Seeing Behind the Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Kim"A book of poems on people.
25 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
A poignant poem Teresa. . .
With the use of "puppy" it congers up images of an orphan
longing to be adopted. . .but never chosen.
But the longer I think about it, the more it seems to be about
a woman who wants to be loved, who has metaphorically
closed the door - but secretly hopes someone will have the
courage to turn the knob and usher in love.
Nicely done T :-)
One very minor thought - and purely a matter of personal taste:
I might consider breaking up/re-arranging:
warm and eager like a puppy
to a new home.
as
warm and eager
like a puppy to a new home.
Just a thought :-)
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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A poignant poem Teresa. . .
With the use of "puppy" it congers up images of an orphan
longing to be adopted. . .but never chosen.
But the longer I think about it, the more it seems to be about
a woman who wants to be loved, who has metaphorically
closed the door - but secretly hopes someone will have the
courage to turn the knob and usher in love.
Nicely done T :-)
One very minor thought - and purely a matter of personal taste:
I might consider breaking up/re-arranging:
warm and eager like a puppy
to a new home.
as
warm and eager
like a puppy to a new home.
Just a thought :-)
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2017
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With what you wrote about her, it perfectly describes her - wants to be loved, but closes the door, but hopes someone will open it.
I like your suggestion and will probably do that. THanks for you always helpful reviews:)
Comment from honeytree
Very interesting to read
yes we all have our special
ways within our lives
how we observe others
and maybe we can learn from them
we are all different within our ways.
Great to read.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Very interesting to read
yes we all have our special
ways within our lives
how we observe others
and maybe we can learn from them
we are all different within our ways.
Great to read.
Honey tree
Comment Written 08-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Thank you Annie:)
Comment from gene roush
This is a heart-touching story , and you open your heart in the telling.
You create the character slowly, using a nice blend of nouns and verbs.
I hope that your friend finds the strength to trust again.
Thanks for sharing,
Gene
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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This is a heart-touching story , and you open your heart in the telling.
You create the character slowly, using a nice blend of nouns and verbs.
I hope that your friend finds the strength to trust again.
Thanks for sharing,
Gene
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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I hope she does too. Thanks for the review:)
Comment from LoannaLois
You could have been writing for those I know so well...I teach a" Whole Again" group for those grieving and experiencing loss of any kind. May I have permission to read this to my group? I know they will love it as do I.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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You could have been writing for those I know so well...I teach a" Whole Again" group for those grieving and experiencing loss of any kind. May I have permission to read this to my group? I know they will love it as do I.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
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Yes, you can read this to your group (it's not in Nebraska is it?). Thanks for the awesome gift of all the stars!
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Thank you, and this is in Columbus, Ohio💕
Comment from MizKat
Hi Tab,
It was nice reading your poem that you wrote about one of your friends.
I really enjoyed reading it and will look forward to more of your work.
I'm finally back on FS although it seemed to take forever before my money for this year got to them.
Kat
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Hi Tab,
It was nice reading your poem that you wrote about one of your friends.
I really enjoyed reading it and will look forward to more of your work.
I'm finally back on FS although it seemed to take forever before my money for this year got to them.
Kat
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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I'm glad to see you back. Thanks for the review my friend.
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It took forever for the money that I sent for this year, to get to them. But finally it did. Kat
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad poem of someone twice bitten by love and now refusing the let the sunshine in, well expressed and an enjoyable read, lov Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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This is a sad poem of someone twice bitten by love and now refusing the let the sunshine in, well expressed and an enjoyable read, lov Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Thank you Dolly:)
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Teresa, she sounds trapped somehow within herself. I think you managed to bring those points to the surface and still share the flower and her beauty though never picked.
Thanks for sharing.
m
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Dear Teresa, she sounds trapped somehow within herself. I think you managed to bring those points to the surface and still share the flower and her beauty though never picked.
Thanks for sharing.
m
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much Moreen:)
Comment from Dean Kuch
Lord Alfred Tennyson in his poem titled, "In Memoriam A.H.H.," once wrote:
"I hold it true, whate'er befall;
I feel it when I sorrow most;
'Tis better to have loved and lost
Than never to have loved at all."
I think your friend Kim would agree with me on the following point.
The man had no idea what in the hell he was talking about.
Nice work, Teresa.
~Dean
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Lord Alfred Tennyson in his poem titled, "In Memoriam A.H.H.," once wrote:
"I hold it true, whate'er befall;
I feel it when I sorrow most;
'Tis better to have loved and lost
Than never to have loved at all."
I think your friend Kim would agree with me on the following point.
The man had no idea what in the hell he was talking about.
Nice work, Teresa.
~Dean
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Yes, she would agree with you about that:) Thanks, Dean.
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My pleasure.
~Dean :}
Comment from LIJ Red
A picture of too many people on this earth. Some, like me, no longer reach out because the one who shaped their life for so long died, and starting over is too much effort. I think treachery is easier to forgive and forget. Excellent post.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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A picture of too many people on this earth. Some, like me, no longer reach out because the one who shaped their life for so long died, and starting over is too much effort. I think treachery is easier to forgive and forget. Excellent post.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Yes, that is how she feels too. Sad, though:( thanks for the review.
Comment from country ranch writer
A persons eyes can tell you a lot and the smile you can weather it is forced or not.she may be afraid of being disappointed or keep from getting hurt.Just being her friend means a lot to her and just knowing you caress enough for right now.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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A persons eyes can tell you a lot and the smile you can weather it is forced or not.she may be afraid of being disappointed or keep from getting hurt.Just being her friend means a lot to her and just knowing you caress enough for right now.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much:)
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Smiles
