Humanity Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Desert Dilemma"A science fiction book about genetic engineering.
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Comment from royowen
Their escape is taking shape, Koko reveals to Ayala that she's pregnant, and amazingly Ayala within a myriad of emotions, good and bad, emerges joy, which I believe all mums feel when the Prospect of little miracle is growing in them, and I think being an Aunt would be great too, so things, through Sani's wisdom is extremely useful, well done, Blessings Roy
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Their escape is taking shape, Koko reveals to Ayala that she's pregnant, and amazingly Ayala within a myriad of emotions, good and bad, emerges joy, which I believe all mums feel when the Prospect of little miracle is growing in them, and I think being an Aunt would be great too, so things, through Sani's wisdom is extremely useful, well done, Blessings Roy
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the review, Roy!! I haven't noticed too many (of any) of your inspirational poems lately. I always look forward to them. Have a great week,
Rhonda
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I'm not posting at the moment, dear Rhonda, writing but not posting,
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Oh, okay. Any special reason?
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I had no peace late last year, when I stopped my peace returned. Message from God? And my musical involvement has increased, I entertain at church outreaches, I'm posting a valentine for my wife today, thanks for asking, Rhonda,
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I actually understand what you are saying. The project I posted last week has taken a lot of my time and effort. It is a "mission" and I feel, sometimes, this site takes a lot of my energy -- energy needed for other things. It's hard to keep up with everything, and people can get so nasty to each other. I was just looking at your CD earlier, and it made me smile! I would like to thank you, again, for the beautiful music. I'll check out your poem!
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The Lord has opened music opportunities, and writing opportunities, I still feel close to you guys, and you're a "bestie" Rhonda, bless you, Roy
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Aww, thanks!!
Comment from robina1978
A next near brilliant chapter. The two sisters and Archie have escaped. One of the sisters is pregnant, which should not be possible, cause they had been sterilised at puberty. I liked the artwork too.
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A next near brilliant chapter. The two sisters and Archie have escaped. One of the sisters is pregnant, which should not be possible, cause they had been sterilised at puberty. I liked the artwork too.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the wonderful review! Thank you for the comment on the artwork as well. The artist is always good at thanking me for using her work, and keeping up with my writing. She's a talented lady!!
Have a great week,
Rhonda
Comment from MsPetra
I've enjoyed his read. I found myself caring about the characters. I am looking forward to wherever you are going with this.
There is one little quick fix needed: You have "That's not fair, Koko said. "It it weren't for Archie,"
Shouldn't it be "If it weren't for Archie,"
Other than that, you are doing very well. Keep up the good work.
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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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I've enjoyed his read. I found myself caring about the characters. I am looking forward to wherever you are going with this.
There is one little quick fix needed: You have "That's not fair, Koko said. "It it weren't for Archie,"
Shouldn't it be "If it weren't for Archie,"
Other than that, you are doing very well. Keep up the good work.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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Thank you, MsPetra, for the lovely and supportive review. Thank you, as well, for letting me know the parts that you liked.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Sankey
So glad I found this. I don't think I have read any of this before. Great story and I promise I will see this through. One spag Intro...Archie and the others prepare [for] to hide for the day. I think you know I am working through my autobiography again, after a couple of edits due to stuff-ups with Grammarly. There are still rewards on some of the chapters. If you did not see a new chapter I added as an "Introduction" might be good to go back to that no rewards on that one sorry.
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So glad I found this. I don't think I have read any of this before. Great story and I promise I will see this through. One spag Intro...Archie and the others prepare [for] to hide for the day. I think you know I am working through my autobiography again, after a couple of edits due to stuff-ups with Grammarly. There are still rewards on some of the chapters. If you did not see a new chapter I added as an "Introduction" might be good to go back to that no rewards on that one sorry.
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Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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I am so glad you found it, too!! I'm so excited to hear that you might follow it, as I think you are a talented writer and I look forward to your reviews!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Aiona
What a fascinating premise! But even without reading the blurb at the bottom, the words and detail and dialogue drew me in. I didn't see any typos. I like that I could glean their relationships, even without reading anything prior to this section.
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Koko put her hands on her hips in a maternal stance and cocked her head at Ayala. "Do try and get along with Archie. He means well."
"You should listen to your sister," Archie said, drawing a glare from Ayala.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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What a fascinating premise! But even without reading the blurb at the bottom, the words and detail and dialogue drew me in. I didn't see any typos. I like that I could glean their relationships, even without reading anything prior to this section.
Example:
Koko put her hands on her hips in a maternal stance and cocked her head at Ayala. "Do try and get along with Archie. He means well."
"You should listen to your sister," Archie said, drawing a glare from Ayala.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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What a kind gesture to offer a beautiful six star rating. You are so kind. Thank you for your words and observations. Take care,. my friend,
Rhonda
