Comment from flylikeaneagle

Excellent

Ulla: what great art work! I like the beware warning at the end.
Snakes come in so many colors. Dean has a rainbow snake.
Kids seem to like holding these creatures. I'm into shooting photos
and not touching them. Let them be...Great poem! flylikeaneagle

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

Comment from Janet Foor

Excellent

Excellent haiku Ulla. Since I am scared to death of snakes, not to worry, I will beware. haha
Very nicely done with excellent alliteration of the "S" sound. Not sure if it was intentional - as the sound of the Hiss of a snake. :)))

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

Comment from Susanjohn

Excellent

Beware for sure!!! Yikes! and that picture!!....yikes again! power packed little haiku here! nice job...i enjoyed reading!!! ;-)))

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

Great use of imagery - a shadow slithering down the rock creates more anticipation. Plus the artwork certainly nailed it! Great haiku in a format other than 5 7 5. Enjoyed it.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

That's really good, Ulla!! I hate snakes so would beware
of any of them. You certainly have learnt to do these haiku's well, my fried. Well done. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

Comment from Tessa Kay

Excellent

What a scary picture. I like the fat yellow shadow, even though shadows are usually grey. The 'aimlessly' takes some of the drama away. How about something like stealthily or silently? Something that highlights the danger.
:)

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

Hi Tessa, thanks so much, and you're right. Thanks for bringing it to my attention. I have edited and Think the sense of danger is highlighted. Thanks for that. I'm learning all the time. All the best. Ulla:))x

Comment from Jim Lorson Sr

Excellent

Ulla, I hate snakes, but your artwork is excellent and very colorful. First two lines describes what the subject is doing and the third line tells us what we need to do. Excellent my friend,,,,,,,Jim

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

Hi Jim, oh I hate them as well, but they are very real here. Just as in the States.I'm always on my lookout when I work the land.Thanks for your great review. All the best. Ulla:))

Comment from Luna

Excellent

Ulla, I just wrote my first haiku yesterday and got input from Dean and Gypsy. I now know how important word use and economy is for these poems. I admire you for being able to write them so well.

I really liked this one ... I liked the last line...beware. This haiku provided plenty of imagery in my mind.

love,
jeni

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

Hi Jeni, thanks so very much. I will go and have a look at yours. I so enjoy writing them. They're fascinating I think. I've been to Japan a lot and am fascinated with their culture. All the best. Ulla:)))

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Hola Chica, como estas? Aqui, yo, tirandillo.

I like your haiku. Your phrase (line 1 and 2) connect well and the satori is a wise observation. Good job!

Gypsy

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

Hola Gitana, estoy muy bien, y yo tambien, tirandillo. I'm glad you liked it. Nothing spectacular but your subject inspired me. Thanks a lot for the review. Un abrazo, Ulla:)))

Comment from damommy

Excellent

As I always explain, I don't know much about haiku writing, but this one is very powerful. I read the poem before I look at the artwork, and the poem alone scared the bejasus out of me. LOL.

Very good writing and presentation. Loved it!

 Comment Written 31-Jan-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

Awww, thank you so much. I'm so glad you like it. I can't stand snakes but have to be vigilant as we have loads. Thanks again. All the best. Ulla:)))