My Refuge
My hiding place from the world15 total reviews
Comment from Joy Graham
It is lonely to be the kid who doesn't fit in. That was me when I was young, and I'm still like that now. I think you have a good response for this contest theme of lonely.
This is a pay it forward review as started by IAmCat. I searched your portfolio to find a post that needed one more review to get a blue ribbon or an all time best status. I think my review will boost you to 15 reviews and get the blue ribbon.
Merry Christmas, Cass :)
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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It is lonely to be the kid who doesn't fit in. That was me when I was young, and I'm still like that now. I think you have a good response for this contest theme of lonely.
This is a pay it forward review as started by IAmCat. I searched your portfolio to find a post that needed one more review to get a blue ribbon or an all time best status. I think my review will boost you to 15 reviews and get the blue ribbon.
Merry Christmas, Cass :)
Comment Written 24-Dec-2017
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2017
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Dear Joy, Thank you Sweetiekins. How very kind of you to set me up with another blue ribbon. They do look ever so pretty and I just love it when something gets that far. This is a Gift of the nicest kind, and it is deeply appreciated . Yours sincerely Cass
Comment from BeasPeas
A good point of view to have, similar to mine, especially these lines:
" They would smirk at my smiles of delight
"Look, she's grinning at nothing again."
And I'd smile even wider at their blindness
Pleased to leave them in ignorance
Than to share the magic of my dreams."
Marilyn
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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A good point of view to have, similar to mine, especially these lines:
" They would smirk at my smiles of delight
"Look, she's grinning at nothing again."
And I'd smile even wider at their blindness
Pleased to leave them in ignorance
Than to share the magic of my dreams."
Marilyn
Comment Written 17-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 19-Feb-2017
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Dear Marilyn,Thank you for your review and the five stars. Funny thing since I wrote this piece. I feel as if something has crystallized in my mind. A thought that I couldn't quite get the hang of has become understandable. It's weird how writing things down and looking at them in print makes things clear. Well done Me cheers Cass
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I agree. For some reason seeing our words in print gives a different perspective.
Comment from Bobbi22
We protect ourselves from the effects of loneliness in different ways. Sometimes it's just a matter of creating a safe place in our minds that shelters us from the pain. Well written poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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We protect ourselves from the effects of loneliness in different ways. Sometimes it's just a matter of creating a safe place in our minds that shelters us from the pain. Well written poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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Dear Friend, Thank you for your review and the five stars. I learned by instinct to live in my head at an early age and have never quite given up the practice. Thanks for your good wishes cheers Cass
Comment from Doc Holiday
They didn't deserve to share your dreams.
We all have our special hiding places where we seek refuge and build our dreams.
Your poem speaks of this place of safe harbor well!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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They didn't deserve to share your dreams.
We all have our special hiding places where we seek refuge and build our dreams.
Your poem speaks of this place of safe harbor well!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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Hi Doc. Thanks for your review and the five stars. I did try to express what was in my mind ONCE, but it was a distressing error on my part which I never fell into again. After that one occasion, I always tried to hide myself away when day dreaming. I had a neat hidey hole up on the shed roof, which I had been told NOT to climb when I was too small to manage it anyway. They used to look for me in vain,not realizing my short legs had grown like a grass hopper's and the flowering vine was strong enough to take my weight. They never found out where I hid, although they searched repeatedly. There's more than one kind of hiding place if needed cheers Cass
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. I think you have completed the challenge of the contest very well. I think all of us had a special place that was out sanctuary as a child. I think you have described your well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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A well-written contest entry. I think you have completed the challenge of the contest very well. I think all of us had a special place that was out sanctuary as a child. I think you have described your well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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Dear Winnona, Thank you for your review and the five stars. Yes it was a sanctuary, as safe as a church and just as sacred . I still go there occasionally in meditation, and come away refreshed. cheers Cass
Comment from estory
I think you created a great sense of isolation in this poem, the narrator is cut off from the people around, closed up in that closet, lost in their dreams, their escape. "Visions of a beauty soap bubbled past' was interesting, and "Look, she's grinning at nothing again" hits hard. You really get a sense that these people don't understand this person at all. "I never told of the place I had to hide in/ When their world became ugly" also strong. nice job with this prompt estory
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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I think you created a great sense of isolation in this poem, the narrator is cut off from the people around, closed up in that closet, lost in their dreams, their escape. "Visions of a beauty soap bubbled past' was interesting, and "Look, she's grinning at nothing again" hits hard. You really get a sense that these people don't understand this person at all. "I never told of the place I had to hide in/ When their world became ugly" also strong. nice job with this prompt estory
Comment Written 15-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017
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Dear Friend, thank you for your review and the five stars.You pick up well on how it was way back then, and I gain a sense of comfort from that even after so long a time ago. I was always "the odd one out", but now I rejoice in being a totally self motivated individual which would not have happened if I had followed the role models in front of me. Thanks again cheers Cass
Comment from dragonpoet
It seems like the speaker in this poem can hide in her imagination when the world is causing her pain. He/she is wiser than those around her believe he/she is.
