Humanity Project
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Desert Dilemma"A science fiction book about genetic engineering.
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Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Always I read your chapters knowing I am going to love them. It seems you cannot put a foot wring when it comes to writing this type of work, it is clearly your forte. You write beautifully and seemingly effortlessly and that in itself is great achievement, making it seem effortless when we all know how difficult it actually is to write verbal dialogue convincingly.You are a wonderful writer, I never tire of your chapters, you are one of my absolute favourites. Amazing as ever, well done. Meia x
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Always I read your chapters knowing I am going to love them. It seems you cannot put a foot wring when it comes to writing this type of work, it is clearly your forte. You write beautifully and seemingly effortlessly and that in itself is great achievement, making it seem effortless when we all know how difficult it actually is to write verbal dialogue convincingly.You are a wonderful writer, I never tire of your chapters, you are one of my absolute favourites. Amazing as ever, well done. Meia x
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Awww, you are so sweet, and having given me a good reason to smile on this wet and rainy day in North Texas. I'm glad the dialogue works, and you're right, it does take hours of write and rewrite, but not as much as when I write poetry. Lol!! That takes talent I have to work really hard at.
Take care, my friend,
Rhonda
Comment from Douglas Paul
I like this chapter, my friend. Your writing flows well as always and I see no errors. It is interesting to see some of Ayala's long term values challenged
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I like this chapter, my friend. Your writing flows well as always and I see no errors. It is interesting to see some of Ayala's long term values challenged
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Douglas, for your undying support and kind reviews!!
Hope all is well with you!
Take care
Rhonda
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once again, you have a really good story on your hands and this is a really good post.
"It's not like I chose to become pregnant, but I'm not sorry I am, either." (Omit 'I am' they're extra words and not needed.)
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Once again, you have a really good story on your hands and this is a really good post.
"It's not like I chose to become pregnant, but I'm not sorry I am, either." (Omit 'I am' they're extra words and not needed.)
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Barbara!! You are a wonderful writer and I take your advice seriously!!
Have a great week,
Rhonda
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine chapter, Rhonda--I tried the desert camouflage trick to hide from my parents, but they just laughed, and said it looked stupid!
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Another fine chapter, Rhonda--I tried the desert camouflage trick to hide from my parents, but they just laughed, and said it looked stupid!
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Awww, poor Mike. I would have, at least, played along. If my kids wanted to hide themselves for long lengths of time, I would have celebrated!! haha. You're mom is nicer.
Thanks for the review,
Rhonda
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Ha!
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
No problems noted and I forgot all about the others that may be hunting them just to keep face.
Nicely written and excitement still continues
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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No problems noted and I forgot all about the others that may be hunting them just to keep face.
Nicely written and excitement still continues
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Barb, for your kinds review. I'm glad you are continuing to read and review this book.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Dustybones
Another good addition to your story. At least Alaya is going along with them. Not that she has much choice at thos point. The character are interacting good in the story. I can see something being set up to happen soon. Later dustybones
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Another good addition to your story. At least Alaya is going along with them. Not that she has much choice at thos point. The character are interacting good in the story. I can see something being set up to happen soon. Later dustybones
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Thank you, Dusty. Yes, she's on board for the moment, anyway. Thanks for the wonderful review,
Rhonda
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
It's the most wonderful sensation in the world, Ayala. I know I should feel shame or revulsion, those are the ideals hammered into us as children, - either add semi-colon after revulsion to connect two sentences OR -
...shame or revulsion, the ideals hammered into us as children
No Ayala knows of Koko carrying a child, she's bewildered and full of questions; she even haves a few tears.
Koko is over-anxious about being in the desert, never having been out that far.
And now there's fear that they might be killed.
A lot to think about in this chapter, Rhonda.
Margaret
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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It's the most wonderful sensation in the world, Ayala. I know I should feel shame or revulsion, those are the ideals hammered into us as children, - either add semi-colon after revulsion to connect two sentences OR -
...shame or revulsion, the ideals hammered into us as children
No Ayala knows of Koko carrying a child, she's bewildered and full of questions; she even haves a few tears.
Koko is over-anxious about being in the desert, never having been out that far.
And now there's fear that they might be killed.
A lot to think about in this chapter, Rhonda.
Margaret
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, Margaret, for the beautiful and supportive review!! I will fix that part. I'm not so good at the semicolon thing. I do then to show sentences together that need separating.
Again, much thanks.
Rhonda
Comment from prettybluebirds
Excellent. I'm glad you have everyone working together now, give them a better chance of getting out alive. I'm sure you won't make it easy for them. I will be watching for more.
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Excellent. I'm glad you have everyone working together now, give them a better chance of getting out alive. I'm sure you won't make it easy for them. I will be watching for more.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 14-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your wonderful review!! Yes, they are working together now, partly because Ayala has no other choice, partly because she realizes they are right.
Thanks again,
Rhonda
Comment from schatzling
Every time I read another chapter of your book I get more excited in reading the next one you are going to post. This chapter really progresses nicely. I just love the way you write. A natural flair you have. You ARE an author I could easily stay up all night reading.
I did l find one small typo . You have " it it " instead of " if it ". I believe it is in paragraph 24 within the chapter of your story.
You selected one of my desert photos to accompany this chapter. I thank you for that. I ESPECIALLY WANT TO THANK YOU FOR SAYING WHAT YOU DID....I have been sick in bed all weekend....I get extra emotional when I'm sick like this....so as I type this Review to you, I have tears of joy trickling down my face and an extra happy feeling in my heart. That is just the most thoughtful comment....and to put it in print for all to see...my o my. I THINK MY FEVER JUST WENT UP A COUPLE NOTCHES.
Excellent writing
Looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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Every time I read another chapter of your book I get more excited in reading the next one you are going to post. This chapter really progresses nicely. I just love the way you write. A natural flair you have. You ARE an author I could easily stay up all night reading.
I did l find one small typo . You have " it it " instead of " if it ". I believe it is in paragraph 24 within the chapter of your story.
You selected one of my desert photos to accompany this chapter. I thank you for that. I ESPECIALLY WANT TO THANK YOU FOR SAYING WHAT YOU DID....I have been sick in bed all weekend....I get extra emotional when I'm sick like this....so as I type this Review to you, I have tears of joy trickling down my face and an extra happy feeling in my heart. That is just the most thoughtful comment....and to put it in print for all to see...my o my. I THINK MY FEVER JUST WENT UP A COUPLE NOTCHES.
Excellent writing
Looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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Oh, take care of yourself, my dear!! I wish a cup of chicken noodle soup for you, my friend!
I so love your work, and always good get comments of it from my readers.
Thank you for your comments about the story, and I do so hope you continue to read. You are so sweet and talented.
Take care, and feel better!!
Rhonda
Comment from mbroyles2
Another excellent chapter in this saga.
Ayala is starting to come around, and the group is coming up with a plan.
With Junior on their tail the must hurry to escape the dessert.
Great writing!
Michael
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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Another excellent chapter in this saga.
Ayala is starting to come around, and the group is coming up with a plan.
With Junior on their tail the must hurry to escape the dessert.
Great writing!
Michael
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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Thank you for the most welcomed six stars, my friend. It always uplifts a writer to get them, and I'm no exception. Your comments are equally as welcomed. Take care,
Rhonda
