A Tale of Yucatan
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Comment from Joan E.
Thanks for transporting us to the Yucatan. By the way, I enjoyed your alliteration of t's in the second paragraph about the hummingbird. You certainly captured the "bustle" of the place, and I liked your foreshadowing the next events in your intriguing story. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Thanks for transporting us to the Yucatan. By the way, I enjoyed your alliteration of t's in the second paragraph about the hummingbird. You certainly captured the "bustle" of the place, and I liked your foreshadowing the next events in your intriguing story. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 04-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2017
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Very many thanks, Joan, for your review of the penultimate chapter of my travelogue. Much appreciated. I'm delighted that you have enjoyed the journey! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Autumn Splendour
A detailed descriptive prose replete with touch, taste, smell and sight, befitting an established writer.
Such an enjoyable read. I've learnt much from your writing. We should challenge assumptions and prejudices while exercising caution in our travels. Well done.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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A detailed descriptive prose replete with touch, taste, smell and sight, befitting an established writer.
Such an enjoyable read. I've learnt much from your writing. We should challenge assumptions and prejudices while exercising caution in our travels. Well done.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Very many thanks for your kind words and the six stars. Both much appreciated. Tony
Comment from Selina Stambi
You are as talented a prose writer as you are a poet, Tony, which is great to know (it doesn't always work that way, I've discovered!).
Loved the story about the bank card. You delighted me with another chapter from your charming travel-ogue.
Virtual six xxxxxx (all out)
Sonali ":)
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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You are as talented a prose writer as you are a poet, Tony, which is great to know (it doesn't always work that way, I've discovered!).
Loved the story about the bank card. You delighted me with another chapter from your charming travel-ogue.
Virtual six xxxxxx (all out)
Sonali ":)
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Very many thanks for your kind words and virtual six, Sonali. Both much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Heidi M
Very interesting continuation of your journey. There are such extremes noted here. The people going out of their way to get your wife's card back to the whip and claw hammer display. I enjoyed your description of the market, complete with gap-toothed smiles and overloaded roof racks.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Very interesting continuation of your journey. There are such extremes noted here. The people going out of their way to get your wife's card back to the whip and claw hammer display. I enjoyed your description of the market, complete with gap-toothed smiles and overloaded roof racks.
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Very many thanks, Heidi, for your kind words and continued interest in my story. Much appreciated. Tony
Comment from RGstar
''There are great piles of dried fish, mounds of sweet green oranges and pink bananas, sacks of beans and maize flour, feathered chickens in bundles hanging upside down from poles and scores of diminutive bustling ladies in brightly woven huipiles, all elbows and shopping bags, racing to make their bargains with gap-toothed smiles before the day is done.''
There you go, the periphery, to Gap tooth in personalization.
That is what opens up a work and make it visual to the minds eye as well as give a personal feel to the females depicted as if seeing them ourselves. Bravo.
Not as rich as the one I was ecstatic about...nor should it be, for that would mean you would be guilty of trying to follow the same steps instead of doing what you have done here, and written for how the narrative takes on that particular emphasis for those moments. So renders all, natural.
Nicely done, my friend.
You even manage to incorporate one of my favorite words that I saved up for a year or so...sonorous, and attributing it to the entity attributed.
My best wishes, Tony. An enjoyable read.
Have a great day.
RG
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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''There are great piles of dried fish, mounds of sweet green oranges and pink bananas, sacks of beans and maize flour, feathered chickens in bundles hanging upside down from poles and scores of diminutive bustling ladies in brightly woven huipiles, all elbows and shopping bags, racing to make their bargains with gap-toothed smiles before the day is done.''
There you go, the periphery, to Gap tooth in personalization.
That is what opens up a work and make it visual to the minds eye as well as give a personal feel to the females depicted as if seeing them ourselves. Bravo.
Not as rich as the one I was ecstatic about...nor should it be, for that would mean you would be guilty of trying to follow the same steps instead of doing what you have done here, and written for how the narrative takes on that particular emphasis for those moments. So renders all, natural.
Nicely done, my friend.
You even manage to incorporate one of my favorite words that I saved up for a year or so...sonorous, and attributing it to the entity attributed.
My best wishes, Tony. An enjoyable read.
Have a great day.
RG
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Very many thanks for your continued support and kind words, RG - also the six stars. Much appreciated. Your note about the periphery to the specific was particularly useful. Identifying a technique that I had only applied subconsciously.
