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Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "haiku (flashy little frog)"A collection of haiku written by FanStory Poets
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Comment from Ric Myworld
I enjoyed your poem as always, and the bonus of watching the video about all the different frogs was very interesting. Now, I know better than to pick up and handle any frog with lots of color. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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I enjoyed your poem as always, and the bonus of watching the video about all the different frogs was very interesting. Now, I know better than to pick up and handle any frog with lots of color. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thanks for reading.
Comment from Mark Valentine
I poisoned a plum once, but I couldn't get my wife to eat it, I like the version you went with (though the variant works also). Poisoned aplomb works on a number of levels - the juxtaposition of elegant art and deadly venom - there's even a connection between the color plum and the frog's color. And then of course, there's that killer artwork. Nice
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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I poisoned a plum once, but I couldn't get my wife to eat it, I like the version you went with (though the variant works also). Poisoned aplomb works on a number of levels - the juxtaposition of elegant art and deadly venom - there's even a connection between the color plum and the frog's color. And then of course, there's that killer artwork. Nice
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thanks for reading, Mike.
I appreciate your thoughtful comments.
~Dean
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This is a most excellent haiku. We can always count on you to find the most unique creatures and this little guy is stunning. Everything is perfection in this well penned piece. I especially thought the satori brilliantly executed. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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This is a most excellent haiku. We can always count on you to find the most unique creatures and this little guy is stunning. Everything is perfection in this well penned piece. I especially thought the satori brilliantly executed. Well done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thanks, Monica.
~Dean
Comment from brenda bickers
Hi Dean,
I'll do the technical bit first. You have used only 14 of your allotted 17 syllables and under ten words to describe this wonderful haiku. Your haiku with the 4-7-4 line count delivers the first two lines smoothly and your satori definitely has that aha moment. Your presentation and font colour match the picture perfectly.
He certainly is to die for. What a beautiful colour and the markings are like abstract art carefully placed to attract and lure the admirer in for the kill.
We sure do live on a beautiful planet. No wonder we have never heard of him before. No one who has ever found him lived long enough to tell he was out there. lol
A great haiku and interesting note.
Brenda:))x
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Hi Dean,
I'll do the technical bit first. You have used only 14 of your allotted 17 syllables and under ten words to describe this wonderful haiku. Your haiku with the 4-7-4 line count delivers the first two lines smoothly and your satori definitely has that aha moment. Your presentation and font colour match the picture perfectly.
He certainly is to die for. What a beautiful colour and the markings are like abstract art carefully placed to attract and lure the admirer in for the kill.
We sure do live on a beautiful planet. No wonder we have never heard of him before. No one who has ever found him lived long enough to tell he was out there. lol
A great haiku and interesting note.
Brenda:))x
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thanks for reading, Brenda.
I appreciate your comments.
~Dean
Comment from Luna
Talk about the killer artwork, indeed! It almost (almost but not quite) obscures the lovely haiku that is represents. Loved it, Dean.
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Talk about the killer artwork, indeed! It almost (almost but not quite) obscures the lovely haiku that is represents. Loved it, Dean.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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He's a bright boy, this poisonous little frog, isn't he?
Thanks for reading, Jeni.
~Dean
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
flashy frog-
anuran art to die for
poisoned aplomb
cleverly thoughtout, Dean --
the frogs brightness has a deadly attraction
to the unwary.
Blessings,
Margaret
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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flashy frog-
anuran art to die for
poisoned aplomb
cleverly thoughtout, Dean --
the frogs brightness has a deadly attraction
to the unwary.
Blessings,
Margaret
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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it does, doesn't it? I hate to say it, but even I would be inclined to pick him up.
Of course, I'd regret my decision to do so almost immediately. LOL.
Thanks for reading, Margaret.
~Dean
Comment from Grasshopper2
Hi Dean,
Wow, what a beautiful frog! This gorgeous amphibian screams "look but don't touch!" The photo and colors add to the mood, and your syllable counts of 3 7 4 with a total of 14 are well below the 17 syllables and adhere to the traditional format of short/long/short. Your first two lines display a clear grammatical connection and reveal detailed imagery in the present tense. The haiku is an observation of a moment in time captured in nature. You show discipline with good choices of words and with a total word count of 9, you display excellent use in word economy. Your satori is Classic Dean with the ah-ha moment amplified. Your author notes add to the overall presentation. Another exceptionally well-written haiku.
