You are my strength
My soulmate73 total reviews
Comment from RobertaLee
Absolutely lovely tribute to your wife, and good rhyming too. This stanza following doesn't quite fit with the flow because when you say, "And when ..." there should be something following that expresses the "when" instead of another "and"; sort of leaves it hanging.
"And when I hold you in my arms
And we embrace each others charms"
Well presented. And go for 50+! Bet she loves your poetry.
Smiles, and thanks for the read.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Absolutely lovely tribute to your wife, and good rhyming too. This stanza following doesn't quite fit with the flow because when you say, "And when ..." there should be something following that expresses the "when" instead of another "and"; sort of leaves it hanging.
"And when I hold you in my arms
And we embrace each others charms"
Well presented. And go for 50+! Bet she loves your poetry.
Smiles, and thanks for the read.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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You are so right Roberta I have removed the second and I can't believe I never picked up on that Thankyou so much
dip
Comment from marinadawn
this is lovely even though am not a big lover of romantic poem I can appreciate the sentiment , and it is a beautiful thing to have a soul mate and I have also been blessed with one and am so thankful
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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this is lovely even though am not a big lover of romantic poem I can appreciate the sentiment , and it is a beautiful thing to have a soul mate and I have also been blessed with one and am so thankful
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thankyou Marina. My poems are all written in simple verse not metaphorical or flowery but always from the heart.
dip
Comment from crybry67
Yes I think it would be an excellent Valentine poem. It's a beautiful expression of the love you have for your wife. Wonderful rhythm, rhyme and flow. Blessings....Christy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Yes I think it would be an excellent Valentine poem. It's a beautiful expression of the love you have for your wife. Wonderful rhythm, rhyme and flow. Blessings....Christy
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thank you Christy really appreciate your review
dip
Comment from jusylee72
this is a lovely way to honor your wife. Your life sounds like it has been built on this strong connection between the two of you. I see nothing that needs to be changed. hope you have a wonderful night with the one you love.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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this is a lovely way to honor your wife. Your life sounds like it has been built on this strong connection between the two of you. I see nothing that needs to be changed. hope you have a wonderful night with the one you love.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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thank you so much Jusy. Appreciate your comments
dip
Comment from eltwelve
That was beautifully written,it flowed smoothly for easy reading. It is very special to be not only husband and wife but soulmates, partners in life. What a great feeling.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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That was beautifully written,it flowed smoothly for easy reading. It is very special to be not only husband and wife but soulmates, partners in life. What a great feeling.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thankyou so much e your comments are appreciated
dip
Comment from country ranch writer
IT TO IS A GOOD POEM FOR HER AND SHE JUST MIGHT FORGIVE YOU FOR BEING SUCH A CUDDLY BEAR AND SO SO SOFT HEARTED WHEN IT COMES TO LOVING HER.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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IT TO IS A GOOD POEM FOR HER AND SHE JUST MIGHT FORGIVE YOU FOR BEING SUCH A CUDDLY BEAR AND SO SO SOFT HEARTED WHEN IT COMES TO LOVING HER.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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hehe lets wait and see lol
thanks for the review mum
dip
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HUGS AND GOOD LUCK
Comment from Douglas Paul
This is really a nice tribute to your wife. It sounds like the two of you have a great relationship. The feelings you express and the way love should be, I think.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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This is really a nice tribute to your wife. It sounds like the two of you have a great relationship. The feelings you express and the way love should be, I think.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thankyou so much Douglas much appreciated
dip
Comment from emptypage
Have I read this? Seems a couple of lines feel familiar, but I don't know.
My favorite stanza?
"You are the strawberry in my cream
You are the hopes there in my dream"
It's just lovely. Hope it's a real love.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Have I read this? Seems a couple of lines feel familiar, but I don't know.
My favorite stanza?
"You are the strawberry in my cream
You are the hopes there in my dream"
It's just lovely. Hope it's a real love.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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No I have written and posted over 2700 poems since coming to fanstory.
the theme of love and romance is quite prevalent in my writes so I wouldn't be surprised if some lines are familiar but I know with fanstory policy it picks up on any repetition of posting poems twice
thanks so much for the review
dip
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I wasn't suggesting anything out of order, just a familiarity.
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sweet xx
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Doc,
You just keep pouring them out and you're on a winner... the loves of our life never tire of being loved and told how uniquely special they are... and if we only knew what beautiful written words did to females... I know we would have taken up this writing gig when we were still young and stupid... okay, so I'm not young anymore... smile)))))))))))))!
Beautiful sentiment wrapped up in all of the words and intent... and yes a couple of lines that had me sparking on songs that the words evoked... yes, a truly beautiful poem for your lovely wife Doc.
With our thoughts we create,
indelible memories.
James.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Hi Doc,
You just keep pouring them out and you're on a winner... the loves of our life never tire of being loved and told how uniquely special they are... and if we only knew what beautiful written words did to females... I know we would have taken up this writing gig when we were still young and stupid... okay, so I'm not young anymore... smile)))))))))))))!
Beautiful sentiment wrapped up in all of the words and intent... and yes a couple of lines that had me sparking on songs that the words evoked... yes, a truly beautiful poem for your lovely wife Doc.
With our thoughts we create,
indelible memories.
James.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thankyou so much James You are one of my favourite reviewers You always give me positive feedback
dip
Comment from Leineco
I am amazed you did not enter this in the Valentine Poetry Contest!
As (I hope) my own spouse's Best Friend/Lover/Companion I know
I would melt in his arms if he were to pen such a loving acknowledgement!
Beautiful write Doc.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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I am amazed you did not enter this in the Valentine Poetry Contest!
As (I hope) my own spouse's Best Friend/Lover/Companion I know
I would melt in his arms if he were to pen such a loving acknowledgement!
Beautiful write Doc.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thankyou so much Leineco always appreciate you positive reviews
xdip
