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A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets

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Comment from evilynne
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That's a great little haiku about father/son relationships. I am not too knowledgeable about the haiku format and have been too chicken to try it myself, but yours sounds great. Evi

 Comment Written 13-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 13-Feb-2017
    HUZZAH! Thanks so much, Evi! You just made my morning!
Comment from Lu Saluna
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Robyn,
I have to say, this is one fantastic haiku. I gave away my last 6 today. You will have to accept a virtual badger 9. I am over the moon with this one.
I don't know if you did this on purpose, but it reads beautifully forwards and backwards. Brava!

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 10-Feb-2017
    Thank you, Lu! No, I don't hold with the backwards/forwards thing, but I'm tickled if it worked. Thanks so much! I appreciate your opinion!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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oooooh this is a WINNER, little sister. I love it! The presentation is stunning and the words so meaningful and beautiful. I remember you shared in at the club... it is so neat that we can do that. I think we are becoming a wonderful haiku family. Well done! I am proud of you. :)

 Comment Written 09-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
    HUZZAH! Thanks! I am proud of it, too. I've got several I'm working on! Can't wait to get to MAMMALS! Thanks!
Comment from LateBloomer
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Hello robyn corum, Your poem is lovely, tender, and sweet.

Of special note:
catching memories

(Indeed, memories that last a lifetime)

Wonderful complementary artwork choice. A pleasure to read and great contribution to the book. Very good. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer




 Comment Written 09-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
    Thanks, LB!
Comment from ~Dovey
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Hi Robyn:

This is a wonderful poem. So simple in the thought and imagery but powerful in the memories it instills in both father and son. (or daughter) I have so many fishing memories with my father. I grew up to out fish all the boys lol

Thanks for sharing.

Kim

 Comment Written 08-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
    HAHAHA! Good for you, Kim! Yay, girls!
Comment from Veronica Grace
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I continue to fine your work excellent and stimulating. You are an excellent poet there's no question. Nothing to change here so if I say anything more, I'd just be rambling to fill the page.(*_~)

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    HAHA! That's okay - I do that a lot! But I ramble in person, too! heehee Thanks, V.!
Comment from BeasPeas
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Hi Robyn. This is a nicely composed and illustrated haiku. It's clearly expressed, easy to understand and has a third line that makes sense. Marilyn

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    Hey! That's the best compliment you could have given me! Thanks!
reply by BeasPeas on 08-Feb-2017
    Thank you for saying that, Robyn. I do give haiku a look-see. Many of them I have to skip over because they make no sense whatsoever. To read one that does is rewarding to the reader and the writer.
reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
    Marilyn,

    I ADORE haiku. And I have to think more people would, as well, IF they were exposed to really good stuff - which isn't often the case here, unfortunately. Really good haiku is amazing and insightful and inspiring. It's some of my favorite reading! (That and senryu, haiku's ironic cousin.).

    I'm not saying I write good haiku -- but I do try to write it APPROPRIATELY and not just follow a few staid, out-of-date rules that mean nothing. That's why your comments mean so much. Thank you bunches!
reply by BeasPeas on 08-Feb-2017
    Hi Robyn. I was in a writing group for a few years when I lived in California. Some really good writers and poets. One guy wrote haiku very well and illustrated them with his watercolors. He was the best I've read. For me, haiku has to be crystal clear. For the third line to have an aha moment--there really DOES have to be an aha.
Comment from Mastery
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"Catching Memories" How neat this satori is, Robyn. Indeed I like the entire haiku. You've covered the fish challenge very cleverly, my friend. Thanks for sharing it. blessings, bob

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    Thank you, Bob, my dear friend~!
Comment from write hand blue
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My, my, Robin, this picture could be from our own album. My son now in his forties is the fisherman in our family. Jersey can be a good place to fish and we often have some to cook. A whimsical poem bringing back memories of time past.

~Mel~

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    YAY! That's perfect - in my opinion, and what the best haiku are supposed to do. Thanks so much, Mel. I love it when you stop by!! *smile*
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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Great sentiments in these short but resonating words Robyn, father and son clocking up some memories, beautiful, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
    Thanks, Dolly!