Comment from ExperiencingLiphe

Excellent

I was also baptized as a baby but you're right it's not our choice. It's our parents choice. They're making the choice to bring us up in church. We had no say. I'm glad you were able to find your way. Some of the toughest pasts make the strongest people

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017

Thank you , yes it is a personal decision to believe and become strong in it.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Exceptional

I love this poem so much, it's so honest and truthful and the story held me until the end. Our experiences shape us into who we are and we can either drown or swim with the tide. You eventually swam and began to live your life which is so precious. The formation of the words as if it is water falling is full of imagination and you used colour at the end to show the foral essence of life renewing you. Your poem is sad, but also uplifting and it deserves a six from me for the honesty and truth it exposed about your life. Good luck with the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 08-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 08-Mar-2017

Thank you so much. This poem was a release that proved to me once again that my life has been a success despite the times when life was so hard. Your words and your six stars really touch me. Thank you.

Comment from Ladymaggic

Excellent

I love the way you have used color in your writing, and used the words to create a pattern and design to what you have written.
The story written in a poetic format interspersed with color is interesting and different and tells the story.
I tended to read it in snatches and parts instead of as a whole..which is interesting in itself.
I love this section, which is a poem in its entirety....
"The sun began to set
Brilliant oranges
Reds fading into pink
Clouds reflecting blue
Overpowering beauty
Illuminated the sky"

I always correct my spelling mistakes when I see the red on them...there were two errors in those few lines I copied....
Excellent poem..well done

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017

thank you so much , I especially love that you took the time to help my spelling. This poem led me to color. i hadn't tried it before but life is so colorful, with beautiful and ugly colors. you brightened my day.

Comment from Sparklezkristy

Exceptional

I absolutely love this. It's such a beautiful life story, one that seems to have been hard to tell at the same time. You came out of the hardships though and that's a good thing. This is such a beautiful poem and I love it.

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017

thank you so much. Free style poetry seems to let me tell things I thought i would never say. I so appreciate your support and your understanding.

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

This poem and its hauntingly beautiful presentation is special. I wish I had six stars for you, but I used them all.
I loved the use of water for the metaphors of a life. I appreciated how you polluted water to show the down times. This was a pleasant read.
~patty~

 Comment Written 07-Mar-2017

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reply by the author on 07-Mar-2017

I had not used different colors before and this poem was such a great experience in learning the beautiful and ugly colors in my life. i learned so much by writing this and you have touched me with your understanding.

Comment from schatzling

Exceptional

I only have this computer for a few minutes but wanted to say how wonderful , emotional, very deep and powerful your writing is here using gripping words that stay with you long after done reading. I love it....water and how you utilized it.....WoW
from birth to re birth and all that happened within (and in between ) your life...very poignant. Excellent !!!!

 Comment Written 12-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 12-Feb-2017

Thank you Schatzling. so hope to read more of your life soon. Life is good when we write and talk about it and use it to make our selves better. I so appreciate you.

Comment from Zue65

Exceptional

You deserved six stars for this free verse. it is well written and I enjoyed the biographical presentation that helped progressed the message you intended for the readers. Bravo. Thanks for sharing. Susan

 Comment Written 04-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 04-Feb-2017

Thank you so much for giving me the precious six. I worked on it. I edited it over and over until I felt it had the right message. We are always part of the world that hurts us but more importantly we choose to become more.

Comment from heyjude

Excellent

Judy, good job on this one for the potlatch. Lots of alliteration.. foolish FISh food floating forever...deepndespair despondent desiring and lots of others. Wow

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017

thank you Jude. I love potlatche. I love to write with a prompt. it changes me.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

What a deeply empathetic poem about the life of one who knows the devastation of life's suffering and even the nightmare of alcoholism and victory over it. The use of water as imagery from birth to rebirth is a fitting theme.

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

thank you so much. I was given a prompt to write about water and this just happened. I love getting prompts. They change who I am.

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

This is a very interesting free verse poem you have penned. You used very good descriptive wording and very good imagery. I love the colors you used in the change of letters too. I enjoyed reading and reviewing. Best wishes in the contest. Teri

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

thank you teri, This is first time i decided to use color to show the negative and positives in life. It is a real pain to change the color so much and takes a lot of time but it does help the reader see the transition. Again Thank you.