Humanity Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "The Book of Hokee"A science fiction book about genetic engineering.
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Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Padna.
I'm back for another read. This is coming along very well.
"You know," Koko said, "I'm surprised at how well the cave turned out." (So am I, Ma'am.)
" It wasn't my choice to make this trip, but I accept the need for it. The cave is great." (Well, thank you... I think.)
"Let's hope this is the only company we get today," Sani said." (Gulp!)
"Archie nodded as he bit off a piece of dried lamb." (Where the flippin' heck did he get dried lamb? Hahahaha!)
"Twins? Most likely... identical?" (Apart from their hair lol.)
"The cover bore an emblazoned image of a golden hawk. Its wings outstretched as though in flight. A rat clutched in one claw, the other, a hare. In the background, a full moon glowed, illuminating a valley below. A gorge silhouetted the other nine animals of the other Hokee houses." (There is some beautiful imagery in this paragraph. Wonderful.)
"Chapter 4: Donkey House" (Yep, that's where I'd be put.)
"I wouldn't be surprised. Why don't you scoot over and look with me?" Archie held the book up as a taunt. "I promise to be a good boy." (That's the same line I used on the princess! Except I was reading about scorpion fritters.)
"In order to repair generations of poor breeding and bad choices, my colleagues and I have taken on a task with possible heroic ramifications. In the process, we have made a discovery that may change the world as we know it." (Crikey! Pickle my grandmother! That is one scary end to a chapter, Padna, but I love the shock value.)
Great job, once again.
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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G'day Padna.
I'm back for another read. This is coming along very well.
"You know," Koko said, "I'm surprised at how well the cave turned out." (So am I, Ma'am.)
" It wasn't my choice to make this trip, but I accept the need for it. The cave is great." (Well, thank you... I think.)
"Let's hope this is the only company we get today," Sani said." (Gulp!)
"Archie nodded as he bit off a piece of dried lamb." (Where the flippin' heck did he get dried lamb? Hahahaha!)
"Twins? Most likely... identical?" (Apart from their hair lol.)
"The cover bore an emblazoned image of a golden hawk. Its wings outstretched as though in flight. A rat clutched in one claw, the other, a hare. In the background, a full moon glowed, illuminating a valley below. A gorge silhouetted the other nine animals of the other Hokee houses." (There is some beautiful imagery in this paragraph. Wonderful.)
"Chapter 4: Donkey House" (Yep, that's where I'd be put.)
"I wouldn't be surprised. Why don't you scoot over and look with me?" Archie held the book up as a taunt. "I promise to be a good boy." (That's the same line I used on the princess! Except I was reading about scorpion fritters.)
"In order to repair generations of poor breeding and bad choices, my colleagues and I have taken on a task with possible heroic ramifications. In the process, we have made a discovery that may change the world as we know it." (Crikey! Pickle my grandmother! That is one scary end to a chapter, Padna, but I love the shock value.)
Great job, once again.
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 29-Apr-2017
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2017
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You are so funny! Thanks for the stary review!
I wonder what house they'd put me in?? Wasn't one for cows...definitely not tarantula! I think you would switch houses on a regular basis to keep from getting bored. haha
Hold the thought about the scorpions...
Take care, and Kumusta to my favorite Kwalas
Oh, and happy getting close to your Birthday!
Comment from w.j.debi
Ah, the plot thickens and enemies are getting comfortable together as they rest before the next big battle. Now this book may have many secrets to reveal and it looks like some of them won't be so nice.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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Ah, the plot thickens and enemies are getting comfortable together as they rest before the next big battle. Now this book may have many secrets to reveal and it looks like some of them won't be so nice.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2017
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I see you have reviewed three chapters! How sweet. I'm so excited you have taken the time!!
Rhonda
Comment from Dustybones
I knew that there was much more evil being perpetrated with all of this "wonderful" project. Now we can all see the whole idea behind the leaders plans. Good lead-in to the next part.
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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I knew that there was much more evil being perpetrated with all of this "wonderful" project. Now we can all see the whole idea behind the leaders plans. Good lead-in to the next part.
Comment Written 21-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 21-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much. There have been way too many groups of people who have treated other cultures as less than human, and not just Hitler, but, him too.
