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Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "haiku (in the dead of night)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Darlin',
That sound got me. LOL It sounds like mice ... eeeaaakkkk...
You have a perfect 5/7/5, not that you have to have it in English but it is cool that it happened that way without trying.
Good job, sweetie pie,
luv ya,
Gypsy
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Hello, Darlin',
That sound got me. LOL It sounds like mice ... eeeaaakkkk...
You have a perfect 5/7/5, not that you have to have it in English but it is cool that it happened that way without trying.
Good job, sweetie pie,
luv ya,
Gypsy
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Thanks for checkin' this out, darlin'.
I really appreciate and value your opinion, mainly because I know that YOU know what you're talking about.LOL...
haiku hugs!
~Me...<3 <3 <3
Comment from LoannaLois
Oh for another star...Dean, this Haiku is perfection. I knew you were up to something as I scrolled down the page and the spotted belly became a frog. What a lovely ending.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Oh for another star...Dean, this Haiku is perfection. I knew you were up to something as I scrolled down the page and the spotted belly became a frog. What a lovely ending.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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A fitting end to a froggy life, Lois.
Thanks so much for reading!
Comment from strivinginsc
This is very visible and well written. The photo gave me chills, I am sure I will have a nightmare fill night. Good job on a scary outcome!
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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This is very visible and well written. The photo gave me chills, I am sure I will have a nightmare fill night. Good job on a scary outcome!
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great job with this humorous Haiku Dean great finishing line-
a frog in his throat - made me smile. Our local park is partly closed off because of fruit bats taking over the trees. Can't say what I really think of the stinking creatures.
Enjoyed this read though,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Great job with this humorous Haiku Dean great finishing line-
a frog in his throat - made me smile. Our local park is partly closed off because of fruit bats taking over the trees. Can't say what I really think of the stinking creatures.
Enjoyed this read though,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
Comment from azwildrosa
Nice! I love the image you've created here. The finale thought leaves me thinking how awesome this is. Another great read in so few words. Thank you for sharing. I look forward to reading more of your work.
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Nice! I love the image you've created here. The finale thought leaves me thinking how awesome this is. Another great read in so few words. Thank you for sharing. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my haiku for the Haiku Club Challenge on mammals, azwildrosa.
I am very grateful for the encouraging comments and your positive feedback.
Thank you too for the stellar six star rating, I'm glad to you you felt it worthy.
More than anything else, I'm just really pleased to know that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Grasshopper2
Gorey video, gruesome subject, evil looking and only feeds and flies at night. What's not to like? Your syllable count of 5/7/5 is spot on for haiku. Your kigo is good. Lines one and two are connected grammatically and your use of the dash as your cut is appropriate. Your satori is funny with your play on words. A fun and excellent read.
Blessings,
Michael
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Gorey video, gruesome subject, evil looking and only feeds and flies at night. What's not to like? Your syllable count of 5/7/5 is spot on for haiku. Your kigo is good. Lines one and two are connected grammatically and your use of the dash as your cut is appropriate. Your satori is funny with your play on words. A fun and excellent read.
Blessings,
Michael
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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I'm still working on graphics such as your No bones about it. Haven't spent the time to do it right...soon...maybe. Later.
Comment from Lu Saluna
this is an outstanding haiku
I love the imagery and the mystery and fear around the vampire bat - your haiku captures this beautifully
They are feared by many and loved by noon (except for a few of us who find them very fascinating)
I love the satori, as the bat eats the frog head first
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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this is an outstanding haiku
I love the imagery and the mystery and fear around the vampire bat - your haiku captures this beautifully
They are feared by many and loved by noon (except for a few of us who find them very fascinating)
I love the satori, as the bat eats the frog head first
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
An excellent haiku Dean, if ever words and picture go hand in hand it was this one.
A frog in his throat.....killer line, very well done.
Thanks for sharing, have a lovely day
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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An excellent haiku Dean, if ever words and picture go hand in hand it was this one.
A frog in his throat.....killer line, very well done.
Thanks for sharing, have a lovely day
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Class ha ha
Comment from Connie C
What a great haiku this is, Dean, with such a very clever third line,
a frog in his throat."
With your usual accompanying sound effects, this one really works for me! I have to admit, though, it's kinda hard looking at the picture of the poor frog being devoured.
Connie
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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What a great haiku this is, Dean, with such a very clever third line,
a frog in his throat."
With your usual accompanying sound effects, this one really works for me! I have to admit, though, it's kinda hard looking at the picture of the poor frog being devoured.
Connie
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
Comment from sue133
Well, you've done it again Dean! A brilliant haiku and I enjoyed the sound effects and the video. I've got to hand it to you.................you have a gift. Susan
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Well, you've done it again Dean! A brilliant haiku and I enjoyed the sound effects and the video. I've got to hand it to you.................you have a gift. Susan
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