Hope you did well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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It seems like the speaker in this poem can hide in her imagination when the world is causing her pain. He/she is wiser than those around her believe he/she is.
Hope you did well in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 14-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Dear Dragonpoet, Thank you for your review and the five stars. On looking back I realize just how much those interludes away from the reality of my world meant to me. When they ridiculed and scoffed, that buffer I had managed to erect kept me sane.
They were totally dysfunctional. Feral too. Now they are all just glimpses of bad dreams seen in the clear ,cold light of day. thanks for your good wishes cheers Cass
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My pleasure. Glad they kept you whole.
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Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem of loneliness. Kids are the worst abusers to other children because they don't realize what they are doing and ate probably seen the behaviour somewhere else.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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A very well-written poem of loneliness. Kids are the worst abusers to other children because they don't realize what they are doing and ate probably seen the behaviour somewhere else.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Dear Sandra, thank you for your review and the five stars. Yes this is true about children being the cruelest abusers. I found it so.And ,yes, it was behavior copied and accepted from and by parents. Looking back it all seems so trivial and petty. Thing is I survived and didn't perpetuate the same conduct on my children. SO I WON!!! cheers Cass
Comment from Pantygynt
I think many children have been in this place. As an only child I had a make believe world I could hide in and, being alone never had the problem of mockery from others. come to think of it, I still usse it occasionally. Now there's an admission for you.
"I never told of the place I had to hide in"
This line interested me because it can be read two ways. Maybe this is intentional. If not maybe you might wish to reconsider it.
The first way is to consider it as the place I possessed in which I could hide. There is however the idea that it might be the place in which felt compelled to hide. I hope this dichotomy is clear, it depends how the word "had" is interpreted.
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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I think many children have been in this place. As an only child I had a make believe world I could hide in and, being alone never had the problem of mockery from others. come to think of it, I still usse it occasionally. Now there's an admission for you.
"I never told of the place I had to hide in"
This line interested me because it can be read two ways. Maybe this is intentional. If not maybe you might wish to reconsider it.
The first way is to consider it as the place I possessed in which I could hide. There is however the idea that it might be the place in which felt compelled to hide. I hope this dichotomy is clear, it depends how the word "had" is interpreted.
Comment Written 14-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Dear Friend, This line is the pivotal part of this entire piece. It's a clue really to where I was at . Yes ,it was a voluntary retreat from the world , and yes there were times when I fled to my sanctuary and away from a dark and ugly environment to save my very existence. Thanks for pointing this out though, I thought I was being Oh so subtle. Cheers Cass
Comment from William Ross
A good free verse write on this lonely prompt that hiding place your refuge reads and flows well. good luck on this and have a great day
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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A good free verse write on this lonely prompt that hiding place your refuge reads and flows well. good luck on this and have a great day
Comment Written 14-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Dear William, Thank you for your review and the five stars.This is the first poem I have written for this year, and so I feel really chuffed to find it so well received. I hope you have a great day too. cheers Cass