The six stars are because I enjoyed the visual aspect as much if not more than the haiku itself and I learned a new word - anuran. Thank you, Mr. Macrabe for the education. This one goes in the book!
Blessings,
Grasshopper
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Hi Dean,
Wow, what a beautiful frog! This gorgeous amphibian screams "look but don't touch!" The photo and colors add to the mood, and your syllable counts of 3 7 4 with a total of 14 are well below the 17 syllables and adhere to the traditional format of short/long/short. Your first two lines display a clear grammatical connection and reveal detailed imagery in the present tense. The haiku is an observation of a moment in time captured in nature. You show discipline with good choices of words and with a total word count of 9, you display excellent use in word economy. Your satori is Classic Dean with the ah-ha moment amplified. Your author notes add to the overall presentation. Another exceptionally well-written haiku.
The six stars are because I enjoyed the visual aspect as much if not more than the haiku itself and I learned a new word - anuran. Thank you, Mr. Macrabe for the education. This one goes in the book!
Blessings,
Grasshopper
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Wow, Grasshopper 2. I certainly appreciate your enthusiasm.
This is the sort of excited reaction that all of us who write and labor endlessly over haiku hope for, but all too often never comes.
You have made my day, my friend, and I thank you for that.
~Deano-son
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To the contrary, you indeed made mine. Somehow I missed the discovery of this neon hippity-hoppity and am basking in visual nirvana.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I once heard that nature favors the plain. Anything beautiful is deadly. hmmmm, okay, that's definitely a recipe for a Dean poem. hahaha.
Beautifully scripted, my friend!
Rhonda
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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I once heard that nature favors the plain. Anything beautiful is deadly. hmmmm, okay, that's definitely a recipe for a Dean poem. hahaha.
Beautifully scripted, my friend!
Rhonda
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thanks for reading, Rhonda.
I appreciate your comments.
~Dean
Comment from Rasmine
Awesome! Simply Awesome! Poisoned dart frogs---I know they have those in the Amazon in South America. The poison was put on darts that they shot their enemies. (Maybe I'm wrong at the location). They are beautiful, aren't they? Like a beautiful woman assasin--HEHE.
There is a challenge? I'll look it up. I hope I can download TeamSpeak3--this is a cheap computer. If I do, I will see you and everyone tonight!
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Awesome! Simply Awesome! Poisoned dart frogs---I know they have those in the Amazon in South America. The poison was put on darts that they shot their enemies. (Maybe I'm wrong at the location). They are beautiful, aren't they? Like a beautiful woman assasin--HEHE.
There is a challenge? I'll look it up. I hope I can download TeamSpeak3--this is a cheap computer. If I do, I will see you and everyone tonight!
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Thank you, Rasmine.
I'm really glad that you enjoyed this and I appreciate your enthusiastic response, not to mention the six star rating.
The TeamSpeak3 client is a very small program and not intrusive at all to the other programs running on your computer.
My computer has very low RAM and runs TeamSpeak3 just fine.
Thanks so much again.
I hope to hear you there this evening.
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TY! I will be there. Haiku hugs back :P
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I can hardly wait! :)
Comment from Franklin Price
Well Dean you've done it again. I know Kermit is very pround. Not only is your Haiku what a Haiku should be, it is colorfully outstanding Your notes explain and define everything and morbid twist is right up your alley. Guess I'll just have to keep reading what you write. Thanks
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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Well Dean you've done it again. I know Kermit is very pround. Not only is your Haiku what a Haiku should be, it is colorfully outstanding Your notes explain and define everything and morbid twist is right up your alley. Guess I'll just have to keep reading what you write. Thanks
Comment Written 24-Jan-2017
reply by the author on 24-Jan-2017
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I hope so, Franklin. A LOT of research goes into these short poems, I can say that without reservation.
Not only do I hope to create a well written haiku, I also hope to entertain people and perhaps make them aware of strange and exotic creatures.
They are what they are.
Thanks again for reading.
~Dean
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It was my pleasure
