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Comment from Ric Myworld
I can't say that the short haiku poems move me every often, but to see a fat yellow shadow slithering past me on a rock would move me to high gear, sprinting to get away. And I'm not even afraid of snakes, I just don't like surprises. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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I can't say that the short haiku poems move me every often, but to see a fat yellow shadow slithering past me on a rock would move me to high gear, sprinting to get away. And I'm not even afraid of snakes, I just don't like surprises. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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Hi Ric, thank you so much. I don't like them and I've great respect. This yellow one has beautiful colours but I don't want to go anywhere near. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment from Dr. Nad
haiku(yellow snake) Is a nice five - eight - two haiku. Your poem is a reminder that not everything that looks aimless is harmless. Your final word is one of great caution: beware. Thanks for sharing. May God bless you!
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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haiku(yellow snake) Is a nice five - eight - two haiku. Your poem is a reminder that not everything that looks aimless is harmless. Your final word is one of great caution: beware. Thanks for sharing. May God bless you!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017
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Thank you so very much, I'm glad you liked it. All the best. Ulla:))
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You are welcome.
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Comment from Sasha
Not that it matters, but I just hate snakes. This is a well written haiku and the first two lines connect perfectly and the satori is excellent. I enjoyed this very much. Keep up the great work.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Not that it matters, but I just hate snakes. This is a well written haiku and the first two lines connect perfectly and the satori is excellent. I enjoyed this very much. Keep up the great work.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Thanks a lot Sasha, I hate them as well. We have a lot of them around here. I'm always on my lookout. All the best.Ulla>)))
Comment from Douglas Paul
Fantastic picture and presentation. Very strong imagery in your first two lines and a great aha moment in the satori that says it all. Well done, my friend. Thanks for participating
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Fantastic picture and presentation. Very strong imagery in your first two lines and a great aha moment in the satori that says it all. Well done, my friend. Thanks for participating
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
Comment from Sixty70
Lovely photo, and an excellent choice for this haiku. I love the juxtaposition of shadow, aimless, and beware. I don't always 'get' haiku, sometimes I think it's forced, but this is not.
Good one!!
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Lovely photo, and an excellent choice for this haiku. I love the juxtaposition of shadow, aimless, and beware. I don't always 'get' haiku, sometimes I think it's forced, but this is not.
Good one!!
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Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