Thanks for another review!!
Rhonda
Comment from Mustang Patty
The continuing saga is very interesting, and you've done a good job of weaving the characters together and still have their separate identities. Wouldn't it be great if we could find such a book? Maybe the complexities of life would be explained, and some of the turmoil in the world could be quelled.
I like the way you draw with your alliterations. I can 'see' the characters, and though you are weaving the story-the actual tale is told through the thoughts and words of your creations.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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The continuing saga is very interesting, and you've done a good job of weaving the characters together and still have their separate identities. Wouldn't it be great if we could find such a book? Maybe the complexities of life would be explained, and some of the turmoil in the world could be quelled.
I like the way you draw with your alliterations. I can 'see' the characters, and though you are weaving the story-the actual tale is told through the thoughts and words of your creations.
Thank you for sharing,
~patty~
Comment Written 20-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 20-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, Patty!! I love your review and your comments. They were very helpful. Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
SO much work goes into your writing, a real credit to your art. This fantastic piece of writing was interesting and highly enjoyable. I always enjoy your writing it is flawless and therefore can give no critique but fabulous! All my best wishes Meia x
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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SO much work goes into your writing, a real credit to your art. This fantastic piece of writing was interesting and highly enjoyable. I always enjoy your writing it is flawless and therefore can give no critique but fabulous! All my best wishes Meia x
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, Meia! I appreciate the wonderful review and comments. Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Rasmine
You have a great imagination. Seems that this is sort of based on aboriginal tribes? or Native Americans? It seems very complex and I want to tell you to just enjoy it! :)
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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You have a great imagination. Seems that this is sort of based on aboriginal tribes? or Native Americans? It seems very complex and I want to tell you to just enjoy it! :)
Comment Written 19-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much. It seems a bit to be heading that way, but it goes a completely different direction. Thanks for looking into the story!
Rhonda
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
This is a very well written chapter, my friend. I think this is avery interesting story, although have missed parts of it. I appreciate the author notes which helped me get back on track with the plot~Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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This is a very well written chapter, my friend. I think this is avery interesting story, although have missed parts of it. I appreciate the author notes which helped me get back on track with the plot~Debbie
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, Debbie, for the beautiful six star rating. It makes me feel happy and satisfied.
I'm glad the author's notes helped. I find it an easier way to catch people up.
Thank you for he help!
Comment from F. Wehr3
Nicely done chapter, Rhonda. I didn't find any Spag. I'm really getting into your premise. It fascinates me, by not only the plausibility of it, but perhaps a growing necessity. We are definitely not as resilient as we used to be. Now, I want Archie to read more of that book. Well done! I'm out of sixes.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Nicely done chapter, Rhonda. I didn't find any Spag. I'm really getting into your premise. It fascinates me, by not only the plausibility of it, but perhaps a growing necessity. We are definitely not as resilient as we used to be. Now, I want Archie to read more of that book. Well done! I'm out of sixes.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, Russell. I appreciate the review and comments. I agree, we aren't as resilient as we once were.
Thanks for the virtual 6. I'll gladly take it. Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from emptypage
I bet I can guess who wrote this book, made this plan, started this dystopia......
Good story, as usual. I'm really glad Ayala understands these folks better and is coming around to their way of thinking. She is, right?
Keep writing, I'll keep reading. I'm really enjoying it.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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I bet I can guess who wrote this book, made this plan, started this dystopia......
Good story, as usual. I'm really glad Ayala understands these folks better and is coming around to their way of thinking. She is, right?
Keep writing, I'll keep reading. I'm really enjoying it.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Yes, she is going to come around, but she'll got a shock to work her way through first.
Thanks for reading and keeping up,
Rhonda
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh my!! this is no different than ethical cleansing. How perfect of a subject for our times. You are doing a great job writing this. I can't wait for more.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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Oh my!! this is no different than ethical cleansing. How perfect of a subject for our times. You are doing a great job writing this. I can't wait for more.
Comment Written 18-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2017
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You're right, and that's what the hidden theme is to this story. Thanks for reviewing, and catching the meaning.
Take care,
Rhonda
