Comment from Bobbi22

Excellent

Guess we need to watch those mischievous, hyper kids a little more closely. Zachary does sound a lot like someone who grew up (and I say this loosely) to be president. Very well written story in a poem. Good luck in the contest.

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2017

Thank you very much.

Yes, at the end he did seem to morph into that well known blower of his own Trumpet!

Steve

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Well, I for one have stopped - I'm not saying another word about the unbelievable results of the US election. I guess I just did though...(LOL) (I shared your FB DT list too...couldn't resist - kudos to you for it, BTW).

I almost choked at, "Till the hyenas howled and the mad monkeys yowled..." AAaaaahahahaha. OMG, I think I have been in that forum a total of six times in almost as many years, but lately, I'm drawn...HAHAHAHAHA!

Best of luck in the contest with this irreverent one...(I hope none of the judges are supporters...LOL!!!) All kidding aside, though, I have been shocked at some of my fans who ARE in DT's corner...fortunately they don't seem to have carried any grudges over to our FS relationships though, because I left no doubt with a couple essays about my stand. But then, I'm Canadian, so I couldn't vote anyway. :)) (Whew - dodged THAT bullet!)

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

I'm guessing some of the most rabid supporters didn't even click what this was really about, which maybe goes to show something...

I really have to struggle and remind myself to bite my tongue in the forums.

Thanks for the kind words.

Steve

reply by Dawn Munro on 02-Feb-2017

Very much my pleasure.

Comment from nomi338

Excellent

If the ultimate fool is not stopped in time, he will be the only survivor. How true and prophetic that is. Fortunately for us, I do believe that we have a wise creator that will never allow that happen. He has stopped many fools in the past and I believe that he is still on the job and will stop any others before they can enough damage to kill us all off.

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

Thanks, Nomi. I hope you're right.

Steve

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Hah! Loved this. Loved the 'FanStory forum' line. I check in there now and then, apt observation, ha ha. Poor ole blithering Zack...he totally wiped out his audience. GREAT story-in-a-poem Mr. Steve, Sunday Blessings...

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

Young Zach was a rat, (a quite cruel one at that!)--
One callous cretin, right down to the bone.
His evil ways exposed as poisoned wind blows,
like the sad story you've penned in your poem.

Good luck in your quest to have written the best;
the CEC will quite soon have their say.
If it pans like I think, I'll hardly blink
when another hundred bucks soon comes your way.

Good job, Steve...

~Dean

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

Dean, thanks for the fun rhyming review and the praise. As for winning, we'll see - but not till April.

Better go write a Minute Poem now.

Steve

reply by Dean Kuch on 02-Feb-2017

You're welcome, Steve.
As for writing a Minute for a site sponsored contest; no thanks. I would only be wasting my time.

Comment from bertranclan

Excellent

Boy, was that comical! I loved the word choices and rhyme and meter. I especially enjoyed the joke about the FanStory Forum! You have quite an imagination and it serves you well.

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

Thank you very much for the kind words.

Steve

Comment from pit viper

Exceptional

A cross between Shel Silverstein and Lewis Carroll. Marvelous nonsense! I loved it.
And yes, I *got* the political allusions.

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

Really? There were political allusions?

Thanks for the great review and the six stars. Glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Oh my! I am not sure what to say about poor Zack. I did enjoy reading this contest entry. I always enjoy poem/stories and this one was perfect. Good luck with the contest.

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reply by the author on 02-Feb-2017

Thanks, Barbara - glad you enjoyed.

Steve

Comment from Mitchell Brontė

Excellent

This one made me smile, Zachary sounds like a right scallywag...I think there's a few like him in parliament.....Some great lines here....really enjoyable.

Thanks for sharing

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017

Hi. Welcome to FanStory. I'm glad I changed 'scousers' to 'skivers'!

Thanks for the kind words. I don't mind the odd scallywag, but somehow Zack morphed into something a little more than that!

Steve

Comment from Mystic Angel 7777

Excellent

Woohoo!!! This meets and exceeds the contest requirements for you deliver not just a story but a complete biographical adventure. I wonder if Zach has any basis in fact LOL. The rhyme and meter are sublime as always - I especially liked the way you managed to use Mary Poppin's famous word effortlessly. I had to stop and wait to quite laughing when I hot the line about the FS Forum as it is priceless. Well done piece of poetic art and fun. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you very much for sharing it.

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reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017

Thank you very much for those kind words - I am gld you enjoyed. Yes, it started as simply a piece of fun, but perhaps became something a bot more by the end...

Steve