Comment from mountainwriter49

Excellent

Hi, Ulla,

Your haiku is spot-on with two grammatically lines capturing an observable moment in time. The satori line is superb. There's no desk haiku here!

May I offer two things for you to consider? First, reduce the size of the appended artwork. It completely dominates and obscures your poem. Secondly, the naming convention for haiku, as taught to me by the late Alvin Ethington, should be like this:
haiku (busy bees flitter).

An excellent entry into the contest book!

Ray

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 15-Feb-2017

Wow Ray, thank you so much for the praise. I've changed the title. You're so right. I should have known better. I simply don't know how to reduce the size of the artwork. I can see what you mean. Thanks so much again. Ulla:))

reply by mountainwriter49 on 15-Feb-2017

You're very welcome. The presentation is much better now! -ray

Comment from Tessa Kay

Excellent

Ah, very good. You're really getting good at those haikus. They look so simple, but take some thinking, I'm sure.
Well done. :)

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017

Awww, thanks a lotTessa. This is great praise. I relly do enjoy writing them. Ulla:)xx

Comment from Leineco

Excellent

:-) The epitome of beneficial symbiosis!

The circle of life in the flitter of wings and flutter of petals -
each feeds the other's needs

Nicely done :-)

 Comment Written 11-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017

Thank you very much. So glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

Really enjoyed this so much.
I love nature poems and the line..nectar of life, finishes your haiku wonderfully well.
Love the artwork

Thanks for sharing

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017

Thank you so very much, I'm so pleased. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Mastery

Excellent

"Nectar of Life" indeed. Excellent haiku, my friend, Ulla. You have written this in such a way that it needs no further explanation. It's a grand statement of the truth, isn't it? Blessings. Bob

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017

Hi Bob, thank you so much. It is the truth. You're right. It's the essence of life. Thanks again. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Benny Beeharry

Excellent

Hi friend yhis short writing is so full of imageries and .....honey?
The busy bees and the flowers and the nectar, all go so smoothly together.well done.
Danny Jock

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017

Thanks a lot Danny, I'm so pleased with your great review. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Lu Saluna

Excellent

This is a wonderful haiku. I can visualize the bees busying themselves amongst the flowers, buzzing away. Collecting the nectar to take back to the beehives.
"nectar of life" - is a wonderful satori for this haiku.

 Comment Written 10-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017

Awww, Lu. thank you so very much. This means so much to me. Ulla:)))

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

Ahh, busy bees flitting about from flower to flower, capturing all that delicious nectar.
You did a great job or creating an image of bees and flowers in your poem.
Take care,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017

Hi Rhonda, thank you so very much. So glad you liked it. A hug. Ulla:)))

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

Excellent Poem! The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last
line puts the poem all together. The artwork is beautiful and compliments
the words and theme of this poem.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017

Thank you so very much. I'm so glad you liked it. All the best Ulla:)))

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

busy bees flitter <> among flowers with a buzz
nectar of life

Hola guapa :)

I like your traditional haiku. It's a great observations of bees and a fine haiku challenge 9 entry. Good job sweetie pie.

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017

I'm so glad you liked it. xxx