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A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets

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Comment from Sis Cat
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Wow, Dean, this is a great haiku. It is well composed to deliver a powerful satori "a frog in his throat." I also learned something unexpected about these unusual nocturnal creatures. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    Well, that's good to know, Sis Cat.
    Thanks a bunch for reading.
    Hope the bat noises didn't drive you bananas, LOL...
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Comment from Thomas Bowling
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A clever poem. It reminds me of Interview With the Vampire. Lestat had a rough time with the frogs and the creatures of the swamp.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    Yes, Anne Rice is a genius.
    Thanks a bunch for reading, Tom.
    Hope the bat noises didn't drive you bananas, LOL...
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Comment from His Grayness
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Outstanding work, to say the least! I found this to be a real attention grabber with outstanding packaging and interesting content. Everything about this writing is brilliant and I can't imagine anything that would make it better! HIS GRAYNESS

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    Thanks a bunch for reading, Vance, and as always, for the stellar review and complimentary comments as well.
    Hope the bat noises didn't drive you bananas, my friend, LOL...
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Comment from rama devi
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Ha ha ha...thanks for the chuckle. Groan-able puns are fun! This is well done and well presented. Yikes!~ Good story-telling style effectively incorporated, making this unique (well the image, too).

One optional suggestion to add a dash after line two for a stronger dramatic pause effect. Just my two cents.

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    I will see what I can do, rd.
    Thanks very much for the thoughtful suggestion and review.
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reply by rama devi on 16-Feb-2017
    :-))))
Comment from robyn corum
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Dean,

I really, really like this one! I hope it makes it into the book! It's funny and clever and tongue- in-cheek ...well, actually, FROG in cheek. heehee Thanks!

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    Hahaha...
    Thanks for reading, Robyn. I appreciate your review as always.
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Comment from mbroyles2
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Excellent haiku using the imagery of a bat.
The poor frog doesn't stand a chance before he croaks. (Pun intended )
Great writing, Dean.
Michael

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    Hahaha, thanks, Michael.
    ~Dean
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
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Perfect, perfect and makes the total sense. Loved the frog in his throat. Nicely done. You have the talent not just the 5-7-5 that some do and call it haiku. Loved it

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    Thanks, Barb.
    I appreciate your comments.
    ~Dean
Comment from Teri7
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This is a very haiku you have penned about the vampire bat. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. Bats, frogs and snakes are not my favorite things! lol Good job! Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    Thanks, remain blessed...
Comment from Pantygynt
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This is just so funny in its words and so horrible in what is pictured. I will never use this phrase again withoutrhis haiku and its attendent art work coming to mind.

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    Then I did just what I set out to do, Jim. To write a funny haiku and make it memorable...for some...
    Thanks for the comments.
    Cheers,
    ~Dean
Comment from Janet Foor
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A fun horror haiku Dean - who but you could deliver that? Still laughing - and at that poor little frogs expense. Excellent my friend. Wish I had another six for this one.

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
    A-w-w-wwww, I'm not worried too much about sixes on a Thursday, Janet.
    Especially for haiku.
    It's hard enough getting a six for an epic poem on Sunday, LOL.
    I know there are some sixes still "out there", but many don't find the shorter forms of poetic expression worthy of receiving one.
    Go figure, because a lot of work, time, thought, research and effort goes into writing them.
    Thanks for the review, and the five.
    It is appreciated.
    ~Dean