Bus Stop
100-word contest entry12 total reviews
Comment from strandregs
Picture this:
When the taxi arrives (every morning) she won't open the door until I put my foot in on the other side. I'm thinking :
For goodness sake you are 16.
so now I smile when I see her standing there.
whose mad?
Your story captures the essence of the concern for them. Without the underlying frustration.:-)) Z.
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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Picture this:
When the taxi arrives (every morning) she won't open the door until I put my foot in on the other side. I'm thinking :
For goodness sake you are 16.
so now I smile when I see her standing there.
whose mad?
Your story captures the essence of the concern for them. Without the underlying frustration.:-)) Z.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017
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I truly appreciate your taking the I e to find and read this story. You are absolutely correct about my story lacking the underlying frustration a parent has every day. I commend your efforts. Rod
Comment from GoodHearted Woman
Hi Rod: Thinking about you lately--figuring you were busy writing some new stuff. I just love these little short pieces. If there is anyone in this world I think I understand, it's mothers of autistic kids. In fact, I identify with any mom that worries about her kids. I know it doesn't do any good, but I worry anyway, just in case. Laugh. It's a cute story with a perfect upbeat picture, and it brightened my day just to read it. Thanks for posting. GoodHearted Woman
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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Hi Rod: Thinking about you lately--figuring you were busy writing some new stuff. I just love these little short pieces. If there is anyone in this world I think I understand, it's mothers of autistic kids. In fact, I identify with any mom that worries about her kids. I know it doesn't do any good, but I worry anyway, just in case. Laugh. It's a cute story with a perfect upbeat picture, and it brightened my day just to read it. Thanks for posting. GoodHearted Woman
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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Well, you brightened my day by sharing this short-short, GHW, and I truly appreciate your comments and kind praise. Rod
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Good concern, service and commitment to special school children; this fictional work in limited words opens with a nice catch and ends with a curious conventional statement, I liked the theme, plot progression and appropriate use of dialogues.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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Good concern, service and commitment to special school children; this fictional work in limited words opens with a nice catch and ends with a curious conventional statement, I liked the theme, plot progression and appropriate use of dialogues.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2017
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I am delighted you enjoyed this short-short. Thanks so much for sharing. Rod
Comment from kriver
Hi Rod,
I enjoyed your short short story.
Difficult to write in so few words.
At least the rules didn't say you could only use 100 syllables no more no less and must tell a complete story to boot.
Any ways good story
Best regards,
K River
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Hi Rod,
I enjoyed your short short story.
Difficult to write in so few words.
At least the rules didn't say you could only use 100 syllables no more no less and must tell a complete story to boot.
Any ways good story
Best regards,
K River
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Thank you for sharing my short-short, K River, and your delightful comments. Rod
Comment from Bobbi22
I'm sure that the parents of disabled children take comfort in those compassionate bus drivers - definitely a challenging, yet rewarding job. Very well written story for the 100-word dash contest.
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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I'm sure that the parents of disabled children take comfort in those compassionate bus drivers - definitely a challenging, yet rewarding job. Very well written story for the 100-word dash contest.
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Thank you for your kind praise. Rod
Comment from marinadawn
Nice story and you are correct in your commentary that school bus drivers are special they are the ones who take our children's lives in their hands each day ,I like the image used of the smiling friendly looking driver
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Nice story and you are correct in your commentary that school bus drivers are special they are the ones who take our children's lives in their hands each day ,I like the image used of the smiling friendly looking driver
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Indeed these drivers are special. Thank you so much for sharing my story and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from Dean Kuch
I'm pretty sure parents who have a child with any sort of learning disorder or disability feel much the same way, Anonymous Author.
Well done, good luck in the contest.
~Dean
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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I'm pretty sure parents who have a child with any sort of learning disorder or disability feel much the same way, Anonymous Author.
Well done, good luck in the contest.
~Dean
Comment Written 07-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, Dean, for the kind praise. Great graphic!
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My pleasure and good luck!
~Dean :)
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of the contest very well. In a few words, you wrote a very good story and honored the special Ed, school bus drivers. very well done.
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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A well-written contest entry. I think you completed the challenge of the contest very well. In a few words, you wrote a very good story and honored the special Ed, school bus drivers. very well done.
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Thank you so much, winnona, for your very kind praise.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
A good little piece for the competition. I'm sure all parents worry just as much about their young children but these drivers do a great job.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Hi there,
A good little piece for the competition. I'm sure all parents worry just as much about their young children but these drivers do a great job.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 06-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Indeed, the driver and the teachers do a super job. Thanks so much for sharing.
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
I realize this subject may be near and dear to your heart but I think you could have done more with it. You spent a lot of time on the bus' travel and the sick boy, taking time away from the main characters. I would reconsider that. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Dear Mystery Writer,
I realize this subject may be near and dear to your heart but I think you could have done more with it. You spent a lot of time on the bus' travel and the sick boy, taking time away from the main characters. I would reconsider that. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
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Thank you for sharing my story and your comments, Robyn. Not much more one can do with a 100-word limit.