Comment from krys123
Greetings, Tony;
-of all the enjoyment I would've obtained during this journey and adventure that would've been stifled by the fact of watching one soldier mimic the enjoyment of smashing one's fingers with a hammer. I can see where everything grew cold and that bus in the atmosphere would've been lost.
-It was nice to know the fact that Jeanette's credit card was lost in the ATM because of inadvertently talking to long to Wendy that she forgot the amount of time it would stay in the ATM machine before it sucked it in. But it was nice of them to be able to recover the credit card where they went out of their way entirely to do so. What gratitude!
-I'm sorry about Tom feeling at all that took a lot of enjoyment out of his adventure.
-Thanks for sharing this, Tony, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Greetings, Tony;
-of all the enjoyment I would've obtained during this journey and adventure that would've been stifled by the fact of watching one soldier mimic the enjoyment of smashing one's fingers with a hammer. I can see where everything grew cold and that bus in the atmosphere would've been lost.
-It was nice to know the fact that Jeanette's credit card was lost in the ATM because of inadvertently talking to long to Wendy that she forgot the amount of time it would stay in the ATM machine before it sucked it in. But it was nice of them to be able to recover the credit card where they went out of their way entirely to do so. What gratitude!
-I'm sorry about Tom feeling at all that took a lot of enjoyment out of his adventure.
-Thanks for sharing this, Tony, and take care and have a good one.
Alex
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thanks again for your review and comments, Alex. This was one of the occasions when the fantasy world of tourism met with reality rather too sharply!
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You're very welcome and as always, Tony.
Alex
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
'Then he picked up a claw hammer from the stall, carefully felt for a balance point along its shaft and, using the back of one of his colleagues' hands to demonstrate, mimed delicate crushing blows to finger joints and knuckles.' so beautifully written and expertly penned, I adore your writing and your style kind regards Meia x
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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'Then he picked up a claw hammer from the stall, carefully felt for a balance point along its shaft and, using the back of one of his colleagues' hands to demonstrate, mimed delicate crushing blows to finger joints and knuckles.' so beautifully written and expertly penned, I adore your writing and your style kind regards Meia x
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Thanks, Meia, for your review and picking out the part that had the greatest impact on you.
Comment from BeasPeas
I enjoyed continuing to read your travels and this segment of your tale. You've included several topics within this piece but have described them all thoroughly and well, making smooth transitions from one to the other. Marilyn
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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I enjoyed continuing to read your travels and this segment of your tale. You've included several topics within this piece but have described them all thoroughly and well, making smooth transitions from one to the other. Marilyn
Comment Written 31-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Very many thanks for your review and comments about the flow of this segment, Marilyn. Much appreciated. Tony.
Comment from IndianaIrish
Lots of exciting action in this chapter, Tony. Your descriptions are still incredible to take the reader to the places you visited and see things through your eyes. I found a couple of things that may need a look-see.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
They were quick to suggest she [went] (should go) to a nearby luxury hotel
Gratuitous acts of kindness (given) to travelling strangers in distress.
bargains with gap-toothed smiles before the day is (was)done.
I found the air (had grown) grow cold and could not suppress a silent shudder.
as we soon discover(ed).
As always, just suggestions, Tony.
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Lots of exciting action in this chapter, Tony. Your descriptions are still incredible to take the reader to the places you visited and see things through your eyes. I found a couple of things that may need a look-see.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
They were quick to suggest she [went] (should go) to a nearby luxury hotel
Gratuitous acts of kindness (given) to travelling strangers in distress.
bargains with gap-toothed smiles before the day is (was)done.
I found the air (had grown) grow cold and could not suppress a silent shudder.
as we soon discover(ed).
As always, just suggestions, Tony.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 03-Feb-2017
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Many thanks for your most useful comments about this section, Karyn. I was in two minds about whether to use the present or past tense and, as you have so accurately pointed out, I've ended up with an unfortunate mixture!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Such a complex variety of sights in this chapter Tony from the beauty of the tiny hummingbird feeding to the colourful market place. Then the beyond expected service of the people to return the credit card to the soldiers. Very interesting, and a great read,
cheers.
valda
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Such a complex variety of sights in this chapter Tony from the beauty of the tiny hummingbird feeding to the colourful market place. Then the beyond expected service of the people to return the credit card to the soldiers. Very interesting, and a great read,
cheers.
valda
Comment Written 29-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2017
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Very many thanks for your kind response to Part 12, and the six-star rating, Valda. Both much appreciated! Best wishes, Tony
