A Moving Masterpiece
Clouds86 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the use of art and music metaphors for clouds in this spiritual/nature poem.
It also ends up being a love poem. Three poems in one set of three quatrains.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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I like the use of art and music metaphors for clouds in this spiritual/nature poem.
It also ends up being a love poem. Three poems in one set of three quatrains.
Keep writing.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
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You're welcome. Same to you.
Joan
Comment from Leineco
Your poem leaves the reader no choice but to smile :-)
Who amongst us has not been captivated by the tantalizing
cryptography of clouds slowly shifting. . .drifting. . .morphing?
Who has not been humbled to see colorful brushstrokes paint
the skies so adroitly as sunset makes its entrance?
Wonderful poem :-)
(P.S. I love that you center-formatted these stanzas on a field of blue -
turning your very words into cloud banks :-)
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Your poem leaves the reader no choice but to smile :-)
Who amongst us has not been captivated by the tantalizing
cryptography of clouds slowly shifting. . .drifting. . .morphing?
Who has not been humbled to see colorful brushstrokes paint
the skies so adroitly as sunset makes its entrance?
Wonderful poem :-)
(P.S. I love that you center-formatted these stanzas on a field of blue -
turning your very words into cloud banks :-)
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind comments and notice of little details,
Blessings
Janet
Comment from nomi338
Everything that Almighty God has put his creative hand to is indeed a miracle. The planets which include the earth and best of all, us. Wonderful miracles all. I am so grateful that he chose us as his signature earthen creations.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Everything that Almighty God has put his creative hand to is indeed a miracle. The planets which include the earth and best of all, us. Wonderful miracles all. I am so grateful that he chose us as his signature earthen creations.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from DonandVicki
Your poem touched me and seems to do what every good poem should do. And that is open the imagination. Very well composed.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Your poem touched me and seems to do what every good poem should do. And that is open the imagination. Very well composed.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thank you DonandVicki for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from mermaids
Clouds are poetry in motion. Your words reflect how beautiful they are. "A brush stroke from His mighty hand" is a wonderful line that shows how clouds are a creation of God. Excellent poetic form.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Clouds are poetry in motion. Your words reflect how beautiful they are. "A brush stroke from His mighty hand" is a wonderful line that shows how clouds are a creation of God. Excellent poetic form.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from johnwilson
This is a glorious poem reminding me of Wadsworth. My favorite lines are: Each cloud a moving masterpiece
like murals sketched upon the sky. Their edges curl and drift in flight --
on breaths of God -- they dare to fly.
Suddenly I realized I would have to copy & paste the entire piece. Without being too "flowery" you used metaphors & similes with ease. I so enjoyed reading this piece. It flowed perfectly and is publish-worthy!
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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This is a glorious poem reminding me of Wadsworth. My favorite lines are: Each cloud a moving masterpiece
like murals sketched upon the sky. Their edges curl and drift in flight --
on breaths of God -- they dare to fly.
Suddenly I realized I would have to copy & paste the entire piece. Without being too "flowery" you used metaphors & similes with ease. I so enjoyed reading this piece. It flowed perfectly and is publish-worthy!
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thank you John for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind comments and those sparkling six stars.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Caressa_08
I did that too, as a small child, and especially on a ride in the backseat of my parent's car out for a drive, usually on a Sunday in the countryside...and it really kept me occupied... never bored with this pleasant view...just watching all the fluffy clouds pass me in the sky above.
Thanks for sharing such a good read...Caressa_08
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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I did that too, as a small child, and especially on a ride in the backseat of my parent's car out for a drive, usually on a Sunday in the countryside...and it really kept me occupied... never bored with this pleasant view...just watching all the fluffy clouds pass me in the sky above.
Thanks for sharing such a good read...Caressa_08
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thank you Caressa for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from rama devi
Each cloud a moving masterpiece
like murals sketched upon the sky.
Those two lines could be an aphoristic poem all on thier own. Love them! Perfectly voiced and fine simile. Also love the alliteration of M and S as well as consonance of K and C.
Lovely elaboration and medley of F sounds too:
Their edges curl and drift in flight --
on breaths of God -- they dare to fly.
Love the use of opus in this extended metaphor
A brush stroke from His mighty hand --
and sunny days fall into night,
with moonbeams reigning o'er the stars --
an opus made for our delight.
Sweet shift of focus that makes this an expansive love poem:
If I could keep these wond'ring clouds
that stretch across infinity,
I'd choose one from the cobalt blue,
to sail with you beyond the sea.
Lovely work. Eloquent.
Enjoyed.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Each cloud a moving masterpiece
like murals sketched upon the sky.
Those two lines could be an aphoristic poem all on thier own. Love them! Perfectly voiced and fine simile. Also love the alliteration of M and S as well as consonance of K and C.
Lovely elaboration and medley of F sounds too:
Their edges curl and drift in flight --
on breaths of God -- they dare to fly.
Love the use of opus in this extended metaphor
A brush stroke from His mighty hand --
and sunny days fall into night,
with moonbeams reigning o'er the stars --
an opus made for our delight.
Sweet shift of focus that makes this an expansive love poem:
If I could keep these wond'ring clouds
that stretch across infinity,
I'd choose one from the cobalt blue,
to sail with you beyond the sea.
Lovely work. Eloquent.
Enjoyed.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thank you rd for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind and detailed comments. I'm so pleased that you enjoyed this one. It was a joy to write.
Blessings
Janet
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And a joy to read too!
Love and blessings, rd
Comment from royowen
I am a cloud person Janet, I would spend time lying on my back, imagining
"Great lands amidst white clouds" (a line from a song I wrote). Beautifully scribed work my friend, with some great metaphors and imaginative writing to enhance and includ, of course, the master artist Himself, who writes the opus and paints the sky! Beautifully done, my friend, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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I am a cloud person Janet, I would spend time lying on my back, imagining
"Great lands amidst white clouds" (a line from a song I wrote). Beautifully scribed work my friend, with some great metaphors and imaginative writing to enhance and includ, of course, the master artist Himself, who writes the opus and paints the sky! Beautifully done, my friend, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thank you Roy for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I always look forward to hearing from you my friend.
Blessings
Janet
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Welcome Janet,
Comment from doggymad
Lovely poem which also took me back to my childhood. I used to lie in the garden and watch the clouds chase across the sky.
I like the idea of capturing one for yourself and shaping it to follow your dreams
hugs
Freda
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Lovely poem which also took me back to my childhood. I used to lie in the garden and watch the clouds chase across the sky.
I like the idea of capturing one for yourself and shaping it to follow your dreams
hugs
Freda
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thank you Freda for your thoughtful and encouraging review. I appreciate your kind comments.
Blessings
Janet
