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A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets

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Comment from Sherman541
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Another great Haiku - very nice picture to go with it - I really like these haikus that you are doing - though I am not sure I could come up with them as easy as you seem too. - Great job - Sarah

 Comment Written 07-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 08-Feb-2017
    Thank you. Sometimes they come, sometimes not. I really appreciate the 6 stars, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Irish Rain
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How beautiful. 'Luna's eclipsed'...so clever. I like the thought of a veil of fog, covering the moon gives it a luminous beauty...just lovely, blessings...

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 06-Feb-2017
    Thank you so very much, my friend~Debbie
Comment from BOO ghost
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Spooky image! BOO loves it! Well done and an interesting choice of words. Excellent take on the satori, aha moment. Looks like a strong contender to this word bender. BOO!

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
    I'm scared--no not really. Glad you liked it. Thanks so very much my ghostly friend~Debbie
reply by BOO ghost on 04-Feb-2017
    I need to work on my spook face. I will scare you next time, Debbie. I ate a Little Debbie snack cake last night. Was scrumptious. Rich folks leave goodies for me, everywhere. BOO! X 3! That ought to work?
reply by BOO ghost on 04-Feb-2017
Comment from royowen
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Well done Debbie, as usual you tackle writing tasks ever so well, whether it be sonnets, metered Austrians, or indeed anything writte, this being no exception, great haiku, well done, blessings, Roy

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
    Thank you, Roy. Have a blessed day, my friend~Debbie
reply by royowen on 05-Feb-2017
    Most welcome Debbie,
Comment from Jumbo J
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Hi Debbie,
You captured the true essence of your visual in a very word efficient form... which of course is the style you so beautifully compose time-after-time with a deft artful write.

For me, these forms of poetry has a certain element of 'leaving' the reader hanging... yes, even pondering.

A very magical presentation and a beautifully written Haiku for this club challenge dear friend.

With our thoughts we create,
the full picture.
James vx's.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 05-Feb-2017
    Thank you, dear friend. The Japanese forms do leave it open to the reader to fill in the blanks between the lines. Hope you are feeling better. Take care and thank you, dear friend~Debbie xx
Comment from winnona
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A very well- written haiku club challenge poem.The piece is lovely and conveys the feeling of fog across the moon. I am so glad you joined the club. Very well done.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
    Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend~Debbie
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I always enjoy reading your posts and this one is absolutely no different. You described a lot with this Haiku. Good writing.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
    Thank you so very much, my friend. I always look forward to yours as well~Debbie
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written haiku. The fog and clouds sometimes cover the moon partially or completely. Usually it makes a pretty picture to look at.

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
    Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from JW
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I had a haiku once. I had to buy some cold medicine for it. While the medicine sickly sweet, it wasn't too bad. Needless to say, the haiku cough was annoying. It was like a irritating fog had taken over my lungs and throat. :-)

I hope your having a great day, Debbie. Ours is a clear but cold and windy one so Scotty and I will be staying inside.

Thanks for sharing this. JW



 Comment Written 04-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
    That haiku can be very annoying. I have it most of the summer--lots of pollen around here from the farms. Thank you, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
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Yes this is well written you have done well to build a poem full of imagery using 13 syllables giving the photograph meaning well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2017

reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
    Thank you, my friend~Debbie