaaahhhh for the first line, sometimes hard to do but this is a true haiku and loved the punch line as I call it. Very well done
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Barb!
