Luna's Form Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Thrilling Themes"a place to gather my poetic forms
23 total reviews
Comment from Sis Cat
I love that staircase of moonbeams. It is a vivid image. It taps into our myths and memories of ascension, meeting the divine. It is very well rhymed and shaped but I appreciate most your prophet-like vision which you share with the reader regarding what is possible in our imagination.
Thank you for sharing this poem about the Dream Master.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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I love that staircase of moonbeams. It is a vivid image. It taps into our myths and memories of ascension, meeting the divine. It is very well rhymed and shaped but I appreciate most your prophet-like vision which you share with the reader regarding what is possible in our imagination.
Thank you for sharing this poem about the Dream Master.
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Thank YOU for reading my poem about the Dream Master. You are about the first person who has not asked me who the Dream Master is, so I'm imagining that you know from my poetry. Thank you for your support of my poetic efforts today.
Best,
jeni
Comment from mermaids
I admire your smooth use of rhyming words and your smooth flow of lines. The shape also adds to the magical feel of the poem. I like how in your poem when the moon appears, the wild lunar schemes begin.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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I admire your smooth use of rhyming words and your smooth flow of lines. The shape also adds to the magical feel of the poem. I like how in your poem when the moon appears, the wild lunar schemes begin.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Dear mermaids I'm so glad that you liked the rhymes and the flow. Yes, wild lunar schemes always begin when the moon appears! Thank you for your support of my poetic efforts today.
Best,
jeni
Comment from Lu Saluna
This is a marvellous poem about dreams. A great story about how the Dream Catcher sends moon beams for those to meet the moon and make up their wildest dreams. Very creative, great concrete, vivid imagery.
I really enjoy your poems.
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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This is a marvellous poem about dreams. A great story about how the Dream Catcher sends moon beams for those to meet the moon and make up their wildest dreams. Very creative, great concrete, vivid imagery.
I really enjoy your poems.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017
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Dearest Lu,
Thanks so much. I enjoyed reading your very kind review. I'm happy that you enjoy my poetry, Lu, as I enjoy yours as well.
Love,
jeni
Comment from Pantygynt
This is an interesting form, just long enough to be able to put a little meat on the bones while still having a distinct shape. Of the two options you mention in your notes I think I would prefer this one with its mirror symmetry. In the 3, 3 & 2 line version do you keep the same syllable count order or maintan the the 12 syllables for the couplet?
As to content here I think that this is great stuff. I love the way the first half sets the scen while the in second half we become those pioneers and climb the staircase for a great climax.
As a cancerian I am of course a moonchild myself and love all this lunar stuff.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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This is an interesting form, just long enough to be able to put a little meat on the bones while still having a distinct shape. Of the two options you mention in your notes I think I would prefer this one with its mirror symmetry. In the 3, 3 & 2 line version do you keep the same syllable count order or maintan the the 12 syllables for the couplet?
As to content here I think that this is great stuff. I love the way the first half sets the scen while the in second half we become those pioneers and climb the staircase for a great climax.
As a cancerian I am of course a moonchild myself and love all this lunar stuff.
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Jim, you're a moonchild, too, that's awesome. I know now that we can relate on another level. I just got a shirt that said, "Stay Wild, Moonchild! It's great, I couldn't believe I found it.
As to the poem, I appreciate the very approving review. Yes, in the 3/3/2 line version we keep the same syllable count AND rhyme scheme. I should try to write a 3/3/2, I've only tried the 3/2/3 a few times.
Looking forward to class, coming up soon!
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I like the symmetry of the 3,2,3.
Comment from Dean Kuch
A trio-part-huh?
Never heard of this form of poetry before nor have I ever had the pleasure of reading one before now.
Thank you for introducing yet another form of poetic expressionism, Jeni, as well as confounding my muddled, tried brain even more than it already is, heh-heh...
Seriously, I enjoyed this...
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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A trio-part-huh?
Never heard of this form of poetry before nor have I ever had the pleasure of reading one before now.
Thank you for introducing yet another form of poetic expressionism, Jeni, as well as confounding my muddled, tried brain even more than it already is, heh-heh...
Seriously, I enjoyed this...
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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my friend, the styles of poetry are endless, and mastering them to me is like putting together a puzzle. Thanks for your kind review...I hope you're having a nice day.
Happy Groundhog Day!
Jeni
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Yep, happy Groundhog Day to you too, Jeni.
~Dean :)
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Do you know if he saw his shadow?
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I haven't heard yet...
Comment from WalkerMan
Trois-par-Huit is an interesting form, especially when executed in the symmetrical way you chose. Your words flow smoothly throughout, and I enjoyed reading. Well done, and aptly illustrated.
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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Trois-par-Huit is an interesting form, especially when executed in the symmetrical way you chose. Your words flow smoothly throughout, and I enjoyed reading. Well done, and aptly illustrated.
Comment Written 02-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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Thanks so much, WalkerMan. I appreciate the warm words of review.
Best,
luna
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You are welcome, Jeni. I like both the poem and its illustration. -- Mike
Comment from Mastery
For seven hundred thousand years? Really? Wow! Delightful poem, Jeni. You certainly do have an unusual and formidable connection with our moon, don't you?
Excellent writing as always. Bless you, my friend. Bob
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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For seven hundred thousand years? Really? Wow! Delightful poem, Jeni. You certainly do have an unusual and formidable connection with our moon, don't you?
Excellent writing as always. Bless you, my friend. Bob
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Yes, that's a long time, isn't it? Yes, Bob, my connection with our moon is deep, very deep, perhaps because I am born under the sign of Cancer, so I am a moonchild. I thank you for your review, my friend.
Yours,
jeni
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, sweetie pie,
I wish I could rhyme as well as you do. I do better with free verse and haiku ... imagism and intuitive poetry are my things.
Dream Master... you mentioned him before. It reminds me of the Sandman. One of these days, I would like to know more about him.
Sister Gypsy
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Hello, sweetie pie,
I wish I could rhyme as well as you do. I do better with free verse and haiku ... imagism and intuitive poetry are my things.
Dream Master... you mentioned him before. It reminds me of the Sandman. One of these days, I would like to know more about him.
Sister Gypsy
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Dear Sis G,
I'll tell you about him now. He's been a recurring character of mine ever since I first joined the site in 2006. It's just that since my long absence there are so many new members who don't know him! He is a masterful, magic man who lives in a castle in the sky. He is the one to humans plea for good dreams and dream adventures. He usually complies and the adventure are iconic. He's friends with Luna and Merlin, but Merlin like to play practical jokes on the DM and Luna.
Let me know if that doesn't clear it up.
Love,
Sis
Comment from robyn corum
Jeni,
Hmmm... I had to read this several times to understand the message - and I can't say for sure that I have it now... but it's eerie and ethereal and the wording is pretty. The presentation is lovely. Not my favorite of your work, but I did enjoy!
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Jeni,
Hmmm... I had to read this several times to understand the message - and I can't say for sure that I have it now... but it's eerie and ethereal and the wording is pretty. The presentation is lovely. Not my favorite of your work, but I did enjoy!
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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The theme is I think a visit to the moon and having thrilling adventures thereon! Let me know if that doesn't explain it for you.
Love,
jeni
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the art work and your words. Great job. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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This is a very interesting poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery with the art work and your words. Great job. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Dear Teri, thank you for your kind review on this poem. I appreciate it and your support.
Love,
jeni
