Haiku Club Challenge Multi-Author
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Swamp's Music Choir"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
10 total reviews
Comment from Leineco
Ahhh. . .they growl as they prowl
in search of a mate
to ensure that their kin
don't dissipate!
:-)
Interesting notes - nice satori. . .a choir indeed :-)
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Ahhh. . .they growl as they prowl
in search of a mate
to ensure that their kin
don't dissipate!
:-)
Interesting notes - nice satori. . .a choir indeed :-)
Comment Written 03-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Hi Leineco Yes they can sound like a swamp choir when the all get going. I do love to hear the frogs to me they are a good sign that the environment is healthy. Cheers for your review Christine
Comment from Lu Saluna
I really like your haiku. It is very descriptive using great vivid imagery and it is very easy to visual and engage the sense of hearing and visual the sight of this really cool frog in the pond singing its heart out
really well done
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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I really like your haiku. It is very descriptive using great vivid imagery and it is very easy to visual and engage the sense of hearing and visual the sight of this really cool frog in the pond singing its heart out
really well done
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Hi Lu, I am glad you liked my frog Haiku They make such a noise it is hard not to listen to their choir. thanks for reading Cheers Christine😃
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
green growling grass frog 5
ensemble croaks crawk-crok 6
swamp's music choir 4..... 15 syllables... good job!
green growling grass frog ensemble croaks crawk-crok
swamp's music choir
good connection of line one and two, it flows well. The satori put a smile on my face. :)
Good job, cheers
Gypsy Sensei
ps how did your play go?
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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green growling grass frog 5
ensemble croaks crawk-crok 6
swamp's music choir 4..... 15 syllables... good job!
green growling grass frog ensemble croaks crawk-crok
swamp's music choir
good connection of line one and two, it flows well. The satori put a smile on my face. :)
Good job, cheers
Gypsy Sensei
ps how did your play go?
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017
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Hi Gypsy, Thanks for your review and I do hear these frogs on my walks we have even stopped people from building units etc where the frogs habitat is a good community based project. My play is going to be hilarious I have such a fun role and if we can pull it off it will be very funny. Just have to learn my script lines now I will send photos when it is on Cheers Christine
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yes, that will be awesome... pictures pictures! LoL
Comment from Grasshopper2
I love frogs but you need a soundtrack of them talking. Copy and paste the address below to the bottom of your Author's Notes. It will not show the video, it just plays their croaks.
Fun to read.
Michael
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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I love frogs but you need a soundtrack of them talking. Copy and paste the address below to the bottom of your Author's Notes. It will not show the video, it just plays their croaks.
Fun to read.
Michael
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Hi Michael.. I am not good at adding things to my haiku's and I had thought of adding a video but unsure how to do this but there is a good video on Utube called Call of Growling Grass frog and it isonly 52 sec long I will add this to my authors notes
Just thought I would add one and as they are in my area I do hear them Cheers Christine
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Frogs calling is an indication the environment and all else is well.
Comment from BeasPeas
Frogs surely can make a musical choir. I like the playful way this is written, the colors, the image and the poem itself. Great job with this one. Marilyn
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Frogs surely can make a musical choir. I like the playful way this is written, the colors, the image and the poem itself. Great job with this one. Marilyn
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Hi Marilyn. Thanks for having a read of my Haiku and yes they are like a choir LOL and I like to hear them when walking Cheers Christine
Comment from aryr
This was amazing. The picture was definitely green lol, as was the print. It was a short and simple piece of writing- that said all it needed to say. Your notes were super helpful and very educational. I enjoy reading them because I learn a little more about Australia each time I read, this makes it so enjoyable. thanks for sharing Christine.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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This was amazing. The picture was definitely green lol, as was the print. It was a short and simple piece of writing- that said all it needed to say. Your notes were super helpful and very educational. I enjoy reading them because I learn a little more about Australia each time I read, this makes it so enjoyable. thanks for sharing Christine.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Hi Ayr, Thanks for that I wasn't sure if was 'catchy enough and I wanted to just state a simple thing as I hear the frogs often on a walk I am glad you are finding a little bit about my country through my work more to come. Many Cheers for you great support Christine
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You are most welcome Christine. It is so nice when people take time to become aware of what is around them.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a beautifully executed haiku. The imagery is concrete and solid painting a great picture both visual and auditory. The satori is clever and finishes the piece perfectly. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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This is a beautifully executed haiku. The imagery is concrete and solid painting a great picture both visual and auditory. The satori is clever and finishes the piece perfectly. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Hi Monica, I am pleased you liked this Haiku in particular my Satori I worked on that to get it to be right LOL Cheers for your lovely support Christine
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Chrissy
I really like this haiku, it is cleverly written about the sounds of the frogs, a great satori line
Well done
Mary
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Hi Chrissy
I really like this haiku, it is cleverly written about the sounds of the frogs, a great satori line
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Hi Mary, I like the sound of frogs too and this year has been quite exceptional with a wet Spring they were out in force and it is always nice to hear them they do sound like a choir LOL Thanks heaps. Cheers Christine
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
green grass growling frog
ensemble croaks crawk-crok
swamp's music choir
a clever use of words in this short piece, Chrissy....
The only thing I might question - is green grass(presuming this to be describing the colour of the frog - if so, I would think -- grass-green growling frog --- would be more appropriate - just ignore if not in agreement - my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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green grass growling frog
ensemble croaks crawk-crok
swamp's music choir
a clever use of words in this short piece, Chrissy....
The only thing I might question - is green grass(presuming this to be describing the colour of the frog - if so, I would think -- grass-green growling frog --- would be more appropriate - just ignore if not in agreement - my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Hi Margaret, Thanks for taking a look at my Frog Haiku and I am sorry to have confused you but is actually a green growling grass frog ( not the way I had it so thanks for the question it made me re look and I had my greens and growling mixed up LOL . but yes the green does explain the colour also Cheers my friend Christine😃
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OK Chrissy. M
Comment from frierajac
I like this as being educational as well. Toads are my favorite. I have here mountain desert frogs. Its early, I hear them already as it warms up. If there are lots I find them in my bathtub every morning!
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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I like this as being educational as well. Toads are my favorite. I have here mountain desert frogs. Its early, I hear them already as it warms up. If there are lots I find them in my bathtub every morning!
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 31-Jan-2017
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Hi frierajac, Thanks for reading my Haiku and yes I think this series of Haiku's will provide quite a lot of education from all the writers doing these challenges . They are a part of a Haiku anthology that is being put together by a committee of Haiku members here on FS and there are quite a lot of categories to write about. The best will be selected for the book. thanks for your interest and I suppose having frogs in your bathtub beats a rubber duckie Ha Ha. Cheers Christine😃
