I Want You
a contest entry20 total reviews
Comment from Asem.inspirations
This title caught my attention as I past it, I went back to read the poem and it is a great poem.
My husband and I fell in love, love at first sight, right away, ten years ago. One night, while at work, he was my Supervisor, we were laughing and talking and suddenly he said, "I WANT YOU!" I got very quiet and then he said, " I WANT YOU, NOW!" He said this in such a determined way and I found it so manly and sexy. I could not resist him and now ten years later we are still so in love.
Your poem speaks of that time together and our love, that it is, forever.
I love this poem
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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This title caught my attention as I past it, I went back to read the poem and it is a great poem.
My husband and I fell in love, love at first sight, right away, ten years ago. One night, while at work, he was my Supervisor, we were laughing and talking and suddenly he said, "I WANT YOU!" I got very quiet and then he said, " I WANT YOU, NOW!" He said this in such a determined way and I found it so manly and sexy. I could not resist him and now ten years later we are still so in love.
Your poem speaks of that time together and our love, that it is, forever.
I love this poem
Comment Written 19-May-2017
reply by the author on 19-May-2017
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Thank you for the review and high rating. I am glad it brought back good memories.
dragonpoet
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Heartfelt, warm, loving and honest sentiments in your joyful write of yearning and want, I wish you luck with the love poem contest, this is a good entry, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Heartfelt, warm, loving and honest sentiments in your joyful write of yearning and want, I wish you luck with the love poem contest, this is a good entry, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Thank you for reading and reviewing. I appreciated all the stars and the good luck wished.
Joan
Comment from Dean Kuch
"I Want You ...To Want ... Me.
I want you to want me.
I need you to need me.
I'd love you to love me,
I'm beggin' you to beg me..."
I couldn't help myself, Joan. As soon as I read your title, then your well written little poem here, this song by Cheap Trick immediately popped into my head.
That in no way implies that your poem is anything like the lyrics to this once very popular tune. It's very well rhymed, and coveys the perfect message for the contest you've entered it into.
Best of luck...
~Dean
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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"I Want You ...To Want ... Me.
I want you to want me.
I need you to need me.
I'd love you to love me,
I'm beggin' you to beg me..."
I couldn't help myself, Joan. As soon as I read your title, then your well written little poem here, this song by Cheap Trick immediately popped into my head.
That in no way implies that your poem is anything like the lyrics to this once very popular tune. It's very well rhymed, and coveys the perfect message for the contest you've entered it into.
Best of luck...
~Dean
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Thanks for the words of encouragement and the walk down memory lane. I owned this album at one time.
Joan
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My pleasure.
Comment from oliver818
I like your poem. The image of someone tazing your insides is really funny and yet very powerful. I really enjoyed the flow and rhythm of this piece and the imagery is great. Thanks for sharing and have a great day!
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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I like your poem. The image of someone tazing your insides is really funny and yet very powerful. I really enjoyed the flow and rhythm of this piece and the imagery is great. Thanks for sharing and have a great day!
Comment Written 17-May-2017
reply by the author on 17-May-2017
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Thank you for all the positive remarks and all the stars.
dp
Comment from winnona
A well-written contest entry. Your well chosen words flowed line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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A well-written contest entry. Your well chosen words flowed line to line combining easily and forming the message of the poem for the reader. I think you completed the challenge of the contest well.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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Thank you for your encouraging words and high marks.
dragonpoet
Comment from Hitcher
It has been a while since I've written a love poem, they are very emotional things to write especially when it is for the ONE but they are a treasure of a gift to give, worth more than diamonds or gold. 'I want you' would make someone very happy :)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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It has been a while since I've written a love poem, they are very emotional things to write especially when it is for the ONE but they are a treasure of a gift to give, worth more than diamonds or gold. 'I want you' would make someone very happy :)
Comment Written 03-Mar-2017
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2017
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I am glad that you liked this so much. Thank you.
dragonpoet
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Author
Nice smooth flow of ending rhyming words of how you expressing your thoughts of how you want and need one now and until eternity
Gert
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Hello Author
Nice smooth flow of ending rhyming words of how you expressing your thoughts of how you want and need one now and until eternity
Gert
Comment Written 24-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Gert. Glad you liked it.
Joan
Comment from ronnie k
"You bring to me the suns bright rays" "I saw your feeling with no disguise" bravo. You have taken this love back to conception of love, Romeo and Juliet has nothing on you.
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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"You bring to me the suns bright rays" "I saw your feeling with no disguise" bravo. You have taken this love back to conception of love, Romeo and Juliet has nothing on you.
Comment Written 24-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 25-Feb-2017
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Thanks for the raves. I am honored.
drgaonpoet
Comment from prophetess
Beautiful words....Ahhh, I remember those days, cherish them and I hope u never end up writing the doom & gloom poetry I write just to keep myself from going crazy remembering those days.
I appreciate the sentiment and the words. May u know love forever.
Good job
Prophetess
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Beautiful words....Ahhh, I remember those days, cherish them and I hope u never end up writing the doom & gloom poetry I write just to keep myself from going crazy remembering those days.
I appreciate the sentiment and the words. May u know love forever.
Good job
Prophetess
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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I appreciate the kind comments and the high rating. On June 1st I will be celebrating my 31st wedding anniversary.
dp
Comment from nomi338
You certainly know how to make an impassioned plea for who and what you want. You do such a good job of it, I cannot imagine how she could reject your request. Yet knowing how cruel some women can be, she may very well reject you just to see what you will do. If you really want her you may have to try harder.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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You certainly know how to make an impassioned plea for who and what you want. You do such a good job of it, I cannot imagine how she could reject your request. Yet knowing how cruel some women can be, she may very well reject you just to see what you will do. If you really want her you may have to try harder.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2017
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Thanks for the nice review. By the way I am a woman and wrote this for my husband for Valentine's Day. You have a somewhat negative veiw of the female gender.
It seems a lot of fanstorians think I am male becasue of my screen name. I have liked dragons since I was 5 or 6 years old.
Hence, the name.
dp
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If I came across as a woman hater, I apologize. I have been married to the same woman for more than forty years. I can truly say that we are best friends. We have successfully raised two daughters, one son, one grand daughter and our grand son turn 18 today. My two older sisters taught me how to treat women with respect and I never forget their valuable lessons. I have suffered from some cruelty growing up from some females that liked to play games and I was remembering that pain when I responded to your poem.
