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Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
A brilliant Haiku as ever, this is brilliantly crafted and beautifully thought out, a fantastic Haiku with all the right elements well done kindest regards Meia xx
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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A brilliant Haiku as ever, this is brilliantly crafted and beautifully thought out, a fantastic Haiku with all the right elements well done kindest regards Meia xx
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Meia.
I'm working on reviewing your story for the horror writing contest as we speak.
I appreciate the review.
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Dean, I was expecting scary with your title - and was brave and prepared. Alas you had me laughing with your last line. This was such a great haiku. Excellent imagery, formed well.
Thanks for sharing, enjoy your day.
m
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Dear Dean, I was expecting scary with your title - and was brave and prepared. Alas you had me laughing with your last line. This was such a great haiku. Excellent imagery, formed well.
Thanks for sharing, enjoy your day.
m
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thanks for reading, Maureen.
I'm glad it made you chuckle, as intended.
You enjoy your day as well, and thanks again.
Comment from royowen
This is a very clever work Dean, the sheer cheeky ambiguity is worth reading alone. You certainly have grabbed poetry by the throat, and made your own, well done, excellent wrk, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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This is a very clever work Dean, the sheer cheeky ambiguity is worth reading alone. You certainly have grabbed poetry by the throat, and made your own, well done, excellent wrk, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Roy.
I try to be entertaining...if nothing else.
Cheers, Cobber...
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No worries matey.
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Ya beaudie Deano
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written haiku. The bats are not my favorite animal on this earth, they totally freak me out, there were some by accident comes into my house at one time.
Possible typo:
If you mean horse your second line says: hoarse
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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A very well-written haiku. The bats are not my favorite animal on this earth, they totally freak me out, there were some by accident comes into my house at one time.
Possible typo:
If you mean horse your second line says: hoarse
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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No, I meant "hoarse", Sandra, as having a hoarse, or scratchy voice.
Hence the play on words in my satori.
When your voice is hoarse, it's often said you have "a frog in your throat."
You really didn't get that?
Wow...
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I did see it that way, the author notes had me confused that you could have misspelled horse, that is why I mentioned a possible typo.
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No, it was no typo, it was completely intentional.
My author's notes were just a brief explanation on my play on words.
That's all.
Thanks.
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I got it.
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I thought you might.
Comment from write hand blue
I like it, a frog in it's throat. I wouldn't have believed it, a meal that size, relative to the size of the bat. A witty poem in just a few words. Presented in your own immaculate fashion.
~Mel~
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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I like it, a frog in it's throat. I wouldn't have believed it, a meal that size, relative to the size of the bat. A witty poem in just a few words. Presented in your own immaculate fashion.
~Mel~
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thanks for reading, Mel.
I appreciate it.
Comment from Rasmine
Good poem. You find out the most interesting facts, and good pictures to illustrate. I will go watch the youtube movie. Thanks.
I couldn't keep watching once the poor wrinkle bat got attacked. Some things I just can't watch.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Good poem. You find out the most interesting facts, and good pictures to illustrate. I will go watch the youtube movie. Thanks.
I couldn't keep watching once the poor wrinkle bat got attacked. Some things I just can't watch.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Nature can sometimes be cruel, Rasmine.
That's why they coined the phrase, "survival of the fittest".
Thanks so much for reading...
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Dean,
Or alternately titled 'How many animals can you fit in one haiku?' LOL
I liked this one. It's very witty and clever. I like the use of hoarse as well in the second line, giving that pseudo third animal reference.
very nice
G
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Hi Dean,
Or alternately titled 'How many animals can you fit in one haiku?' LOL
I liked this one. It's very witty and clever. I like the use of hoarse as well in the second line, giving that pseudo third animal reference.
very nice
G
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Hahaha...yeah, G-Man.
I managed to work frogs, horses, and (last but certainly not least), Vampire bats into this one.
Much obliged for the review.
Comment from bookishfabler
You are so clever. I was waiting for creepy and gorey, then saw the bat and thought, Hmm what is this? When I read your Haiku and the little twist I giggled. Very clever indeed.
hugs Heidi
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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You are so clever. I was waiting for creepy and gorey, then saw the bat and thought, Hmm what is this? When I read your Haiku and the little twist I giggled. Very clever indeed.
hugs Heidi
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Not really "clever", Heidi.
I think most would agree that "warped" would be a more appropriate word, heh-heh.
Thanks for reading...
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I like clever
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:)
Comment from DR DIP
hehe thats funny, love the play on words a cliches Dean in this one Great photo do you think the frog croaked? lol thanks for sharing
Now go to bed!!
dipster
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reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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hehe thats funny, love the play on words a cliches Dean in this one Great photo do you think the frog croaked? lol thanks for sharing
Now go to bed!!
dipster
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Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Nighty-night, Dip.
Sleep tight, and thanks for reading.
Pleasant screams, heh-heh...
